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帖子发表于: 星期一 十一月 17, 2008 9:18 am    发表主题: Duly Commissioned Reports 引用并回复

Duly Commissioned Reports


Commission reports published in years past

on violence, justice, education,
poverty, racism, or what have you ...

were duly commissioned, researched, printed,
delivered, debated, or what have you ...

now filed away, ignored.



Note:

Commission Reports is my “rewrite” of an article published by The Toronto Star on the report concerning the roots of youth violence delivered last week by Roy McMurtry and Alvin Curling.
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最后进行编辑的是 hahaview on 星期日 十二月 14, 2008 8:58 am, 总计第 2 次编辑
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帖子发表于: 星期一 十一月 17, 2008 11:49 am    发表主题: 引用并回复

You take a sarcastic and contemptuous tone in the poem.

I enjoyed reading your poem.
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帖子发表于: 星期一 十一月 17, 2008 1:16 pm    发表主题: 引用并回复

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Commission Reports


Commission reports published in years past

on violence, justice, education,
poverty, racism, or what have you ...

were duly commissioned, researched, printed,
delivered, debated, or what have you ...

and eventually ignored.



Note:

Commission Reports is my “rewrite” of an article published by The Toronto Star on the report concerning the roots of youth violence delivered last week by Roy McMurtry and Alvin Curling.


christine 写到:


You take a sarcastic and contemptuous tone in the poem.



Indeed. It's because this report is bulky (5-volume), expensive (2 millions), and eventually useless.
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六品通判
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六品通判<BR>(官儿做大了,保持廉洁哦)


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帖子发表于: 星期二 十一月 18, 2008 8:26 am    发表主题: 引用并回复

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christine 写到:


You take a sarcastic and contemptuous tone in the poem.



Indeed. It's because this report is bulky (5-volume), expensive (2 millions), and eventually useless.


Yes. I'm happy that both of you grasped the main ideas behind the poem.

Deep inside my heart, I hope this report could do something beneficiary to the marginalized youth.
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帖子发表于: 星期二 十一月 18, 2008 10:00 pm    发表主题: Re: Commission Reports 引用并回复

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Commission Reports


Commission reports published in years past

on violence, justice, education,
poverty, racism,
or what have you ...



Ha! Ha! A gradual revelation!?
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it's as boring
as the two halves of a melon.
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帖子发表于: 星期三 十一月 19, 2008 11:53 am    发表主题: Re: Commission Reports 引用并回复

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Ha! Ha! A gradual revelation!?


Did this revelation make any significant impacts on the lives of people who desperately need help?

By the way, I changed the title of my poem.
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帖子发表于: 星期五 十一月 21, 2008 1:32 pm    发表主题: Re: Commission Reports 引用并回复

hahaview 写到:


By the way, I changed the title of my poem.


hahaview 写到:


Duly Commissioned Reports


Commission reports published in years past

on violence, justice, education,
poverty, racism, or what have you ...

were duly commissioned, researched, printed,
delivered, debated, or what have you ...

and eventually ignored.



Yes, the change and repetition made the tone more "sarcastic and contemptuous."
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六品通判
(官儿做大了,保持廉洁哦)
六品通判<BR>(官儿做大了,保持廉洁哦)


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帖子发表于: 星期日 十二月 14, 2008 8:57 am    发表主题: 引用并回复

Thanks for your thoughtful comments.

I've revised my poem.
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七品按察司
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帖子发表于: 星期四 十二月 18, 2008 5:41 pm    发表主题: Re: Duly Commissioned Reports 引用并回复

hahaview 写到:


Duly Commissioned Reports


Commission reports published in years past

on violence, justice, education,
poverty, racism, or what have you ...

were duly commissioned, researched, printed,
delivered, debated, or what have you ...

now filed away, ignored.



The marked phrases are the key to understanding the "sarcastic and contemptuous" tone of the poem.

Is this written in the form of sevenling?
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Lines go off in all directions.
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