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anna[星子安娜] anna作品集 Site Admin
注册时间: 2004-05-02 帖子: 7141
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发表于: 星期一 十二月 20, 2010 9:11 am 发表主题: Thank you for being good (For my son's birthday) |
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Today is the day you will turn to ten,
you remind us of joy and gratitude again.
Your IPad will arrive,
we stay at fallsview hotel and play.
Your buddies show up splashing,
chess, all sharing cake and making faces.
Your birthday is full of happiness and surprises,
Friends and families enjoy the special memory.
Life is full of adventures,
we have gone through ups and downs.
No matter what happened in the past,
We have witnessed your great growth.
Your teachers summarize: you are sweet and smart.
Your classmates smile with your support and kindness.
Your teams rely on your fairness and diligence.
Your own self stands up for peace and integrity.
We celebrate your birthday with joy and fun,
and thank you for being good all year long,
But I want to tell you, my dear one,
All we love is who you are,
believe in yourself and be proud and happy.
----(Dec 23/2010) _________________ ---------------------
Anna Yin
《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...
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Lake[Lake] Lake作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2006-10-10 帖子: 1341 来自: Sky Blue Water
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发表于: 星期六 十二月 25, 2010 4:35 pm 发表主题: |
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Hello,
It seems that your son is all-rounded. Best wishes!
A few typos, maybe.
引用: | We celebrate your birthday will joy and fun,
and thank you for being good all year along,
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with joy and fun?
all year long?
I think stanza 2 can go away, since it is too general.
Happy holidays!
Lake |
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星子[ANNA] 星子作品集 酷我!I made it!
注册时间: 2004-06-05 帖子: 13192 来自: Toronto
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发表于: 星期日 十二月 26, 2010 10:02 am 发表主题: |
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Hi Lake,
Merry Christmas.
Yes. it is typo.
The whole poem I am not satisfied, it is a little void. I will think it over. _________________
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