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[Champagne]

鹿柴，王維

空山不見人， 但聞人語響。
返景入深林， 復照青苔上。


English Translation

The Deer Enclosure

In the empty mountains,
There seems to be no one;
Yet, human echoes
Can be heard.


Returning sunlight
Enters the dark forest
And shines again
On green moss.
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I'm Champagne,
Bottled poetry with sparkling joy.

[[Champagne]]

鹿柴，王維

空山不見人， 但聞人語響。
返景入深林， 復照青苔上。


English Translation

The Deer Enclosure

In the empty mountains,
There seems to be no one;
Yet, human echoes
Can be heard.


Returning sunlight
Enters the dark forest
And shines again
On green moss.
_________________
I'm Champagne,
Bottled poetry with sparkling joy.

[anna]

Just googled a few other translations.

found the following in the http://www.prairiewindzen.org/zen_chinese_poetry.html#5

there the poem is used as Zen example.


Deer Fence

In the empty mountains
I see no one,
But hear the sound
Of someone's voice.

Slanting sunlight
Enters deep forest,
And shines again
On green moss.


Wang Wei
trans. Greg Whincup

I guess deep forest is better.
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Anna Yin

《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...

http://annapoetry.com

[[星子安娜]]

Just googled a few other translations.

found the following in the http://www.prairiewindzen.org/zen_chinese_poetry.html#5

there the poem is used as Zen example.


Deer Fence

In the empty mountains
I see no one,
But hear the sound
Of someone's voice.

Slanting sunlight
Enters deep forest,
And shines again
On green moss.


Wang Wei
trans. Greg Whincup

I guess deep forest is better.
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Anna Yin

《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...

http://annapoetry.com

[Champagne]

[[Champagne]]

[东西]

[[东西]]

[Champagne]

[[Champagne]]

[浴恩福]

[[浴恩福]]

[Champagne]

Thanks for your encouraging comment.

I think the translation of poetry raises a mind-boggling question for all translators of differing cultural backgrounds and epochs: what do they look for in a poetic translation?

“Some seek scholarly fidelity, if that were ultimately possible, through "literal" translations combined with footnotes and elaborate discussion to bear out the untranslatable. Others want a new version of the truth, sung well in their own language, that may at times forfeit the intent and nuances of the original. Others want a compromise: a new poem in their own language that both captures the essence of the original and yet that does not take too many liberties in conveying the ideas.”

All translators have to grapple with this big question.
_________________
I'm Champagne,
Bottled poetry with sparkling joy.

[[Champagne]]

Thanks for your encouraging comment.

I think the translation of poetry raises a mind-boggling question for all translators of differing cultural backgrounds and epochs: what do they look for in a poetic translation?

“Some seek scholarly fidelity, if that were ultimately possible, through "literal" translations combined with footnotes and elaborate discussion to bear out the untranslatable. Others want a new version of the truth, sung well in their own language, that may at times forfeit the intent and nuances of the original. Others want a compromise: a new poem in their own language that both captures the essence of the original and yet that does not take too many liberties in conveying the ideas.”

All translators have to grapple with this big question.
_________________
I'm Champagne,
Bottled poetry with sparkling joy.

[dundas]

[[dundas]]

[Champagne]

[[Champagne]]

[浴恩福]

I like Snyder's translation:

Deep Camp translated by Gary Snyder

Empty mountains:
ggno one to be seen.
Yet – hear –
ggHuman sounds and echoes.
ggReturning sunlight
ggEnters the dark woods;
Again shining
ggOn green moss, above.
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報三恩、耕三大福田

[[浴恩福]]

I like Snyder's translation:

Deep Camp translated by Gary Snyder

Empty mountains:
ggno one to be seen.
Yet – hear –
ggHuman sounds and echoes.
ggReturning sunlight
ggEnters the dark woods;
Again shining
ggOn green moss, above.
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報三恩、耕三大福田

[Lake]

[[Lake]]

[Champagne]

Thank you all for your comments.

I've revised the title of my translation.
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I'm Champagne,
Bottled poetry with sparkling joy.

[[Champagne]]

Thank you all for your comments.

I've revised the title of my translation.
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I'm Champagne,
Bottled poetry with sparkling joy.

[ericcoliu]

I wrote a thematic review of Nineteen Ways of Looking at Wang Wei: How a Chinese Poem is Translated Written by Eliot Weinberger and Octavio Paz, in which literary critic and translator Eliot Weinberger, with commentary from Nobel Prize Winner Mexican poet Octavio Paz, compares 19 translations of The Deer Enclosure.
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Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul

[[ericcoliu]]

I wrote a thematic review of Nineteen Ways of Looking at Wang Wei: How a Chinese Poem is Translated Written by Eliot Weinberger and Octavio Paz, in which literary critic and translator Eliot Weinberger, with commentary from Nobel Prize Winner Mexican poet Octavio Paz, compares 19 translations of The Deer Enclosure.
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Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul