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星子 · 发表于: 星期二十二月 30, 2008 9:18 am 发表主题: Bait

The resort agent looks nervous,
apologizes to us a few times.
When settling us down,
she inquires us about our purpose.

It is obvious, like many others,
we are all hooked with promises.
Yet we keep white butterflies to ourselves,
and nod to her serious and diligent talks.

"Sorry, lady…” I utter our unwelcomed decision.
She shruggs, (must get used to)
her two jobs hardly meet ends for months.
But we spend savings on dreams
and soon will go back home.
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星子 · 发表于: 星期三十二月 31, 2008 9:27 am 发表主题:

Someone complains this lack of images.

I wonder if I need.
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星子 · 发表于: 星期四一月 01, 2009 10:01 am 发表主题:

Revised it again

Her slim fingers crossed,
the resort agent darts a silent glance at us.
Her smiles suddenly bloom.
Seating us in the corner,
she asks us about our purpose.

It is obvious, like white butterflies
fluttering in the web,
we are hooked with promises.
Her tongue grows an apple tree,
with fruits in sight.

But our firm decision cuts down her growth.
She shrugs, wondering
when her two jobs could meet her ends.
Through the tangling web,
we grasp our savings –
Out of fantasy, we must go home.
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Lake · 发表于: 星期五一月 02, 2009 11:47 am 发表主题:

I feel it has a big title but a small event.

Happy New year.

anna · Site Admin 注册时间: 2004-05-02 帖子: 7141

Hi Lake,

Happy New Year!

I know the title let readers think of the Big Bail-out.

though it is about a bait which I feel when I go to take a tour for timeshare.

I may change it to Bait out

Anna
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