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Lake[Lake] Lake作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2006-10-10 帖子: 1341 来自: Sky Blue Water
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发表于: 星期一 十一月 17, 2008 3:23 pm 发表主题: red pin |
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red pin
pinched between
a thumb and forefinger
I’m pushed hard
onto a bulletin board
that reminds me of
my sole function -
to tack things together
as a reminder
if someone abuses me
sticking things
more than what
I could hold
(since I’m light weighted)
then nothing can stay
but fall off
like now
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ericcoliu[ericcoliu] ericcoliu作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2007-05-29 帖子: 1393 来自: GTA, Canada
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发表于: 星期三 十一月 19, 2008 5:10 pm 发表主题: Re: red pin |
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I enjoyed reading your personified "object poem" written from an eye-level perspective, one which is close to my heart.
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red pin
pinched between
a thumb and forefinger
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a thumb and forefinger
might be
the thumb and forefinger
or
thumb and forefinger _________________ Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul |
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非马[FAFAFA] 非马作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2005-10-15 帖子: 1053
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发表于: 星期六 十一月 22, 2008 9:45 pm 发表主题: |
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Agree with Eric. "a thumb and forefinger " seemed to jump out when I first read it. |
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robarts[robarts] robarts作品集 六品通判 (官儿做大了,保持廉洁哦)
注册时间: 2008-03-24 帖子: 114 来自: Canada
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发表于: 星期一 十一月 24, 2008 1:04 pm 发表主题: Re: red pin |
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Lake 写到: |
red pin
pinched between
a thumb and forefinger
I’m pushed hard
onto a bulletin board
that reminds me of
my sole function -
to tack things together
as a reminder
if someone abuses me
sticking things
more than what
I could hold
(since I’m light weighted)
then nothing can stay
but fall off
like now
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ericcoliu 写到: |
I enjoyed reading your personified "object poem" written from an eye-level perspective, one which is close to my heart.
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The reply to and the title of the poem are hinged on many interpretations. _________________ If one cannot enjoy reading a book over and over again, there is no use in reading it at all. |
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Lake[Lake] Lake作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2006-10-10 帖子: 1341 来自: Sky Blue Water
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发表于: 星期一 十一月 24, 2008 4:39 pm 发表主题: |
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Thanks Eric and Mr. Fei Ma for your suggestions.
Actually, I thought about the three options, then I chose the indefinite article "a", because I'm not specifying whose thumb/forefinger it is. so I'll go with "a".
Glad to see Mr. Fei Ma around and looking forward to more of your new poems.
Thanks,
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Lake[Lake] Lake作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2006-10-10 帖子: 1341 来自: Sky Blue Water
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发表于: 星期一 十一月 24, 2008 4:55 pm 发表主题: Re: red pin |
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The reply to and the title of the poem are hinged on many interpretations. |
Thanks robarts. I agree there are different interpretations which are up to the readers. Honestly, I didn't spend much time on it. Something triggered me so I just scribbled it down without even changing anything. Probably, it is just a rant.
Thanks again.
Lake |
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Lake[Lake] Lake作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2006-10-10 帖子: 1341 来自: Sky Blue Water
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发表于: 星期日 四月 12, 2009 5:08 pm 发表主题: |
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Bump! Shamelessly. |
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ericcoliu[ericcoliu] ericcoliu作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2007-05-29 帖子: 1393 来自: GTA, Canada
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发表于: 星期二 四月 14, 2009 3:24 pm 发表主题: |
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Lake 写到: | Bump! Shamelessly. |
Indeed!
Please read my latest post, Live Happily under The Red Flag: Getting Your Poems Published, which is written in response to some of the technical questions raised by you.
Any questions?
all ears
attuned to your words —
like ripples
chase the caress
of spring breeze
-- published in The Spring 2009 issue of Modern English Tanka
If there are no questions, let's start writing and get our poems published.
Then, each and every one of us can live happily Under the Red Flag. _________________ Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul |
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Lake[Lake] Lake作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2006-10-10 帖子: 1341 来自: Sky Blue Water
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发表于: 星期二 四月 14, 2009 3:43 pm 发表主题: Zen and the Art of Submitting Poetry |
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Zen and the Art of Submitting Poetry
- cameron
Rejection does not make you a bad poet.
Acceptance does not make you a good one.
Therefore, neither should trouble you.
Chase after fame, however, and you put your life
Into the hands of others:
They will tip you between hope and despair.
Aim, then, to be aimless.
Seek neither publication, nor acclaim:
Submit without submitting. |
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ericcoliu[ericcoliu] ericcoliu作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2007-05-29 帖子: 1393 来自: GTA, Canada
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发表于: 星期二 四月 14, 2009 3:52 pm 发表主题: |
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Then why whining? _________________ Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul |
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