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[星子]

从唐朝到江南
大卫树

我一身富贵
随手就是唐朝
丟下李白
他喝醉了
今夜长安无眠

你品茶江南
抬眼满是桃花
挟着香风
我匆忙寻你
今夜紫禁茫然

千年,白衣只轻轻一飘耳

水和梦就漫过月光屋顶
时光之足湿遍

Petals' Verse

From Tang Dynast towards the south of the Yangtz River

Wealthy as I am,
I carry
the whole Tang Dynasty,
dropping down LI PO
who was drunk--
Chang An City, tonight, is sleepless.

You sip tea in the south
of the Yangtz River,
softly looking up, eyes full of peach blossom.
Among the fragrant breezes,
in haste, I search for you --
the Forbidden City, tonight, at a loss

Ah, a thousand years, pass swiftly as a white dress flying.

Streams and dreams overflow.
the moonlit roof,
inside, time's feet are submerged
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[[ANNA]]

从唐朝到江南
大卫树

我一身富贵
随手就是唐朝
丟下李白
他喝醉了
今夜长安无眠

你品茶江南
抬眼满是桃花
挟着香风
我匆忙寻你
今夜紫禁茫然

千年,白衣只轻轻一飘耳

水和梦就漫过月光屋顶
时光之足湿遍

Petals' Verse

From Tang Dynast towards the south of the Yangtz River

Wealthy as I am,
I carry
the whole Tang Dynasty,
dropping down LI PO
who was drunk--
Chang An City, tonight, is sleepless.

You sip tea in the south
of the Yangtz River,
softly looking up, eyes full of peach blossom.
Among the fragrant breezes,
in haste, I search for you --
the Forbidden City, tonight, at a loss

Ah, a thousand years, pass swiftly as a white dress flying.

Streams and dreams overflow.
the moonlit roof,
inside, time's feet are submerged
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[戴玨]

江南翻成了江南岸。
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[[Edgar]]

江南翻成了江南岸。
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我的blog:
http://blog.sina.com.cn/u/1310527443

[星子]

[[ANNA]]

[戴玨]

[[Edgar]]

[星子]

谢谢戴老师.

我再看看...我做事很快,但有个毛病,不是很有耐心.沉不住...
而且喜欢同时做几件事.

总是说忙,,,但也停不下来. 看来不是读书人所为...哈
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[[ANNA]]

谢谢戴老师.

我再看看...我做事很快,但有个毛病,不是很有耐心.沉不住...
而且喜欢同时做几件事.

总是说忙,,,但也停不下来. 看来不是读书人所为...哈
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[Lake]

You may all laugh at me, but here are a few questions I have on the original poem.

原文时空跨度大，潇洒、浪漫。

读现代诗，我常会碰到理解上的困难。如只是读原诗，个别字句不懂，也只求大意，读出诗之精神，有感觉，也就作罢。但要译诗则不同了，一定要有译者自己的理解（暂且不论对错）。如此，我的问题就来了。

1，从时空来看，从唐朝 长安城 到 明清抑或现在 紫禁城。但题目“从唐朝到江南 “，唐朝为时间概念（当然还包括其他内涵），而江南是个处所。给我的感觉如同说，从中世纪到尼亚加拉大瀑布。可以这样说吗？

2，“我一身富贵/随手就是唐朝/丟下李白”
“随手”，现代汉语词典释义为：顺手，顺便。如随手关门。那么，“随手就是唐朝"是什么意思呢？

如果只是我一个人有这样的疑问，那就只当是我个人的问题吧。
山城子老师和其他诗友如能在修辞或其他方面解释一二，帮助我提高鉴赏现代诗的能力，将不胜感激。

。

[[Lake]]

You may all laugh at me, but here are a few questions I have on the original poem.

原文时空跨度大，潇洒、浪漫。

读现代诗，我常会碰到理解上的困难。如只是读原诗，个别字句不懂，也只求大意，读出诗之精神，有感觉，也就作罢。但要译诗则不同了，一定要有译者自己的理解（暂且不论对错）。如此，我的问题就来了。

1，从时空来看，从唐朝 长安城 到 明清抑或现在 紫禁城。但题目“从唐朝到江南 “，唐朝为时间概念（当然还包括其他内涵），而江南是个处所。给我的感觉如同说，从中世纪到尼亚加拉大瀑布。可以这样说吗？

2，“我一身富贵/随手就是唐朝/丟下李白”
“随手”，现代汉语词典释义为：顺手，顺便。如随手关门。那么，“随手就是唐朝"是什么意思呢？

如果只是我一个人有这样的疑问，那就只当是我个人的问题吧。
山城子老师和其他诗友如能在修辞或其他方面解释一二，帮助我提高鉴赏现代诗的能力，将不胜感激。

。

[戴玨]

[[Edgar]]

[星子]

谈谈我的理解...

因为从论坛一开建以来,我是比较关注大卫树的诗歌...

也读过他不少同样风格的诗歌...他的这一组花瓣诗,是写爱情的...但他的爱情诗歌时空跨度很大...这也是感动我的地方.

我一身富贵
随手就是唐朝

应该连起来理解...我的想象是他潇洒富贵,随手就可以把唐朝风采展现...
下面几句的理解,我可能比较个人化一点....诗人也许在自喻或在引伸他可以舍弃的才华...

因为他想到了江南的爱人,寻不着,纵有千金,也是一城茫然.

结尾最妙....把时空和想往与现实很写意地延伸....表达无限的悲沧
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[[ANNA]]

谈谈我的理解...

因为从论坛一开建以来,我是比较关注大卫树的诗歌...

也读过他不少同样风格的诗歌...他的这一组花瓣诗,是写爱情的...但他的爱情诗歌时空跨度很大...这也是感动我的地方.

我一身富贵
随手就是唐朝

应该连起来理解...我的想象是他潇洒富贵,随手就可以把唐朝风采展现...
下面几句的理解,我可能比较个人化一点....诗人也许在自喻或在引伸他可以舍弃的才华...

因为他想到了江南的爱人,寻不着,纵有千金,也是一城茫然.

结尾最妙....把时空和想往与现实很写意地延伸....表达无限的悲沧
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[Lake]

[[Lake]]

[Lake]

[[Lake]]

[anna]

Thanks Lake.

You know it is always personal opinion about a poem.

But for translation, sometime I keep more conservative way.
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Anna Yin

《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...

http://annapoetry.com

[[星子安娜]]

Thanks Lake.

You know it is always personal opinion about a poem.

But for translation, sometime I keep more conservative way.
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Anna Yin

《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...

http://annapoetry.com

[anna]

From PenShell.


Ah, a thousand years, pass swiftly as a white dress flying

Streams and dreams overflow
the moonlit roof,
inside, [the] time's feet are submerged.

This is a jewel in itself. As an image, and a comment on human lives as ephemeral and transitory, it's totally wonderful. I would even suggest keeping this as its own poem, Anna. And this middle part - the searching part - is another fine poem, also self-contained.

You sip tea in the south
of the Yangtz River,
softly looking up, eyes full of peach blossom.
Among the fragrant breezes,
in haste, I search for you --
the Forbidden City, tonight, at a loss.

Just my take. Your translations are such a gift to the reader!

Brenda
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Anna Yin

《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...

http://annapoetry.com

[[星子安娜]]

From PenShell.


Ah, a thousand years, pass swiftly as a white dress flying

Streams and dreams overflow
the moonlit roof,
inside, [the] time's feet are submerged.

This is a jewel in itself. As an image, and a comment on human lives as ephemeral and transitory, it's totally wonderful. I would even suggest keeping this as its own poem, Anna. And this middle part - the searching part - is another fine poem, also self-contained.

You sip tea in the south
of the Yangtz River,
softly looking up, eyes full of peach blossom.
Among the fragrant breezes,
in haste, I search for you --
the Forbidden City, tonight, at a loss.

Just my take. Your translations are such a gift to the reader!

Brenda
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Anna Yin

《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...

http://annapoetry.com

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真是谢谢星子姐及诸君呀
大家讨论让我本人受益菲浅

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真是谢谢星子姐及诸君呀
大家讨论让我本人受益菲浅

[千年天问]

[[湖畔行吟]]

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