酷我-北美枫

星子 · 酷我！I made it！ 注册时间: 2004-06-05 帖子: 13192 来自: Toronto

After a day trip to Long point beach, Here are my haiku

Under the shade
An old man dozes in his chair
the willow bows

on a sandbank
sun tanners lie still
a softball rolls

On the top
Of a sand castle-
a boy’s cap

down the fastened rope
the falling bodies whoosh
hills echo

sitting on the beach
I let my buttocks print marks
after tides
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anna · Site Admin 注册时间: 2004-05-02 帖子: 7141

非马 · 发表于: 星期二七月 12, 2011 11:30 am 发表主题:

Interesting rewrite. Should "clinged" be "clung"?

anna · Site Admin 注册时间: 2004-05-02 帖子: 7141

thanks 非马.

yes. You are right.

We just came back from Jason's games.

He won a gold, a silver and a broze medal in Canadian National Junior Championship.
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