酷我-北美枫

anna · Site Admin 注册时间: 2004-05-02 帖子: 7141

What if I am wrong,
that the wind brings your fragrance,
the twining trails thirst for our footprints,
the beach cradles those waves deep from the ocean?

What if I am wrong,
that the moon waxing or waning in our pattern,
the oasis is only another cloud castle,
the voyage sets off on wrong wings?

What if
the door I fear to knock at will protect
no blossom to burst,
no rustle from leaves?

What if
there will be no fire to
take away my breath
as the starry night ends in a knot?

What if
I will leave with no answer?
What if
you will dig my ashes sometimes later.
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Anna Yin

《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...

http://annapoetry.com

LavenderSwing · 发表于: 星期六五月 29, 2004 7:21 am 发表主题: Re:

This is a love's puzzle. It raises up a lot of questions when our love is still not expressed, hidden in our heart.

游客

喜欢这首诗。爱情是永恒的主题 ^_^

游客 · 发表于: 星期四六月 03, 2004 3:39 pm 发表主题: 很好

都很好，结尾最后一句有些弱，Ashes给人的感觉是怨恨。可以尝试修改

anna · Site Admin 注册时间: 2004-05-02 帖子: 7141

Thanks all for reading and comments.

Ashes is meaning, I held back these questions and left, only later when we all recognise these feeling later, too later...
and I wonder if this will happen... still a puzzle...

Thanks again.
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Anna Yin

《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...

http://annapoetry.com

和平岛 · 发表于: 星期四六月 03, 2004 9:38 pm 发表主题: 星子的英文诗

情怀荡漾, 让人如沐春风