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[anna]

[[星子安娜]]

[ericcoliu]

[[ericcoliu]]

[anna]

Hi Eric,

I guess you didn't get my point.

And I fear to say this for long time.

I always think your reviewing works are very good.

yet your poems lack some freshness and dynamic.

This is only my opinion. Others may disagree.

Writing is a long way to go for me, I keep reading and writing, but I will accept if I cannot go too far.

So far I still enjoy reading, writing and accepting comments in a good mood, not put myself in too much tense.

and I believe Dundus and others, you know them better than me.

If you really want to keep your dream: writing, I believe one day you will thank me for that, though now you are angry.
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Anna Yin

《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...

http://annapoetry.com

[[星子安娜]]

Hi Eric,

I guess you didn't get my point.

And I fear to say this for long time.

I always think your reviewing works are very good.

yet your poems lack some freshness and dynamic.

This is only my opinion. Others may disagree.

Writing is a long way to go for me, I keep reading and writing, but I will accept if I cannot go too far.

So far I still enjoy reading, writing and accepting comments in a good mood, not put myself in too much tense.

and I believe Dundus and others, you know them better than me.

If you really want to keep your dream: writing, I believe one day you will thank me for that, though now you are angry.
_________________
---------------------

Anna Yin

《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...

http://annapoetry.com

[ericcoliu]

[[ericcoliu]]

[anna]

BTW, I didn't copy the comments from "佩玖"..

I want to say the same a few days ago, but I thought better not to comment.

How to be a writer, I guess there are many ways to be.

Like some people ask me, how could you write poem in English? I guess sometimes they come to me.
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Anna Yin

《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...

http://annapoetry.com

[[星子安娜]]

BTW, I didn't copy the comments from "佩玖"..

I want to say the same a few days ago, but I thought better not to comment.

How to be a writer, I guess there are many ways to be.

Like some people ask me, how could you write poem in English? I guess sometimes they come to me.
_________________
---------------------

Anna Yin

《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...

http://annapoetry.com

[ericcoliu]

[[ericcoliu]]

[ericcoliu]

[[ericcoliu]]

[anna]

Good question.

To tell you the truth, when on the summer writing, I was amazed how many good writers there. It was like an open door and I felt the world so big, and I was smaller.

My circle of poet friends, I guess I don't question them, if you want, your choice. I respect them and I know most of them published poets.

In the summer school, I found many of mine, even published poems, still have room to improve. And I said to my mentor that I thank him for that change. I guess this is the main gain from the course.

Writing is a long time practise. As I said, now I enjoy life more, and put reading and writing in a good mood. In this way, no matter the result, I am in peace.
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Anna Yin

《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...

http://annapoetry.com

[[星子安娜]]

Good question.

To tell you the truth, when on the summer writing, I was amazed how many good writers there. It was like an open door and I felt the world so big, and I was smaller.

My circle of poet friends, I guess I don't question them, if you want, your choice. I respect them and I know most of them published poets.

In the summer school, I found many of mine, even published poems, still have room to improve. And I said to my mentor that I thank him for that change. I guess this is the main gain from the course.

Writing is a long time practise. As I said, now I enjoy life more, and put reading and writing in a good mood. In this way, no matter the result, I am in peace.
_________________
---------------------

Anna Yin

《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...

http://annapoetry.com

[ericcoliu]

[[ericcoliu]]

[Lake]

Oh, my! Did I stir up the controversy here? I feel terribly sorry for that. And it seems that the train is derailed. No?

I just want to clear up one thing ( again, my personal opinion only): overused expressions and ideas. They can be used, but better to be used in a new way (as Eric has already pointed in his response to mine), with something fresh and the result will be certainly, surprisingly pleasant.

They can also be used as references, too. Bashō, in his "Journey", referenced quite a lot of the works of the Chinese poets, but he made the notes for every quote used.

This type of writing might be a tribute, a praise, a response, an exchange, an inspiration... you name it.

I wanted to read Nia's poem to get a better understanding of Eric's poem here, say, the intertextual reference, followed the link and got lost. Time's precious, so I gave up. It might be helpful if the direct link of her poem is given or just copy her poem here if possible for the readers' convenience.

[[Lake]]

Oh, my! Did I stir up the controversy here? I feel terribly sorry for that. And it seems that the train is derailed. No?

I just want to clear up one thing ( again, my personal opinion only): overused expressions and ideas. They can be used, but better to be used in a new way (as Eric has already pointed in his response to mine), with something fresh and the result will be certainly, surprisingly pleasant.

They can also be used as references, too. Bashō, in his "Journey", referenced quite a lot of the works of the Chinese poets, but he made the notes for every quote used.

This type of writing might be a tribute, a praise, a response, an exchange, an inspiration... you name it.

I wanted to read Nia's poem to get a better understanding of Eric's poem here, say, the intertextual reference, followed the link and got lost. Time's precious, so I gave up. It might be helpful if the direct link of her poem is given or just copy her poem here if possible for the readers' convenience.

[Lake]

(continued)

Another thing I've found out is that one expression may sound trite to some readers but new to some other readers and vise versa (westerners vs. easterners).

And here is a lighthearted poem by one of my friends where you can see what words or expressions are regarded as clichés by his standard:

Putting a spoke in a Wheel of Clichés

Cloud burst
Rain fall
Mountain stream
Gurgling spring
Singing river
Ocean spray
Boiling sun
Water cycle
......

I can't help laughing... But he is so clever making a poem out of these phrases.

Another example: water ripples or rippling water (over used), but another friend wrote in his poem:


......
whispers ripple
through
the silver night

What do you think? I think it is marvelous.

And beware, when you are saying someone is using cliché, at the very moment you are probably doing the same thing. Me included. That's why we need a constant reminder, do we?

Did I make my point clear? Got to go.

[[Lake]]

(continued)

Another thing I've found out is that one expression may sound trite to some readers but new to some other readers and vise versa (westerners vs. easterners).

And here is a lighthearted poem by one of my friends where you can see what words or expressions are regarded as clichés by his standard:

Putting a spoke in a Wheel of Clichés

Cloud burst
Rain fall
Mountain stream
Gurgling spring
Singing river
Ocean spray
Boiling sun
Water cycle
......

I can't help laughing... But he is so clever making a poem out of these phrases.

Another example: water ripples or rippling water (over used), but another friend wrote in his poem:


......
whispers ripple
through
the silver night

What do you think? I think it is marvelous.

And beware, when you are saying someone is using cliché, at the very moment you are probably doing the same thing. Me included. That's why we need a constant reminder, do we?

Did I make my point clear? Got to go.

[ericcoliu]

[[ericcoliu]]

[ericcoliu]

[[ericcoliu]]

[温暖的水獸]

Hi! Eric:

I think everyone here is overwhelmed by you, Professor Literature:

Professor Eric Liu, PhD. in Literature,
Author of notes on this, comments on that,
And criticisms on every possible thing,
Except on life.


Please just shut your mouth and write your poems. I'll be your attentive and demanding reader.

A slip of the moon

hanging over my house,
I stand alone
beneath the bright moonshine.

Yes, the moon knows
you're both far away from
and so near to me.
[/quote]

My suggestions are as follows:


I hangs

II you are far away
yet near to me.
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舌頭那匹温暖的水獸　馴養地在小小的水族箱中　蠕動
那獸說：是的 我願意

[[温暖的水獸]]

Hi! Eric:

I think everyone here is overwhelmed by you, Professor Literature:

Professor Eric Liu, PhD. in Literature,
Author of notes on this, comments on that,
And criticisms on every possible thing,
Except on life.


Please just shut your mouth and write your poems. I'll be your attentive and demanding reader.

A slip of the moon

hanging over my house,
I stand alone
beneath the bright moonshine.

Yes, the moon knows
you're both far away from
and so near to me.
[/quote]

My suggestions are as follows:


I hangs

II you are far away
yet near to me.
_________________
舌頭那匹温暖的水獸　馴養地在小小的水族箱中　蠕動
那獸說：是的 我願意

[温暖的水獸]

[[温暖的水獸]]