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[christine]

After great pain, a formal feeling comes by Emily Dickinson

After great pain, a formal feeling comes--
The Nerves sit ceremonious, like Tombs--
The stiff Heart questions was it He, that bore,
And Yesterday, or Centuries before?

The Feet, mechanical, go round--
Of Ground, or Air, or Ought--
A Wooden way
Regardless grown,
A Quartz contentment, like a stone--

This is the Hour of Lead--
Remembered, if outlived,
As Freezing persons recollect the Snow--
First--Chill--then Stupor--then the letting go--


Chinese Translation

在巨痛之後，森漠的感覺隨之而來──
神經肅坐，像墳墓般──
緊綳的心質問──受苦的是他嗎？
是昨天，還是數世紀前？

機械般的雙脚，徘徊──
在地上，或空中，或義務般站立──
像木頭般僵直
不在意之感漸生，
一種晶寂的滿足，像個石頭──

這是沈重如铅的時刻──
如生還會記住，
如同僵凍的人回憶雪景──
先是寒冷──昏麻──然後撒手

[[christine]]

After great pain, a formal feeling comes by Emily Dickinson

After great pain, a formal feeling comes--
The Nerves sit ceremonious, like Tombs--
The stiff Heart questions was it He, that bore,
And Yesterday, or Centuries before?

The Feet, mechanical, go round--
Of Ground, or Air, or Ought--
A Wooden way
Regardless grown,
A Quartz contentment, like a stone--

This is the Hour of Lead--
Remembered, if outlived,
As Freezing persons recollect the Snow--
First--Chill--then Stupor--then the letting go--


Chinese Translation

在巨痛之後，森漠的感覺隨之而來──
神經肅坐，像墳墓般──
緊綳的心質問──受苦的是他嗎？
是昨天，還是數世紀前？

機械般的雙脚，徘徊──
在地上，或空中，或義務般站立──
像木頭般僵直
不在意之感漸生，
一種晶寂的滿足，像個石頭──

這是沈重如铅的時刻──
如生還會記住，
如同僵凍的人回憶雪景──
先是寒冷──昏麻──然後撒手

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[非马]

First--Chill--then Stupor--then the letting go--
先是寒冷──昏麻──然後隨它而去

最后一行的 letting go 也许译成"撒手"或"放手"较好。“随它而去”可能会被误以为同它一起走了，而不是被冻僵在原处。

First--Chill--then Stupor--then the letting go--
先是寒冷──昏麻──然後撒手──

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First--Chill--then Stupor--then the letting go--
先是寒冷──昏麻──然後隨它而去

最后一行的 letting go 也许译成"撒手"或"放手"较好。“随它而去”可能会被误以为同它一起走了，而不是被冻僵在原处。

First--Chill--then Stupor--then the letting go--
先是寒冷──昏麻──然後撒手──

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学习以上的讨论。

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学习以上的讨论。

赞成非马的建议。

[christine]

Thanks for sharing your thought.

I've revised my translation.

[[christine]]

Thanks for sharing your thought.

I've revised my translation.