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ericcoliu[ericcoliu] ericcoliu作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2007-05-29 帖子: 1393 来自: GTA, Canada
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发表于: 星期日 十一月 30, 2008 10:44 pm 发表主题: You, My Calliope (published in Word Catalyst) |
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Reading and Writing: Life on the Page
(You, My Calliope has been published in the February Issue of Word Catalyst. It’s the most prestigious magazine (3 editors, one editorial consultant, and 10 staff writers) in which my works, poems and short stories, have been published so far. I hope this publication of my poems in America will open up further possibilities of getting more of my writing published in America in the foreseeable future)
You, My Calliope
Every night
I sleep beside you
but wake up alone
It is futile
to chase you
from my waking mind
for you invade my dreams
Day slips by
when I forget your name
Time stands still
when I pine for you
Every day
I wake up alone
but sleep beside you _________________ Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul
最后进行编辑的是 ericcoliu on 星期五 二月 06, 2009 8:51 am, 总计第 9 次编辑 |
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ericcoliu[ericcoliu] ericcoliu作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2007-05-29 帖子: 1393 来自: GTA, Canada
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温暖的水獸[温暖的水獸] 温暖的水獸作品集 五品知州 (再努力一把就是四品大员了!)
注册时间: 2008-04-23 帖子: 153 来自: 水族箱
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发表于: 星期二 十二月 02, 2008 2:53 pm 发表主题: |
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ericcoliu 写到: |
It is futile
to chase you out
of my waking mind
when you invade my dreams
Day slips by
when I forget your name
Time stands still
when I think of you
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I see the conflicting powers of Calliope portrayed in these two poems.
What you did in your poem is to de-sensualize the multiple meanings of Calliope. _________________ 舌頭那匹温暖的水獸 馴養地在小小的水族箱中 蠕動
那獸說:是的 我願意 |
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ericcoliu[ericcoliu] ericcoliu作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2007-05-29 帖子: 1393 来自: GTA, Canada
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发表于: 星期三 十二月 03, 2008 11:06 am 发表主题: |
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温暖的水獸 写到: |
What you did in your poem is to de-sensualize the multiple meanings of Calliope. |
You read too much of yourself into my poem.
I’m interesting in engaging in your Poetics of Intercourse. _________________ Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul |
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christine[christine] christine作品集 四品府丞 (封疆大吏也!)
注册时间: 2008-02-25 帖子: 304
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发表于: 星期四 十二月 04, 2008 10:28 am 发表主题: |
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ericcoliu 写到: | 温暖的水獸 写到: |
What you did in your poem is to de-sensualize the multiple meanings of Calliope. |
You read too much of yourself into my poem.
I’m interesting in engaging in your Poetics of Intercourse. |
WOW! Brilliantly hypertexted comments.
The repetition of the first stanza and its variation heighten the emotional impact of the poem. |
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ericcoliu[ericcoliu] ericcoliu作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2007-05-29 帖子: 1393 来自: GTA, Canada
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发表于: 星期四 十二月 04, 2008 5:02 pm 发表主题: |
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christine 写到: |
WOW! Brilliantly hypertexted comments.
The repetition of the first stanza and its variation heighten the emotional impact of the poem. |
That’s my intent.
Thanks for being so generous in your compliments. _________________ Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul |
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christine[christine] christine作品集 四品府丞 (封疆大吏也!)
注册时间: 2008-02-25 帖子: 304
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发表于: 星期六 十二月 06, 2008 1:48 pm 发表主题: Re: You, My Calliope |
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ericcoliu 写到: |
You, My Calliope
It is futile
to chase you out
of my waking mind
when you invade my dreams
Day slips by
when I forget your name
Time stands still
when I think of you
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Upon second reading, I felt the increasing push and pull of that experience again |
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温暖的水獸[温暖的水獸] 温暖的水獸作品集 五品知州 (再努力一把就是四品大员了!)
注册时间: 2008-04-23 帖子: 153 来自: 水族箱
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发表于: 星期四 十二月 11, 2008 4:31 pm 发表主题: Re: You, My Calliope |
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Hi! Eric:
Thank you so much for pouring out your secrets on the page -- the poem.
ericcoliu 写到: | Reading, Writing, and Life on the Page
You, My Calliope
It is futile
to chase you out
of my waking mind
when you invade my dreams
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My suggestion is as follows:
It is futile
to chase you
from my waking mind
for you invade my dreams _________________ 舌頭那匹温暖的水獸 馴養地在小小的水族箱中 蠕動
那獸說:是的 我願意 |
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ericcoliu[ericcoliu] ericcoliu作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2007-05-29 帖子: 1393 来自: GTA, Canada
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发表于: 星期五 十二月 12, 2008 12:18 am 发表主题: |
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Thanks for your helpful suggestions. I've made some revisions to my poem. _________________ Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul |
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浴恩福[浴恩福] 浴恩福作品集 六品通判 (官儿做大了,保持廉洁哦)
注册时间: 2008-05-08 帖子: 123 来自: 多倫多
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发表于: 星期六 十二月 27, 2008 2:38 pm 发表主题: |
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The meaning of Calliope is multidimensional in your poem. It could be the name of the one loved by the narrator or the name of the Chief Muse. _________________ 報三恩、耕三大福田 |
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ericcoliu[ericcoliu] ericcoliu作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2007-05-29 帖子: 1393 来自: GTA, Canada
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发表于: 星期三 十二月 31, 2008 10:39 am 发表主题: |
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浴恩福 写到: | The meaning of Calliope is multidimensional in your poem. It could be the name of the one loved by the narrator or the name of the Chief Muse. |
Yes, a sharp eye for my poem.
Below is the reply from my poet friend, Gary Blankenship:
Our muse, shared among many.
Well read, Chen-ou
She demands I sing
though most notes crack
She demands I pen
though most ink spills
I give in the vain hope
she will love me this day _________________ Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul |
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ericcoliu[ericcoliu] ericcoliu作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2007-05-29 帖子: 1393 来自: GTA, Canada
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发表于: 星期三 一月 21, 2009 12:29 am 发表主题: |
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You, My Calliope will be published in the February issue of Word
Catalyst. The following is the email from the Editor:
Hello Chen,
I would like to schedule two of your poems for the February issue of Word
Catalyst. The two I have chosen are "My Foreign Anguish" and "You, My
Calliope". Please feel free to send a brief bio to accompany your work.
Thank you,
Shirley Allard, publisher/editor
Word Catalyst Magazine
An online magazine located at
http://www.wordcatalystmagazine.com _________________ Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul |
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ericcoliu[ericcoliu] ericcoliu作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2007-05-29 帖子: 1393 来自: GTA, Canada
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发表于: 星期四 一月 22, 2009 9:50 pm 发表主题: |
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Below are the replies from poet friends at another forum:
Your poem touches on the love and loneliness in life in a succinct way, that we can be alone in a crowd and still find that one person for that one moment that we can socialize with and find happiness, this leads to sleeping alone, with your love.
-- Rodney L. Eisenbrandt
Beautiful and bleak, like a snowstorm.
You waste no words.
-- Dale McLain _________________ Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul |
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