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Lake · 发表于: 星期二五月 08, 2007 4:05 pm 发表主题: Form

Form

In a vast field
that revives the spring weeds
a green grasshopper—
wearing his own suit
to conceal himself

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ZY · 发表于: 星期二五月 08, 2007 4:17 pm 发表主题:

almost feel like a Haiku, short, but vivid!

Nice contrast between vast field and small grasshopper.
Also nice is the link from spring to weeds to grasshopper.
Cheers!

博弈 · 发表于: 星期二五月 08, 2007 8:24 pm 发表主题:

nice one, I like the title: Form.
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Lake · 发表于: 星期三五月 09, 2007 8:27 am 发表主题:

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星子 · 发表于: 星期三五月 09, 2007 9:41 pm 发表主题:

wearing his own suit ?

I read a few times, a little confused.

Why? his own suit? does he have other choice? what is it?
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Lake · 发表于: 星期四五月 10, 2007 9:06 am 发表主题:

ZY · 发表于: 星期四五月 10, 2007 9:56 am 发表主题:

A little further discussion.

I think Xing-zhi actually brought up a very interesting point.

One can look at this in 2 ways:

1. The green suit of the grasshopper, from an evolution perspective, in fact, is a result of "selection". (I may be going way out on this.) And so, a choice in buried down there.

2. I think it is possible to read this poem and get a sense that the grasshopper is hiding inside/hiding from spring. This potential ambiguity brings some richness to the reading experience.

On another point, the word "wearing" also is ambiguous--wear, as in "wear and tear". That reading further connects to my earlier point on the interaction between spring and the role of the grasshopper.

I may be reading too much into it. But, hey, I believe once a text is done, it is up to the reader to create his/her own reading experience.

Cheers.

Lake · 发表于: 星期四五月 10, 2007 11:53 am 发表主题:

ZY,

I’m overwhelmed by your interpretations. I always think my poems are as simple as ABC, now with your scrutiny it has multi-meanings.
“wear and tear”, that’s a very imaginative way of thinking, maybe that’s me or can be anybody or anything, you figure. Wink

再戏作一首：

Green green!
green green green!
green green!
green green green!
green green, the grass!

Laughing

Many thanks!

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anna · Site Admin 注册时间: 2004-05-02 帖子: 7141

Thanks Lake....

You know sometimes I really need to retreat... then read it again...

I am still not in the right mood... though in logical I understand...
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Lake · 发表于: 星期三五月 16, 2007 9:54 am 发表主题:

Lake · 发表于: 星期三五月 23, 2007 2:15 pm 发表主题:

Comments from others:

Tony: A lovely look at nature, and the way even the smallest animals, like insects, just blend right in. Beautiful!

Ann: Lake, I think this is applicable to many things, to people too. An interesting exploration of form/appearance, and I got the impression the poem questions why. Could be totally off the mark here, but hey.

Linda: Lake: A waka...on purpose? Nice turn in the center. I like it very much.

Tink：Lake, Your little poem paints a picture of the grasshopper blending with the blades of grass. I picture him almost chuckling over his own cleverness, very nice.

Kokho:Good works ... this is a parable!

Thank you all, much appreciated!

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