酷我-北美枫

[南北客]

Rapid

Never rest, day after day
but slow down just before May

Thrusting the rocks without pity
You believe, you have a stronger body

You make some constant noise
n’ I’m not going to disturb your singing
with my humble voice


Running like a naughty rabbit
you don’t eat, yet so fit
Are you enjoying your life?
or merely it’s a habit

Oh! runner, are you sad or happy
or simply just like me, who
rather be alone, away from any party.

No worrying, no yearning
just want to see you, keep on rolling……

几句肤浅的英文，不能算诗。即使说诗，也只能算儿童（水平）诗。

[[南北]]

Rapid

Never rest, day after day
but slow down just before May

Thrusting the rocks without pity
You believe, you have a stronger body

You make some constant noise
n’ I’m not going to disturb your singing
with my humble voice


Running like a naughty rabbit
you don’t eat, yet so fit
Are you enjoying your life?
or merely it’s a habit

Oh! runner, are you sad or happy
or simply just like me, who
rather be alone, away from any party.

No worrying, no yearning
just want to see you, keep on rolling……

几句肤浅的英文，不能算诗。即使说诗，也只能算儿童（水平）诗。

[星子]

这首的节奏感很好....
欢迎新朋友.


有一些小语法问题想探讨一下...

比如:

Never rest, day after day
but slow down just before May
--时态是什么?
_________________

[[ANNA]]

这首的节奏感很好....
欢迎新朋友.


有一些小语法问题想探讨一下...

比如:

Never rest, day after day
but slow down just before May
--时态是什么?
_________________

[Lake]

I like the spirit in it. I always appreciate those who have the rhyming skills, and this is well rhymed poem. One thing I don't like here is the use of "n’ " which sounds archaic in this poem.

[[Lake]]

I like the spirit in it. I always appreciate those who have the rhyming skills, and this is well rhymed poem. One thing I don't like here is the use of "n’ " which sounds archaic in this poem.

[南北客]

[[南北]]

[南北客]

[[南北]]

[kokho]

即兴诗歌 的美感 。。。 欢迎新朋友友 ：））

。
_________________
乒乓、摄影、诗歌

[[晓辉]]

即兴诗歌 的美感 。。。 欢迎新朋友友 ：））

。
_________________
乒乓、摄影、诗歌