酷我-北美枫

[fanfan]

I've withdrawn my statement.
_________________
Don't imitate me;
it's as boring
as the two halves of a melon.

[[FAFAFA]]

I've withdrawn my statement.
_________________
Don't imitate me;
it's as boring
as the two halves of a melon.

[ericcoliu]

[[ericcoliu]]

[Lake]

Thanks for posting these great haikus.

It seems Everything is relative, nothing is absolute . To break the rules, first you need to know the rules. Abstract words can be used, but better to be used in a new way, in an effective way.

Interesting,

An autumn eve:
There is joy too
In loneliness.

-- Buson


tells me where fanfan's II comes from:

A waving hand --
There's hope also
In despair

--fanfan

From reading the haikus of the Japanese masters,

Ah, grief and sadness!
The fishing-line trembles
In the autumn breeze.

Peace and quiet:
Leaning on a stick,
Roaming round the garden.


I've learned there are poems they don't have to contain a contrast of images, or feelings... one image or feeling can be developed and heightened. Yeah, go break the rules!

[[Lake]]

Thanks for posting these great haikus.

It seems Everything is relative, nothing is absolute . To break the rules, first you need to know the rules. Abstract words can be used, but better to be used in a new way, in an effective way.

Interesting,

An autumn eve:
There is joy too
In loneliness.

-- Buson


tells me where fanfan's II comes from:

A waving hand --
There's hope also
In despair

--fanfan

From reading the haikus of the Japanese masters,

Ah, grief and sadness!
The fishing-line trembles
In the autumn breeze.

Peace and quiet:
Leaning on a stick,
Roaming round the garden.


I've learned there are poems they don't have to contain a contrast of images, or feelings... one image or feeling can be developed and heightened. Yeah, go break the rules!

[fanfan]

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[fanfan]

[[FAFAFA]]

[fanfan]

This is my standard, which maybe never will be achieved in my life. (but, does that really matter to an inspired writer?)

You have been misled by your folly,
determined to follow the footsteps of Conrad
and Nabokov. You have forgotten
they were white Europeans.
Remember your yellow face
and your puny talent—unlikely
to make you a late bloomer.
Why believe you can write verse in English,
whose music is not natural to you?
-- Ha Jin, A Free Life
_________________
Don't imitate me;
it's as boring
as the two halves of a melon.

[[FFFFFF]]

This is my standard, which maybe never will be achieved in my life. (but, does that really matter to an inspired writer?)

You have been misled by your folly,
determined to follow the footsteps of Conrad
and Nabokov. You have forgotten
they were white Europeans.
Remember your yellow face
and your puny talent—unlikely
to make you a late bloomer.
Why believe you can write verse in English,
whose music is not natural to you?
-- Ha Jin, A Free Life
_________________
Don't imitate me;
it's as boring
as the two halves of a melon.

[Lake]

My apologies if my words sound offensive to you.

We are all beginners of English here since we are all native Chinese speakers, I believe? So I think my comments are also at a beginner’s level. Take it or toss it at your own discretion. But hey, look, how much people have changed or rewritten their works after others’ comments. We learn from our reciprocal exchanges, don’t we?

[[Lake]]

My apologies if my words sound offensive to you.

We are all beginners of English here since we are all native Chinese speakers, I believe? So I think my comments are also at a beginner’s level. Take it or toss it at your own discretion. But hey, look, how much people have changed or rewritten their works after others’ comments. We learn from our reciprocal exchanges, don’t we?

[ericcoliu]

Please take it easy and relax.

As a beginner writer who write[s] verse in English, whose music is not natural to me, I have no shame in writing mediocre haiku to pay my literary homage to Lake and fanfan, both of whom I feel indebted to and both of whom have made English Garden a good place to write and read online.

The thief
Left it behind –
Haiku on the table


Sorry, I forgot to mention one thing in advance: The literary technique I used to write my haiku is called “imitative-structural modes of allusion,” by which I wrote in a poetic language with no “abstract words” to contain no contrast of images, or feelings because, according to Lake’s rule, one image or feeling can be developed and heightened if one can write haiku in a new way, in an effective way.

Note:

All of italicized phrases and sentences are written or quoted by Lake and fanfan.
_________________
Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul

[[ericcoliu]]

Please take it easy and relax.

As a beginner writer who write[s] verse in English, whose music is not natural to me, I have no shame in writing mediocre haiku to pay my literary homage to Lake and fanfan, both of whom I feel indebted to and both of whom have made English Garden a good place to write and read online.

The thief
Left it behind –
Haiku on the table


Sorry, I forgot to mention one thing in advance: The literary technique I used to write my haiku is called “imitative-structural modes of allusion,” by which I wrote in a poetic language with no “abstract words” to contain no contrast of images, or feelings because, according to Lake’s rule, one image or feeling can be developed and heightened if one can write haiku in a new way, in an effective way.

Note:

All of italicized phrases and sentences are written or quoted by Lake and fanfan.
_________________
Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul

[dundas]

[[dundas]]

[fanfan]

Without the reader's comprehending the writer's intention, an allusion becomes merely a decorative device.

Apparently, you have read the book.
_________________
Don't imitate me;
it's as boring
as the two halves of a melon.

[[FFFFFF]]

Without the reader's comprehending the writer's intention, an allusion becomes merely a decorative device.

Apparently, you have read the book.
_________________
Don't imitate me;
it's as boring
as the two halves of a melon.

[温暖的水獸]

The revised version is more concrete.

[quote="fanfan"]

IV
In Wenchuan
We walk on the roof of hell
Gazing at the flattened dreams

[[温暖的水獸]]

The revised version is more concrete.

[quote="fanfan"]

IV
In Wenchuan
We walk on the roof of hell
Gazing at the flattened dreams

[浴恩福]

[[浴恩福]]

[fanfan]

[[FAFAFA]]

[fanfan]

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[fanfan]

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