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ericcoliu[ericcoliu] ericcoliu作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2007-05-29 帖子: 1393 来自: GTA, Canada
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发表于: 星期二 七月 29, 2008 10:44 pm 发表主题: Mother, Does It Happen Again?(revised for first-day jitters) |
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Reading, Writing, and Life on the Page
Mother, Does It Happen Again?
It was the first day of school, and I waited excitedly by the community gate, keeping my eye out for any sign of the arrival of the school bus. My mother stood silently, holding my hand so tightly that I felt as if I were chained to a lamppost near my house.
“Mother, what time is it? When will the school bus come? Will the bus driver uncle forget to pick me up? Mother, did you tell the school …,” my mother interrupted my rambling and looked me in the eye, gently saying, “Son, you need to be patient. Just wait for the bus. I contacted the school a long time ago and made sure that they would pick you up once school starts. Don’t you want to spend more time with me now?”
“Yes, I want to be with you. But, I just don’t want to miss my first day of school. Hsing-hsing, she always tells me that there is a lot of fun stuff in the school. I like to …” “Honk! Honk!” Upon hearing the honk of the school bus, I was so eager and ready that I shook off the grip of my mother’s hand and rushed to the bus. When I got back home that afternoon, I could barely stop talking about my day. My mother kept nodding her head with a big smile as I excitedly regaled.
The next morning, my mother woke me, and said, “It’s time for school.”
I stared at her in a cheerful mood, “Mother, does it happen again?”
Pausing for a moment with tears welling up in the edges of her eyes, my mother replied, “Yes, you’ll have another happy day in school.” _________________ Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul
最后进行编辑的是 ericcoliu on 星期二 九月 02, 2008 10:32 am, 总计第 6 次编辑 |
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ericcoliu[ericcoliu] ericcoliu作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2007-05-29 帖子: 1393 来自: GTA, Canada
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发表于: 星期二 七月 29, 2008 10:57 pm 发表主题: |
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Mother, Does It Happen Again? is one of written exercises for my memoir writing class, the second half of which is based on my previously posted short story entitled The First Experience of Schooling. _________________ Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul |
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fanfan[FAFAFA] fanfan作品集 四品府丞 (封疆大吏也!)
注册时间: 2007-12-27 帖子: 353 来自: Canada
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发表于: 星期三 七月 30, 2008 3:42 pm 发表主题: Re: Mother, Does It Happen Again? |
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ericcoliu 写到: |
“Honk! Honk!” Upon hearing the honk of the school bus, I was so eager and ready that I shook off the grip of my mother’s hand, rushing to the bus. Back home that afternoon, I could barely stop talking about my day while my mother kept nodding her head with a big smile.
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Yes. And the narrator forgot to say goodbye to his mother. _________________ Don't imitate me;
it's as boring
as the two halves of a melon. |
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ericcoliu[ericcoliu] ericcoliu作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2007-05-29 帖子: 1393 来自: GTA, Canada
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发表于: 星期四 七月 31, 2008 4:54 pm 发表主题: Re: Mother, Does It Happen Again? |
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fanfan 写到: |
Yes. And the narrator forgot to say goodbye to his mother. |
Yes, it's a sign of growing up, of beginning the first step to discover one's way of learning.
It makes you cry to see your child grow up. But I guess it would make you cry more if they didn't. _________________ Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul |
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东西[东西] 东西作品集 八品县丞 (又一个不小心,升了!)
注册时间: 2008-06-07 帖子: 53 来自: East_West
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发表于: 星期五 八月 01, 2008 12:04 pm 发表主题: Re: Mother, Does It Happen Again? |
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ericcoliu 写到: |
The next morning, my mother woke me, and said, “It’s time for school.”
I stared at her in a cheerful mood, “Mother, does it happen again?”
Pausing for a moment with tears welling up in the edges of her eyes, my mother replied, “Yes, you’ll have another happy day in school.” |
I like the ending which expresses a little bit of sadness mixed with motherly joy. _________________ East is East, and West is West, and never the twain shall meet. |
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ericcoliu[ericcoliu] ericcoliu作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2007-05-29 帖子: 1393 来自: GTA, Canada
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发表于: 星期日 八月 03, 2008 7:35 am 发表主题: Re: Mother, Does It Happen Again? |
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东西 写到: | ericcoliu 写到: |
The next morning, my mother woke me, and said, “It’s time for school.”
I stared at her in a cheerful mood, “Mother, does it happen again?”
Pausing for a moment with tears welling up in the edges of her eyes, my mother replied, “Yes, you’ll have another happy day in school.” |
I like the ending which expresses a little bit of sadness mixed with motherly joy. |
Yes, "letting go" of their children is the hardest lesson for any concerned parents to learn and live with. _________________ Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul |
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dundas[dundas] dundas作品集 五品知州 (再努力一把就是四品大员了!)
注册时间: 2008-02-23 帖子: 214
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发表于: 星期一 八月 11, 2008 8:52 am 发表主题: Re: Mother, Does It Happen Again? |
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ericcoliu 写到: |
Mother, Does It Happen Again?
It was the first day of school, and I waited excitedly by the community gate, keeping my eye out for any sign of the arrival of the school bus. My mother stood silently, holding my hand so tightly that I felt as if I were chained to a lamppost near my house.
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This is an eye-catching image which reveals the main theme of your piece. _________________ My throat knew thirst before the structure
Of skin and vein around the well |
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ericcoliu[ericcoliu] ericcoliu作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2007-05-29 帖子: 1393 来自: GTA, Canada
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发表于: 星期二 八月 12, 2008 8:34 pm 发表主题: Re: Mother, Does It Happen Again? |
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This is an eye-catching image which reveals the main theme of your piece. |
A good discerning eye for my piece.
Thanks for reading and commenting. _________________ Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul |
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ericcoliu[ericcoliu] ericcoliu作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2007-05-29 帖子: 1393 来自: GTA, Canada
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发表于: 星期二 九月 02, 2008 10:30 am 发表主题: |
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I’ve revised my piece for first-day jitters.
As well expressed in the Toronto Star’s featured article on a day of firsts,
“There is always a certain anticipation about the first day of school. A feeling that steals away your sleep the night before, yet allows you to wake up with a smile. It's spurred, often, by the realization that what lies ahead is the start of many new beginnings, new friendships and lessons to be learned. We talk to four people on the cusp of momentous firsts: the first day of high school, first day of university, first day of teaching, and the first step of letting your child go — to kindergarten.” _________________ Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul |
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