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[Lake]

Stranger

on a business trip
alone in Beijing.
dim light, screeching bed,
stifling cigarette smell
wafts in the air.
the noises of voices,
TVs, comings and goings
pollute my ears.
isolated from the crowds,
all night I turn the light on and off
making loneliness my master
till the tired moon fades
in the morning haze.

[[Lake]]

Stranger

on a business trip
alone in Beijing.
dim light, screeching bed,
stifling cigarette smell
wafts in the air.
the noises of voices,
TVs, comings and goings
pollute my ears.
isolated from the crowds,
all night I turn the light on and off
making loneliness my master
till the tired moon fades
in the morning haze.

[非马]

From the poem it's not clear where did you spend the sleepless night--at the airport? in a hotel room? or on the street? Judging from the lines: "stifling cigarette smell /wafts in the air. /the noises of voices, /TVs, comings and goings", you could be at a crowded place like the airport or a restaurant; but the line " all night I turn the light on and off " suggests that you were in a room with a light switch.

BTW, I think the words "comings and goings" are a bit too vague. Are you referring to people or cars or even animals ()?

I too had a sleepless night in Taiwan several years ago, though it was due to the cup of very strong coffee I drank that evening. I wrote a poem titled 失眠之歌 the next morning:

缠绕的手
终于随著地球
渐转
渐
缓

突然
马达凄厉的嘶叫
掠过黑夜的街心
一群冶游的文明野猫
把我刚理好的
一团思绪
又扯散了一地

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From the poem it's not clear where did you spend the sleepless night--at the airport? in a hotel room? or on the street? Judging from the lines: "stifling cigarette smell /wafts in the air. /the noises of voices, /TVs, comings and goings", you could be at a crowded place like the airport or a restaurant; but the line " all night I turn the light on and off " suggests that you were in a room with a light switch.

BTW, I think the words "comings and goings" are a bit too vague. Are you referring to people or cars or even animals ()?

I too had a sleepless night in Taiwan several years ago, though it was due to the cup of very strong coffee I drank that evening. I wrote a poem titled 失眠之歌 the next morning:

缠绕的手
终于随著地球
渐转
渐
缓

突然
马达凄厉的嘶叫
掠过黑夜的街心
一群冶游的文明野猫
把我刚理好的
一团思绪
又扯散了一地

[Lake]

Thanks Mr. Fei Ma for your read and questions.

To make it clear, I can add back the line 'Dim light, screeching bed' - a room in a hotel.

[[Lake]]

Thanks Mr. Fei Ma for your read and questions.

To make it clear, I can add back the line 'Dim light, screeching bed' - a room in a hotel.

[非马]

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[ericcoliu]

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[dundas]

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[Lake]

Thanks Eric, glad you like the phrase.

Thank you dundas for your compliment.
Would you elaborate on the 'projection technique' please?
That'll be interesting to know.

Thanks.

[[Lake]]

Thanks Eric, glad you like the phrase.

Thank you dundas for your compliment.
Would you elaborate on the 'projection technique' please?
That'll be interesting to know.

Thanks.

[非马]

I too like the phrase "comings and goings". The reason I felt it a bit too vague was that you have something too real (the TVs) in the same line.

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I too like the phrase "comings and goings". The reason I felt it a bit too vague was that you have something too real (the TVs) in the same line.

[Lake]

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[dundas]

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[非马]

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[Lake]

Thanks dundas for your explanation. Appreciate it.

[[Lake]]

Thanks dundas for your explanation. Appreciate it.