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不清 · 发表于: 星期六十二月 23, 2006 1:40 am 发表主题:

Happy holiday to you all too!

Technique is one thing, but ingredient is another! My point is more about ingredients rather than Poetry Technique

I don't remember when was the last time i saw a white horse on a green praire... Or when was the last time i sat down admiring the sunset! The last few lines where the poet used flower and moon to translate the sense of loneiness or deep though just don't cut it in my opinion. How many people nowaday would feel moved by looking at the moon?

It's easy for us as poets and poetry readers to understand the associations that are attempted! But for a person who's new to poetry let's say, he probabaly understand the meaning of cyber friendship way better than a group of friends sitting around a table under the moonlight, chating about literarture! As a person living in a city my whole life, I don't associate well with nature images. They are not real to me. I am not attached to those things. I think what i was trying to do is to encourage other poet to insert new found objects of the modern day into poetry. Instead of flower or moon... try to write about objects like computer, or even ipod; use a sewage / drain instead of a river for example to symbolize the feeling that we want to translate!

I guess it's an issue of "regionalism" also?? Life style differences from country to country, city to city. It's possible that the poet of this work lives in the countryside rather than in a metropolis. Maybe that's why I found this poem "unreal". It was pretending to be something, rather than attempting to be something!
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