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Lake[Lake] Lake作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2006-10-10 帖子: 1341 来自: Sky Blue Water
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发表于: 星期二 七月 15, 2008 10:52 pm 发表主题: mini poems |
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rain
drops on the window
sound of music
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Silhouettes
against the sky
burning sea
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at dawn
flowers raise their heads
shaking off dewdrops
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adventure beckons-
untrodden road
enticing
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again pain -
time to clean up
fresh mind
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without the moon
water stops singing
stillness
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petals drift away
as swift as a night-
blooming cereus
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leftover snow
gives way -
new grass
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another rhythm
birds sing to flowers again
another spring
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shadow
grows larger and larger –
shadowless |
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星子[ANNA] 星子作品集 酷我!I made it!
注册时间: 2004-06-05 帖子: 13192 来自: Toronto
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发表于: 星期三 七月 16, 2008 10:33 am 发表主题: |
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10 is very good. _________________
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christine[christine] christine作品集 四品府丞 (封疆大吏也!)
注册时间: 2008-02-25 帖子: 304
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发表于: 星期三 七月 16, 2008 6:57 pm 发表主题: Re: mini poems |
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Lake 写到: |
10
shadow
grows larger and larger –
shadowless |
Poem 10 is phenomenally interestingly and philosophically inclined. |
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非马[FFFFFF] 非马作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2005-10-15 帖子: 1053
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发表于: 星期三 七月 16, 2008 11:10 pm 发表主题: |
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I too like #10. |
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Lake[Lake] Lake作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2006-10-10 帖子: 1341 来自: Sky Blue Water
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发表于: 星期三 七月 16, 2008 11:41 pm 发表主题: |
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Thank you all. If there is one or two out of ten are acceptable, I'm happy. Since all of you think #10 is a good one, then it must be good.
christine, your three -lys are difficult to achieve.
Thanks again. |
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robarts[robarts] robarts作品集 六品通判 (官儿做大了,保持廉洁哦)
注册时间: 2008-03-24 帖子: 114 来自: Canada
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发表于: 星期四 七月 17, 2008 2:45 pm 发表主题: Re: mini poems |
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christine 写到: |
Poem 10 is phenomenally interestingly and philosophically inclined. |
Lake 写到: |
christine, your three -lys are difficult to achieve.
Thanks again. |
Maybe what she/he means is that poem 10 is phenomenally interesting and philosophically inclined.
Lake 写到: |
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Silhouettes
against the sky
burning sea
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I like the imagery of poem 2. _________________ If one cannot enjoy reading a book over and over again, there is no use in reading it at all. |
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Champagne[Champagne] Champagne作品集 四品府丞 (封疆大吏也!)
注册时间: 2007-09-15 帖子: 394 来自: Nowhere & Everywhere
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发表于: 星期四 七月 17, 2008 9:05 pm 发表主题: Re: mini poems |
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adventure beckons-
untrodden road
enticing
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Yes, I agree with you, completely.
Enticing to walk the untrodden path,
defusing fantasia and reality’s aftermath. _________________ I'm Champagne,
Bottled poetry with sparkling joy. |
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Lake[Lake] Lake作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2006-10-10 帖子: 1341 来自: Sky Blue Water
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发表于: 星期四 七月 17, 2008 10:15 pm 发表主题: |
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Thank you for your picks.
robarts, thanks for liking the images.
Champagne, thanks for your thought on this poem.
Appreciate,
Lake |
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