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博弈[Mark]
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二品总督
（刚入二品，小心做人）
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Layers of layered shadows inching in
Receptive neurons glass my membrane of memories
Love not women but the beauty
In art forms where thy faces, bodies
None but a vogue cubism plus
Real impressions I had collected
An old artist loves a young woman whose
Clitoris vibrates after guitar’s waving drops
Then—
I ignore the mortals, colors and see its continuity
ps. some thoughts reading some posts lately, a quick write
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anna[星子安娜]
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| 发表于: 星期四 四月 05, 2007 3:33 pm 发表主题: |
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haha..... You will miss your flight!
Wish you a wonderful trip!
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《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...
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Lake[Lake]
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二品总督
（刚入二品，小心做人）
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来自: Sky Blue Water
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| 发表于: 星期五 四月 06, 2007 1:11 pm 发表主题: Re: its continuity |
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| 引用: | 1 Layers of layered shadows inching in
2 Receptive neurons glass my membrane of memories
3 Love not women but the beauty
4 In art forms where thy faces, bodies
5 None but a vogue cubism plus
6 Real impressions I had collected
7 An old artist loves a young woman whose
8 Clitoris vibrates after guitar’s waving drops
9 Then—
10 I ignore the mortals, colors and see its continuity
ps. some thoughts reading some posts lately, a quick write |
Even though not knowing what posts broght you on what thoughts, it is a good wirte I think.
I like your word choice, rhythm and ideas in this poem, and also the way you blend art and women in it.
L1,2 very vivid depiction of the art work.
L3,4,5,6 speaker's concept of beauty--not women but the art form.
L7,8 sensual if not erotic.
L9,10 now what do I get? A mortal thing will die in dust, but art, beauty shall continue, immortalize.
希望没有曲解。But then so what?  |
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博弈[Mark]
博弈作品集
二品总督
（刚入二品，小心做人）
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来自: San Francisco
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| 发表于: 星期六 四月 28, 2007 8:51 pm 发表主题: Re: its continuity |
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Sometimes I am busy
Sometimes I am free
In between, there's it
Until I find thee...
最后进行编辑的是 博弈 on 星期六 四月 28, 2007 9:11 pm, 总计第 1 次编辑 |
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博弈[Mark]
博弈作品集
二品总督
（刚入二品，小心做人）
注册时间: 2006-09-24
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来自: San Francisco
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| 发表于: 星期六 四月 28, 2007 9:10 pm 发表主题: Re: its continuity |
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| 博弈 写到: | | Lake 写到: | | 引用: | 1 Layers of layered shadows inching in
2 Receptive neurons glass my membrane of memories
3 Love not women but the beauty
4 In art forms where thy faces, bodies
5 None but a vogue cubism plus
6 Real impressions I had collected
7 An old artist loves a young woman whose
8 Clitoris vibrates after guitar’s waving drops
9 Then—
10 I ignore the mortals, colors and see its continuity
ps. some thoughts reading some posts lately, a quick write |
Even though not knowing what posts broght you on what thoughts, it is a good wirte I think.
I like your word choice, rhythm and ideas in this poem, and also the way you blend art and women in it.
L1,2 very vivid depiction of the art work.
L3,4,5,6 speaker's concept of beauty--not women but the art form.
L7,8 sensual if not erotic.
L9,10 now what do I get? A mortal thing will die in dust, but art, beauty shall continue, immortalize.
希望没有曲解。But then so what? |
LAKE 解诗日见功力，甚好。一般人看看就是了，不敢解，因为字眼（Clitoris）的关系。L3,4,5,6 （L5： None but a vogue cubism plus) 是第一层（对一般人而言可能已是第二层）， 因 vogue 亦只是一时。L7,8,9,10 进入下一层。Clitoris (A small elongated erectile organ at the anterior part of the vulva, homologous with the penis. ) 此处象征一个中心的极致的状态本质，young 是不能体会的 （that's why the word 'old'， 历尽人生的)。Young woman 象征纯真未污染的美。大致上是在诉求穿透表层寻找美的本质及永恒。或是穿透皮相及动态吧（guitar）。 |
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Lake[Lake]
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Keywords: “中心的极致的状态本质，纯真未污染的美。穿透表层寻找美的本质及永恒。穿透皮相及动态（guitar）。”
谢谢博弈的解析。 受益。
论坛上有几个作者的诗作确实把我 "折腾" 得够呛！
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