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[anna]

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[星子]

Hello Anna

Excellent work on the revision. A fine thought-provoking poem with great atmosphere and resonance.

One little thing: "A black cat sprawls out on the porch."

I think you could possibly cut "out" and simply make it "A black cat sprawls on the porch."

All the best

Chris
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[[ANNA]]

Hello Anna

Excellent work on the revision. A fine thought-provoking poem with great atmosphere and resonance.

One little thing: "A black cat sprawls out on the porch."

I think you could possibly cut "out" and simply make it "A black cat sprawls on the porch."

All the best

Chris
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