酷我-北美枫

[星子]

Two dozen poems by Tu Fu

Translated by James Deahl

Remembering My Brothers

No one dares travel when drums beat to warn
The enemy is near. Only a wild goose
Crosses this frontier as moonlight whitens
The dew blanketing my old village.

Displaced by invaders, my brothers scatter.
I don't know if they are alive or dead!
No letters arrive. Our land's swept by war;
Armies come and go like the autumn seas.

月夜忆舍弟

戍鼓断人行，秋边一雁声。
露从今夜白，月是故乡明。
有弟皆分散，无家问死生。
寄书长不达，况乃未休兵。
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[[ANNA]]

Two dozen poems by Tu Fu

Translated by James Deahl

Remembering My Brothers

No one dares travel when drums beat to warn
The enemy is near. Only a wild goose
Crosses this frontier as moonlight whitens
The dew blanketing my old village.

Displaced by invaders, my brothers scatter.
I don't know if they are alive or dead!
No letters arrive. Our land's swept by war;
Armies come and go like the autumn seas.

月夜忆舍弟

戍鼓断人行，秋边一雁声。
露从今夜白，月是故乡明。
有弟皆分散，无家问死生。
寄书长不达，况乃未休兵。
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[星子]

Yo-yang Tower

So long have I wanted to see Lake Tung-ting;
Now alone, I climb its tower. Wu spreads far
To the east, Ch'u to the south -- all Heaven
And earth drift as far as failing eyes can see.

No news of friends or family reaches me here,
Sick and old, I've only this worn boat left.
On our northern frontier war rages, and I
Do nothing but lean on this railing and weep.

登岳阳楼

昔闻洞庭水，今上岳阳楼。
吴楚东南坼，乾坤日夜浮。
亲朋无一字，老病有孤舟。
戎马关山北，凭轩涕泗流。
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[[ANNA]]

Yo-yang Tower

So long have I wanted to see Lake Tung-ting;
Now alone, I climb its tower. Wu spreads far
To the east, Ch'u to the south -- all Heaven
And earth drift as far as failing eyes can see.

No news of friends or family reaches me here,
Sick and old, I've only this worn boat left.
On our northern frontier war rages, and I
Do nothing but lean on this railing and weep.

登岳阳楼

昔闻洞庭水，今上岳阳楼。
吴楚东南坼，乾坤日夜浮。
亲朋无一字，老病有孤舟。
戎马关山北，凭轩涕泗流。
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[星子]

请喜欢分析,比较一下....
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[[ANNA]]

请喜欢分析,比较一下....
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[kokho]

古诗的翻译　。。。　隔鞋搔痒　：））

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乒乓、摄影、诗歌

[[晓辉]]

古诗的翻译　。。。　隔鞋搔痒　：））

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乒乓、摄影、诗歌

[博弈]

All translated depict not a classic
That we have known, and we still do
For all together define the classic
We appreciate beauty in endeavor
And I, for one, applaud such effort

These are open form translations.
I love it. It defies and conforms to
Rules of old English poetics.
Depending on how much was
Comprehended by the writer, the
Translated can have more, or less.
Yet, it is a vehicle runs back and
Forth, to convey the East to the West
And to know the West from the East
Or, as well the other way around.

邀请西方人士翻译中文诗，鼓掌。
这是一个双向的交流，很好的呀！
选择以五音步来翻五言诗，虽较
松散，但也是一个很好的风格。
一般（学究观念）以为五步翻
七言，四步翻五言。还翻韵与对仗。
他这样的形式，我反觉得清新自然。
也比较现代。翻译可以有许多形式，
我还没见到以诗的相对应年代语言
来翻的，那也会很有趣；不是么？
这样的译诗，或许更能打入大众。
所有的翻译共同塑造了原诗的形象。

1) 月夜忆舍弟

The frontier drums halt passers-by
In autumn drops a wild goose’s cry
The dew turns white frost since this night
The moon seems brighter in home sky
I’ve brothers scattered all around
No home to know they live or die
My letters seem far to reach them
Besides, the war still rages high.

(excerpt from a book by 施颖洲, I have
To type the above, for it can’t be googled.)

2）登岳阳楼


坼字味道没翻出来，也难翻就是。

（下整理转贴，供理解参考）
登岳阳楼
昔闻洞庭水，今上岳阳楼。吴楚东南坼，乾坤日夜浮。
亲朋无一字，老病有孤舟。戎马关山北，凭轩涕泗流。

很早听过名扬海内的洞庭湖，今日有幸登上湖边的岳阳楼。大湖浩瀚象把吴楚东南隔开，天地象在湖面日夜荡漾漂浮。漂泊江湖亲朋故旧不寄一字，年老体弱生活在这一叶孤舟。关山以北战争烽火仍未止息，凭窗遥望胸怀家国涕泪交流。

代宗大历三年（７６８）之后，杜甫出峡漂泊两湖，此诗是登岳阳楼而望故乡，触景感怀之作。开头写早闻洞庭盛名，然而到幕年才实现目睹名湖的愿望，表面看有初登岳阳楼之喜悦，其实意在抒发早年抱负至今未能实现之情。二联是洞庭的浩瀚无边。三联写政治生活坎坷，漂泊天涯，怀才不遇的心情。末联写眼望国家动荡不安，自己报国无门的哀伤。写景虽只二句，却显技巧精湛，抒情虽暗淡落寞，却吞吐自然，毫不费力。

或者，下述有更详细的解析；
http://www.ywzk.com/readarticle/htm/57/2004_9_11_2768.html
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Sometimes I am busy
Sometimes I am free
In between, there's it
Until I find thee...

[[Mark]]

All translated depict not a classic
That we have known, and we still do
For all together define the classic
We appreciate beauty in endeavor
And I, for one, applaud such effort

These are open form translations.
I love it. It defies and conforms to
Rules of old English poetics.
Depending on how much was
Comprehended by the writer, the
Translated can have more, or less.
Yet, it is a vehicle runs back and
Forth, to convey the East to the West
And to know the West from the East
Or, as well the other way around.

邀请西方人士翻译中文诗，鼓掌。
这是一个双向的交流，很好的呀！
选择以五音步来翻五言诗，虽较
松散，但也是一个很好的风格。
一般（学究观念）以为五步翻
七言，四步翻五言。还翻韵与对仗。
他这样的形式，我反觉得清新自然。
也比较现代。翻译可以有许多形式，
我还没见到以诗的相对应年代语言
来翻的，那也会很有趣；不是么？
这样的译诗，或许更能打入大众。
所有的翻译共同塑造了原诗的形象。

1) 月夜忆舍弟

The frontier drums halt passers-by
In autumn drops a wild goose’s cry
The dew turns white frost since this night
The moon seems brighter in home sky
I’ve brothers scattered all around
No home to know they live or die
My letters seem far to reach them
Besides, the war still rages high.

(excerpt from a book by 施颖洲, I have
To type the above, for it can’t be googled.)

2）登岳阳楼


坼字味道没翻出来，也难翻就是。

（下整理转贴，供理解参考）
登岳阳楼
昔闻洞庭水，今上岳阳楼。吴楚东南坼，乾坤日夜浮。
亲朋无一字，老病有孤舟。戎马关山北，凭轩涕泗流。

很早听过名扬海内的洞庭湖，今日有幸登上湖边的岳阳楼。大湖浩瀚象把吴楚东南隔开，天地象在湖面日夜荡漾漂浮。漂泊江湖亲朋故旧不寄一字，年老体弱生活在这一叶孤舟。关山以北战争烽火仍未止息，凭窗遥望胸怀家国涕泪交流。

代宗大历三年（７６８）之后，杜甫出峡漂泊两湖，此诗是登岳阳楼而望故乡，触景感怀之作。开头写早闻洞庭盛名，然而到幕年才实现目睹名湖的愿望，表面看有初登岳阳楼之喜悦，其实意在抒发早年抱负至今未能实现之情。二联是洞庭的浩瀚无边。三联写政治生活坎坷，漂泊天涯，怀才不遇的心情。末联写眼望国家动荡不安，自己报国无门的哀伤。写景虽只二句，却显技巧精湛，抒情虽暗淡落寞，却吞吐自然，毫不费力。

或者，下述有更详细的解析；
http://www.ywzk.com/readarticle/htm/57/2004_9_11_2768.html
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Sometimes I am busy
Sometimes I am free
In between, there's it
Until I find thee...

[星子]

谢谢博弈....

JAMES ,很多老外诗人都推荐他的翻译. 我也比较喜欢他的风格...很有特点.

他请我为他的书写了REVIEW...(这几首是从中摘选的)

http://www.coviews.com/weblog_entry.php?e=1589
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[[ANNA]]

谢谢博弈....

JAMES ,很多老外诗人都推荐他的翻译. 我也比较喜欢他的风格...很有特点.

他请我为他的书写了REVIEW...(这几首是从中摘选的)

http://www.coviews.com/weblog_entry.php?e=1589
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[Lake]

"隔鞋搔痒", 咱也不痛不痒贴一帖.

Translation from "The New Directions Anthology of Classical Chinese Poetry" by David Hinton:

MOONLIT NIGHT THINKING OF MY BROTHERS

Warning drums have ended all travel.
A lone goose cries across autumn
Borderlands. White Dew begins tonight,
This bright moon bright there, over

My old village. My scattered brothers--
And no home to ask Are they alive or dead?
Letters never arrive. War comes
And goes--then comes like this again.

Lake 觉得此译文似更简洁, Lake 还喜欢 此处的 run-on lines.

也佩服施颖洲先生的译文, it rhymes and meters.
The only thing is that it sounds like a sing-song.

[[Lake]]

"隔鞋搔痒", 咱也不痛不痒贴一帖.

Translation from "The New Directions Anthology of Classical Chinese Poetry" by David Hinton:

MOONLIT NIGHT THINKING OF MY BROTHERS

Warning drums have ended all travel.
A lone goose cries across autumn
Borderlands. White Dew begins tonight,
This bright moon bright there, over

My old village. My scattered brothers--
And no home to ask Are they alive or dead?
Letters never arrive. War comes
And goes--then comes like this again.

Lake 觉得此译文似更简洁, Lake 还喜欢 此处的 run-on lines.

也佩服施颖洲先生的译文, it rhymes and meters.
The only thing is that it sounds like a sing-song.

[老哈]

学习，学习，再学习！
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掠过天堂刹那间的感觉

[[老哈]]

学习，学习，再学习！
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掠过天堂刹那间的感觉

[anna]

Thanks Lake... Great.

printed both of yours and 博弈,

还是喜欢施的

Thanks 老哈...
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Anna Yin

《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...

http://annapoetry.com

[[星子安娜]]

Thanks Lake... Great.

printed both of yours and 博弈,

还是喜欢施的

Thanks 老哈...
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Anna Yin

《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...

http://annapoetry.com

[戴玨]

[[Edgar]]

[戴玨]

[[Edgar]]

[星子]

多谢戴老师和博学的指教....
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[[ANNA]]

多谢戴老师和博学的指教....
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