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[ericcoliu]

Reading, Writing, and Life on the Page

The NeverEnding Story (A Writerly Poem)

Once there was a (or the) school.
In the school there was a (or the) classroom.
In the classroom there was a (or the) young teacher
Reciting a (or the) story:
'Once there was a (or the) school
In the school there was a (or the) classroom …’


Note:

I appropriate this title from a German fantasy novel by Michael Ende, a novel which has been adapted to the film, dramatic play, ballet, and operatic media and video game in different languages around the word. And Thank Anna for pointing out my mistake about the idea of "the writerly/readerly text."
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Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul

[[ericcoliu]]

Reading, Writing, and Life on the Page

The NeverEnding Story (A Writerly Poem)

Once there was a (or the) school.
In the school there was a (or the) classroom.
In the classroom there was a (or the) young teacher
Reciting a (or the) story:
'Once there was a (or the) school
In the school there was a (or the) classroom …’


Note:

I appropriate this title from a German fantasy novel by Michael Ende, a novel which has been adapted to the film, dramatic play, ballet, and operatic media and video game in different languages around the word. And Thank Anna for pointing out my mistake about the idea of "the writerly/readerly text."
_________________
Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul

[ericcoliu]

Which version do you like better? The “a” or “the” version, or a version with mixed usage of "a" and "the." Surely, you can write your own version of the poem. As the writer Ezra Pound once proclaimed, "Make it New!"


Ericcoliu's Version of The NeverEnding Story

Once there was a school.
In the school there was a classroom.
In the classroom there was a young teacher
Reciting a story:
'Once there was a school
In the school there was a classroom …’

(A teacher who believes in rote-memorization education)


Responses from My Fellow Writers:

Christine's Version of The NeverEnding Story

Once there was a school.
In the school there was the classroom.
In the classroom there was the young teacher
Reciting the story:
'Once there was a school
In the school there was the classroom …’

(A school of standardized education.)


温暖的水獸's Version of The NeverEnding Story

Once there was the school.
In the school there was the classroom.
In the classroom there was the old teacher
Reciting a story:
'Once there was the school
In the school there was the classroom …’

(The school of authoritarian education)

Dundas' Version of The NeverEnding Story:

Once there was a school.
In the school there was the classroom.
In the classroom there was the young teacher
Reciting the story:
'Once there was a school
In the school there was the classroom …’
All of a sudden, he was stuck in the middle of a sentence, and felt his heart beat slow and his brain freeze. Unexpectedly, he fell down on the floor. The silence seized the whole class; then they ran out of the classroom, yelling for help.

(The collapse of a school of standardized education)

浴恩福's Version of The NeverEnding Story:

Once there was a mountain.
In the mountain there was a rundown school.
In the school there were abandoned classrooms
Covered by unknown weeds.
Silence and nature took full control of them.

(The abandonment of a school of cram education portrayed in Chen Kaige's King of Children)
_________________
Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul

[[ericcoliu]]

Which version do you like better? The “a” or “the” version, or a version with mixed usage of "a" and "the." Surely, you can write your own version of the poem. As the writer Ezra Pound once proclaimed, "Make it New!"


Ericcoliu's Version of The NeverEnding Story

Once there was a school.
In the school there was a classroom.
In the classroom there was a young teacher
Reciting a story:
'Once there was a school
In the school there was a classroom …’

(A teacher who believes in rote-memorization education)


Responses from My Fellow Writers:

Christine's Version of The NeverEnding Story

Once there was a school.
In the school there was the classroom.
In the classroom there was the young teacher
Reciting the story:
'Once there was a school
In the school there was the classroom …’

(A school of standardized education.)


温暖的水獸's Version of The NeverEnding Story

Once there was the school.
In the school there was the classroom.
In the classroom there was the old teacher
Reciting a story:
'Once there was the school
In the school there was the classroom …’

(The school of authoritarian education)

Dundas' Version of The NeverEnding Story:

Once there was a school.
In the school there was the classroom.
In the classroom there was the young teacher
Reciting the story:
'Once there was a school
In the school there was the classroom …’
All of a sudden, he was stuck in the middle of a sentence, and felt his heart beat slow and his brain freeze. Unexpectedly, he fell down on the floor. The silence seized the whole class; then they ran out of the classroom, yelling for help.

(The collapse of a school of standardized education)

浴恩福's Version of The NeverEnding Story:

Once there was a mountain.
In the mountain there was a rundown school.
In the school there were abandoned classrooms
Covered by unknown weeds.
Silence and nature took full control of them.

(The abandonment of a school of cram education portrayed in Chen Kaige's King of Children)
_________________
Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul

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[星子]

Hi Eric,

This is like 中国儿谣,
从前有坐山,山上有个庙... 小时喜欢,现在不喜欢了.

很多故事和寓言富有哲理,所以才流传下来.
诗歌作为文学的提升,不仅需要哲理和寓意,还有感化和意境.


好奇地想问,这和我们小时听的从前有坐山,有什么区别呢?
只不过,一个在学校/教师,一个是庙/和尚 ?
_________________

[[ANNA]]

Hi Eric,

This is like 中国儿谣,
从前有坐山,山上有个庙... 小时喜欢,现在不喜欢了.

很多故事和寓言富有哲理,所以才流传下来.
诗歌作为文学的提升,不仅需要哲理和寓意,还有感化和意境.


好奇地想问,这和我们小时听的从前有坐山,有什么区别呢?
只不过,一个在学校/教师,一个是庙/和尚 ?
_________________

[ericcoliu]

[[ericcoliu]]

[ericcoliu]

Reading Is Writing

While reading a poem
The unwritten is a hidden text
A text between the lines of verse
When that text is grasped
By the mind’s eye of the reader
A companion poem comes into being
_________________
Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul

[[ericcoliu]]

Reading Is Writing

While reading a poem
The unwritten is a hidden text
A text between the lines of verse
When that text is grasped
By the mind’s eye of the reader
A companion poem comes into being
_________________
Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul

[星子]

Hi Eric,

It is ok if you use your way to write it. But I doubt most of the readers can get it even after reading a few times.

Just like some words, some people can align them in a special way and claim them in different meanings.

Some people maybe like this kind.

Any way, I wrote the above, because I find many of yours like this kind, do you agree?
_________________

[[ANNA]]

Hi Eric,

It is ok if you use your way to write it. But I doubt most of the readers can get it even after reading a few times.

Just like some words, some people can align them in a special way and claim them in different meanings.

Some people maybe like this kind.

Any way, I wrote the above, because I find many of yours like this kind, do you agree?
_________________

[ericcoliu]

[[ericcoliu]]

[ericcoliu]

Poem Text of We Real Cool by Gwendolyn Brooks

THE POOL PLAYERS.
SEVEN AT THE GOLDEN SHOVEL.


We real cool. We
Left school. We

Lurk late. We
Strike straight. We

Sing sin. We
Thin gin. We

Jazz June. We
Die soon.


Thank Lake for sharing this musically wonderful and politically conscientious poem by Gwendolyn Brooks.

"In stead of asking myself “They ain’t in school,” I wonder how they feel about themselves. Perhaps, they might consider themselves contemptuous of the establishment or at least they want to feel contemptuous of the establishment.”
Yes, well said.

I can’t believe that this poem, as Brooks has pointed out, has been banned here and there because of the word “jazz” which some people have considered as the sexual reference.

Hi! 星子, we’re hearing the young teacher reciting the story: The NeverEnding Story.

Now, maybe you have a different view about "这和我们小时听的从前有坐山,有什么区别呢?只不过,一个在学校/教师,一个是庙/和尚?"
_________________
Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul

[[ericcoliu]]

Poem Text of We Real Cool by Gwendolyn Brooks

THE POOL PLAYERS.
SEVEN AT THE GOLDEN SHOVEL.


We real cool. We
Left school. We

Lurk late. We
Strike straight. We

Sing sin. We
Thin gin. We

Jazz June. We
Die soon.


Thank Lake for sharing this musically wonderful and politically conscientious poem by Gwendolyn Brooks.

"In stead of asking myself “They ain’t in school,” I wonder how they feel about themselves. Perhaps, they might consider themselves contemptuous of the establishment or at least they want to feel contemptuous of the establishment.”
Yes, well said.

I can’t believe that this poem, as Brooks has pointed out, has been banned here and there because of the word “jazz” which some people have considered as the sexual reference.

Hi! 星子, we’re hearing the young teacher reciting the story: The NeverEnding Story.

Now, maybe you have a different view about "这和我们小时听的从前有坐山,有什么区别呢?只不过,一个在学校/教师,一个是庙/和尚?"
_________________
Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul

[anna]

Hi Eric,

I like to discuss.

Before I don't know what is the readerly/writerly text, now I google and found you may misunderstand these terms. since you said this one has many versions...and the same time, a readerly text.

[[星子安娜]]

Hi Eric,

I like to discuss.

Before I don't know what is the readerly/writerly text, now I google and found you may misunderstand these terms. since you said this one has many versions...and the same time, a readerly text.

[anna]

[[星子安娜]]

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