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[ZY]

until the day, I shall sing on
an old ragged tune, only
to the returning vagabonds
who still my sorrow bear, fondly.

up the hills, they trudge on, 'round trails long-ignored
where mid-autumn dews the frosty moonlight deflect.
and up the hills they clamber, their panting quickly lost
as burnt memories of a stormy night their eyes reflect.

until the day, I shall cling on
to a piece of wintry sky, surrounded by craggy hillsides.
the nomads will the pasture desert and the leaves my window sill cover.
she roams the far valleys, will, across the plains, carry on.

4/11/2007

[[ZY]]

until the day, I shall sing on
an old ragged tune, only
to the returning vagabonds
who still my sorrow bear, fondly.

up the hills, they trudge on, 'round trails long-ignored
where mid-autumn dews the frosty moonlight deflect.
and up the hills they clamber, their panting quickly lost
as burnt memories of a stormy night their eyes reflect.

until the day, I shall cling on
to a piece of wintry sky, surrounded by craggy hillsides.
the nomads will the pasture desert and the leaves my window sill cover.
she roams the far valleys, will, across the plains, carry on.

4/11/2007

[Lake]

lyrical, a touch of classical. good mastery of english language.

not quite sure where "she" in the last line comes from.

[[Lake]]

lyrical, a touch of classical. good mastery of english language.

not quite sure where "she" in the last line comes from.

[ZY]

Thanks for your kind comments.

"she", of course, is an unspecified someone or something that is at a distance.
might have been a bit abrupt, having no inkling earlier in the poem. I thought about that, and decided that a bit of free-association can be part of it.
Thanks.

[[ZY]]

Thanks for your kind comments.

"she", of course, is an unspecified someone or something that is at a distance.
might have been a bit abrupt, having no inkling earlier in the poem. I thought about that, and decided that a bit of free-association can be part of it.
Thanks.

[Lake]

[[Lake]]

[anna]

until the day, I shall sing on
an old ragged tune, only
to the returning vagabonds
who still my sorrow bear, fondly.


---I read as:

till that day, I shall sing on
an old ragged tune

vagabonds here is noun or?

who still be my sorrow bear, may be?

I am a little lost....

Thanks for sharing your poem
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Anna Yin

《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...

http://annapoetry.com

[[星子安娜]]

until the day, I shall sing on
an old ragged tune, only
to the returning vagabonds
who still my sorrow bear, fondly.


---I read as:

till that day, I shall sing on
an old ragged tune

vagabonds here is noun or?

who still be my sorrow bear, may be?

I am a little lost....

Thanks for sharing your poem
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Anna Yin

《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...

http://annapoetry.com

[ZY]

Hi anna,

the "tune" is the dierect object of the verb "sing", and "vagabonds" (yes, a noun here) is the indirect object.

Also, I think you mis-read the other line (with an extra "be").

Thanks for your reading.

ZY

[[ZY]]

Hi anna,

the "tune" is the dierect object of the verb "sing", and "vagabonds" (yes, a noun here) is the indirect object.

Also, I think you mis-read the other line (with an extra "be").

Thanks for your reading.

ZY

[星子]

I see.

"still" is verb...not adverb

Thanks.
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[[ANNA]]

I see.

"still" is verb...not adverb

Thanks.
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[ZY]

星子,

Not exactly, the line "who still my sorrow bear" is in reversed word order, from: "who still bear my sorrow".

Thanks.

ZY

[[ZY]]

星子,

Not exactly, the line "who still my sorrow bear" is in reversed word order, from: "who still bear my sorrow".

Thanks.

ZY

[星子]

谢谢...我不太习惯这样的读序,,,不过,你自己喜欢就行
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[[ANNA]]

谢谢...我不太习惯这样的读序,,,不过,你自己喜欢就行
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