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[ericcoliu]

Reading and Writing: Life on the Page


A slip of the moon

hangs over my house.
I stand alone
beneath the bright moonshine.

Raising my cup,
I entice the moon;
her reflection of you and me
make us three.

Yes, the moon knows
you are far away
yet near to me.



Note:

This poem is my reply to My Soul Dances After Rain, a poem posted on CREATIVE VISUALIZATION forum of Wild Poetry Forum and written by my Turkish poetess friend, Nia Sunset.

What follows is Nia's poem:

The moon
dances after rain
everything
turns into night
blue now
so fast
so slow
so far
so near
but the moon knows
I love you.
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Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul

[[ericcoliu]]

Reading and Writing: Life on the Page


A slip of the moon

hangs over my house.
I stand alone
beneath the bright moonshine.

Raising my cup,
I entice the moon;
her reflection of you and me
make us three.

Yes, the moon knows
you are far away
yet near to me.



Note:

This poem is my reply to My Soul Dances After Rain, a poem posted on CREATIVE VISUALIZATION forum of Wild Poetry Forum and written by my Turkish poetess friend, Nia Sunset.

What follows is Nia's poem:

The moon
dances after rain
everything
turns into night
blue now
so fast
so slow
so far
so near
but the moon knows
I love you.
_________________
Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul

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[Lake]

Hi Eric,

The reason I'm not so keen on this is because the wordings and idea are too familiar especially to the Chinese ears.

Hope you're not offended.

BTW, I know nia, such a sweet lady.

Cheers,

Lake

[[Lake]]

Hi Eric,

The reason I'm not so keen on this is because the wordings and idea are too familiar especially to the Chinese ears.

Hope you're not offended.

BTW, I know nia, such a sweet lady.

Cheers,

Lake

[ericcoliu]

[[ericcoliu]]

[Lake]

I'm relieved at your 'not at all'. Thanks.

It may sound weired that when I read something oriental from a westerner, my sense is sharp and elevated; on the contrary, when I read something oriental from an easterner, my sense becomes dull. Am I biased? Yes?

[[Lake]]

I'm relieved at your 'not at all'. Thanks.

It may sound weired that when I read something oriental from a westerner, my sense is sharp and elevated; on the contrary, when I read something oriental from an easterner, my sense becomes dull. Am I biased? Yes?

[ericcoliu]

[[ericcoliu]]

[ericcoliu]

[[ericcoliu]]

[佩玖]

化用别人的诗句或引用别人作品的内容倒是中国古典诗人常用的手法，用得好可以丰富诗的内涵，但应该尽量带出点新意才好。

[[佩玖]]

化用别人的诗句或引用别人作品的内容倒是中国古典诗人常用的手法，用得好可以丰富诗的内涵，但应该尽量带出点新意才好。

[anna]

[[星子安娜]]

[ericcoliu]

[[ericcoliu]]

[anna]

Hi Eric,

I don't want to say more as my other discussion with you before.

I just wonder why you think others didn't read the comments and post their comments. Why you don't listen to what they feel about your poem? instead, ask others to be a good reader, and to follow your intention?

In the real life, a good poem will do its own trick.

But anyway, different people like different poems. So for me, it is ok, if some like mine and others don't.

I think I am a good listener in the case of my revision of
http://www.coviews.com/viewtopic.php?t=39799

or listen too much?
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Anna Yin

《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...

http://annapoetry.com

[[星子安娜]]

Hi Eric,

I don't want to say more as my other discussion with you before.

I just wonder why you think others didn't read the comments and post their comments. Why you don't listen to what they feel about your poem? instead, ask others to be a good reader, and to follow your intention?

In the real life, a good poem will do its own trick.

But anyway, different people like different poems. So for me, it is ok, if some like mine and others don't.

I think I am a good listener in the case of my revision of
http://www.coviews.com/viewtopic.php?t=39799

or listen too much?
_________________
---------------------

Anna Yin

《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...

http://annapoetry.com

[ericcoliu]

Note:

This poem is my reply to My Soul Dances After Rain, a poem posted on CREATIVE VISUALIZATION forum of Wild Poetry Forum and written by my Turkish poetess friend, Nia Sunset.

I just ask you one honest question: did you read Nia's poem and make a comparative reading of my poem and Li's (since you commented that there is nothing new in my poem) before you make any comment? I think I deserve an honest answer from you because the effort I've put and the time I've spent on this forum.

In my poem, I employed the ‘intertextual reference” technique, a literary device. Did you notice that? That is the big difference between text and context.
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Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul

[[ericcoliu]]

Note:

This poem is my reply to My Soul Dances After Rain, a poem posted on CREATIVE VISUALIZATION forum of Wild Poetry Forum and written by my Turkish poetess friend, Nia Sunset.

I just ask you one honest question: did you read Nia's poem and make a comparative reading of my poem and Li's (since you commented that there is nothing new in my poem) before you make any comment? I think I deserve an honest answer from you because the effort I've put and the time I've spent on this forum.

In my poem, I employed the ‘intertextual reference” technique, a literary device. Did you notice that? That is the big difference between text and context.
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Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul

[ericcoliu]

[[ericcoliu]]

[anna]

Hi Eric,

I mentioned it before that I fear to say too much to offend others.

So I better say less.

In fact, if I don't like the poem, I will not try to figure it out.

For me, I feel you study too much others thus your mind is full of others'.

It is like a cup full of water, so your own images or creativity cannot be there.

I didn't notice you employed the ‘intertextual reference” technique, a literary device. For me, I don't like one depends on the techinque, that is why I don't like to read academic writings too.

What I think in this poem, it refers too much to LiBai's poem, thus your own thought was drawn.
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Anna Yin

《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...

http://annapoetry.com

[[星子安娜]]

Hi Eric,

I mentioned it before that I fear to say too much to offend others.

So I better say less.

In fact, if I don't like the poem, I will not try to figure it out.

For me, I feel you study too much others thus your mind is full of others'.

It is like a cup full of water, so your own images or creativity cannot be there.

I didn't notice you employed the ‘intertextual reference” technique, a literary device. For me, I don't like one depends on the techinque, that is why I don't like to read academic writings too.

What I think in this poem, it refers too much to LiBai's poem, thus your own thought was drawn.
_________________
---------------------

Anna Yin

《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...

http://annapoetry.com

[ericcoliu]

Again,
I just ask you one honest question: did you read Nia's poem and make a comparative reading of my poem and Li's before you make any comment? I think I deserve an honest answer from you because the effort I've put and the time I've spent on this forum.

If you did read them before you commented my poem, I want to make a sincere apology to you.

Now, I just want an honest answer from you, an answer from the bottom of your heart which can make you sleep peacefully.
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Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul

[[ericcoliu]]

Again,
I just ask you one honest question: did you read Nia's poem and make a comparative reading of my poem and Li's before you make any comment? I think I deserve an honest answer from you because the effort I've put and the time I've spent on this forum.

If you did read them before you commented my poem, I want to make a sincere apology to you.

Now, I just want an honest answer from you, an answer from the bottom of your heart which can make you sleep peacefully.
_________________
Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul