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 发表于: 星期一 六月 23, 2008 12:30 pm 发表主题: My Past Is Like an Innocent Child |
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My Past Is Like an Innocent Child co-written by ericcoliu
My past is like an innocent child, grasping one corner of my clothes and following my every step. She is a loyal travel companion in my life’s journey. During the day, I’m a wounded nobody in the Promised Land, stabbed with sorrow. She stands by me, weeping with me. In the night, I’m a prominent member of the dream world, as respected as I used to be. She sings to me, clapping for me.
Who says, "let bygones be bygones?"
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East is East, and West is West, and never the twain shall meet.
最后进行编辑的是 东西 on 星期四 七月 10, 2008 1:02 pm, 总计第 1 次编辑 |
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| 发表于: 星期一 六月 23, 2008 8:37 pm 发表主题: Re: My Past Is Like an Innocent Child |
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| 东西 写到: | My Past Is Like an Innocent Child
My past is like an innocent child, grasping one corner of my clothes and following every step of mine. She is a loyal travel companion of my life’s journey. During the day, I’m a wounded nobody of the Promised Land, stabbed with sorrow. She stands by me, weeping with me. In the night, I’m a prominent member of the dream world, respected as I used to be. She sings to me, clapping for me.
Who says that let bygones be bygones? |
a wounded nobody of the Promised Land or a wounded nobody in the Promised Land?
Two contrasting images perceived from a nostalgic perspective.
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I'm Champagne,
Bottled poetry with sparkling joy. |
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ericcoliu[ericcoliu]
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| 发表于: 星期二 六月 24, 2008 9:59 am 发表主题: Re: My Past Is Like an Innocent Child |
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Two contrasting images perceived from a nostalgic perspective. |
Yes, the nostalgic gaze of an alienated immigrant. Been there and done that. I hope you’ll eventually overcome the barriers to your adjustment to a society you chose to live in.
The Art of Re-membering Things Past
The art of re-membering things past is
That of seeing through a nostalgic eye
Painting in colourful joys of the innocent past
And painting out achromatic sorrows of the unsettling present
Consequently, filling in the rainbow hues over life’s canvas
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She is a loyal travel companion of my life’s journey. |
Travel companion or traveling companion?
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Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul |
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fanfan[FFFFFF]
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| 发表于: 星期二 六月 24, 2008 4:01 pm 发表主题: Re: My Past Is Like an Innocent Child |
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Who says that let bygones be bygones? |
A good question only if "I’m a prominent member of the dream world, respected as I used to be. She sings to me, clapping for me."
I like the imagery of an innocent child you employed here: "grasping one corner of my clothes and following every step of mine and a loyal traveling companion of my life’s journey."
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Don't imitate me;
it's as boring
as the two halves of a melon. |
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| 发表于: 星期二 六月 24, 2008 6:49 pm 发表主题: Re: My Past Is Like an Innocent Child |
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In the night, I’m a prominent member of the dream world, respected as I used to be. She sings to me, clapping for me.
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Or At night?
I like the "innocent child" metaphor for the "bygone" past.
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My throat knew thirst before the structure
Of skin and vein around the well |
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| 发表于: 星期四 六月 26, 2008 12:07 pm 发表主题: Re: My Past Is Like an Innocent Child |
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Two contrasting images perceived from a nostalgic perspective. |
Yes, the nostalgic gaze of an alienated immigrant. Been there and done that. I hope you’ll eventually overcome the barriers to your adjustment to a society you chose to live in.
The Art of Re-membering Things Past
The art of re-membering things past is
That of seeing through a nostalgic eye
Painting in colourful joys of the innocent past
And painting out achromatic sorrows of the unsettling present
Consequently, filling in the rainbow hues over life’s canvas
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Nostalgia isn't what it used to be.
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This dark
Ceiling without a star |
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东西[东西]
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| 发表于: 星期四 七月 10, 2008 1:10 pm 发表主题: Re: My Past Is Like an Innocent Child |
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Thank you all for your helpful reviews and suggestions. I've revised my piece.
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a wounded nobody of the Promised Land or a wounded nobody in the Promised Land?
Two contrasting images perceived from a nostalgic perspective. |
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| Champagne 写到: |
Two contrasting images perceived from a nostalgic perspective. |
Yes, the nostalgic gaze of an alienated immigrant. Been there and done that. I hope you’ll eventually overcome the barriers to your adjustment to a society you chose to live in.
The Art of Re-membering Things Past
The art of re-membering things past is
That of seeing through a nostalgic eye
Painting in colourful joys of the innocent past
And painting out achromatic sorrows of the unsettling present
Consequently, filling in the rainbow hues over life’s canvas
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The art of re-membering things past is that of seeing through a nostalgic eye. Yes, I agree with both of you.
Havs any of you read Remembrance of Things Past?
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fanfan[FFFFFF]
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| 发表于: 星期五 七月 11, 2008 7:40 am 发表主题: Re: My Past Is Like an Innocent Child |
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I like the imagery of an innocent child you employed here: "grasping one corner of my clothes and following every step of mine and a loyal traveling companion of my life’s journey." |
I just came across an interesting quote regarding nostalgia and childhood:
People who get nostalgic about childhood were obviously never children.
-- Bill Watterson
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东西[东西]
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| 发表于: 星期二 七月 29, 2008 12:31 pm 发表主题: |
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Part of the reason I wrote this piece is a reflection on my current state of life:
The non-I dwells in the I.
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