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博弈[Mark]
博弈作品集
二品总督
（刚入二品，小心做人）
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 发表于: 星期日 一月 28, 2007 10:23 pm 发表主题: 读诗笔记二--铸 |
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皆因读诗有感，一时之写，欢迎批正。
Coinage
Then again,
A memory is all I could ask for,
Need not to be comprehensive at all
As one bit is enough for me in you.
You in me exist when I’m running out
Of batteries of bytes of what’s made of.
A robot born was I, unbreakable.
H’m, how they like me onset syllables
Of core voices, happily, regardless
Humdrum currents circuit about my steel.
Every penny made allows me to buy
Courtesy measurable that’s minted.
Your love more precious missing stones than is,
Than what I spit out in G minor, is
Every light I know to treasure an art,
Every mold I follow to cut the path.
The shepherd of morae, inhabitants
Over pastorali beneath my skin.
As I grow faster and efficient, I
More intelligence, less hesitation
Recruit; the first attribute of aging
Of fear of loosing you gets to appro-
priating my breathing tictac for you.
Till then un till then, running out of mint.
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kokho[晓辉]
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三品按察使
（天，你是斑竹吧？）
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来自: Singapore
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| 发表于: 星期一 一月 29, 2007 4:02 am 发表主题: |
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I enjoy this writing ...
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星子[ANNA]
星子作品集
酷我！I made it！
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来自: Toronto
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| 发表于: 星期一 一月 29, 2007 11:15 am 发表主题: |
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COIN has two meanings...
Here you use it both and create the coinage which pun in your poem too.
I like the creative thoughts and subtle facts.
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博弈[Mark]
博弈作品集
二品总督
（刚入二品，小心做人）
注册时间: 2006-09-24
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来自: San Francisco
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| 发表于: 星期一 一月 29, 2007 10:13 pm 发表主题: |
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| 星子 写到: | COIN has two meanings...
Here you use it both and create the coinage which pun in your poem too.
I like the creative thoughts and subtle facts. |
谢谢阅读。
这诗虽只一时写就，我还是挺得意的（内容），但不满意（词汇）。这也是一首无法翻译的多义诗。Robot 的田园诗，田园已不是传统的乡野概念，而是 Robot 的前身，直上溯到语言的音节。并赋予‘你的爱’又转铸成一首情诗。选字上，我有意挑着 （Syllable: onset + nucleus + coda）一些没有coda的发音，念起来较干燥。 文法上的散装是为了读念及Robot 的田园的回忆，明显处外，应该都是十音节行吧。先发着，希望收到批评，以后再回来看看怎么改。G minor 寓意是名家的极少的优秀作品，未公开发表的优秀私作（如莫扎特的），悲剧的完美完成，等。见下整理。交流啦。
有时，我不能不惊讶人的思维在不同文化里却有相同的演变，这之间并没有串通。
看看 铸 字与英文的 mint(verb,noun) and coinage(noun) 的类似处.
鑄
zhù
(形声。从金,寿声。甲骨文字形,会意。上面是双手拿“鬲”(lì,古炊具),下面是“皿”;鬲、皿表熔化金属的锅炉。中间象被熔铸的金属。小篆变为形声字。本义:铸造)
铸词(锤炼文辞)
铸币
mint
to turn (metal) into coins: to mint gold into sovereigns.
to make or fabricate; invent: to mint words.
coinage
1。the act, process, or right of making coins.
2. the categories, types, or quantity of coins issued by a nation.
3. coins collectively; currency.
4. the act or process of inventing words.
5. an invented or newly created word or phrase: “Ecdysiast” is a coinage of H. L. Mencken.
而 Robot 字，始入英文 于1923，依续着 coinage 的概念（不是钱币，文字，而是人）。中文却是没有新字来延续，“机器人”实在是浅陋了些，在人文文字概念演进的思维上。
Robot
Word History: Robot is a word that is both a coinage by an individual person and a borrowing. It has been in English since 1923 when the Czech writer Karel apek's play R.U.R. was translated into English and presented in London and New York. R.U.R., published in 1921, is an abbreviation of Rossum's Universal Robots; robot itself comes from Czech robota, "servitude, forced labor," from rab, "slave." The Slavic root behind robota is orb-, from the Indo-European root *orbh-, referring to separation from one's group or passing out of one sphere of ownership into another. This seems to be the sense that binds together its somewhat diverse group of derivatives, which includes Greek orphanos, "orphan," Latin orbus, "orphaned," and German Erbe, "inheritance," in addition to the Slavic word for slave mentioned above. Czech robota is also similar to another German derivative of this root, namely Arbeit, "work" (its Middle High German form arabeit is even more like the Czech word). Arbeit may be descended from a word that meant "slave labor," and later generalized to just "labor."
G minor
G minor is a minor scale based on G, consisting of the pitches G, A, B-flat, C, D, E-flat, F, and G (natural minor scale). Its key signature consists of two flats.
Its relative key is B-flat major, and its parallel major is G major.
Changes needed for the melodic and harmonic versions of the scale are written in with accidentals as necessary. G minor is one of two flat key signatures that requires a sharp for the leading tone (the other is D minor).
Though Mozart touched on various minor keys in his symphonies, G minor is the only minor key he used as a main key for his numbered symphonies (No. 25, and the famous No. 40). When Francesco Maria Veracini wrote six Overtures for the Prince of Dresden, the only one he wrote in a minor key was No. 5 in G minor.
In the Baroque era, G minor was considered the "key of tragic consummation."
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星子[ANNA]
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Thanks for sharing and explanation.... much interesting.
Today I got another poet's humor poem... I would like to share it here since it is very suitable to discuss... but since he submits to one humor poetry contest... so I need to wait after the contest to post it.
I guess some of yours could go for experimental poetry contest.
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Lake[Lake]
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二品总督
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好像追房价，怎么也赶不上趟儿。   |
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kokho[晓辉]
kokho作品集
三品按察使
（天，你是斑竹吧？）
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来自: Singapore
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ｍａｒｋ 就是天马行空 。。
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