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Gazes of a Sailor (new version)

 
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Gazes of a Sailor

I

I'm fading away, slowly but surely
For I behold myself in the gaze of a sailor
I see the home shores receding mile by mile
The embers of my life still burn within me
But become ashes of memory
Now, I hear the wind; I feel the ocean

II

When my eyes meet the gaze of a sailor
I see the home shores receding mile by mile
I'm fading away, slowly but surely
The embers of my life still burn within me
But become ashes of memory
Now, I hear the wind; I feel the ocean
I am alive again! He buys me a drink

III

To be continued …
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The Gaze of a Sailor


When my eyes meet the gaze of a sailor
I see the home shore receding mile by mile



The nostalgic gaze of a departing sailor.

I see the smoldering fire in the speaker's heart and soul.
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Of skin and vein around the well
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The nostalgic gaze of a departing sailor.

I see the smoldering fire in the speaker's heart and soul.



A sharp eye and a witty word.
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The nostalgic gaze of a departing sailor.

I see the smoldering fire in the speaker's heart and soul.



A sharp eye and a witty word.


Nostalgia is
An excess of memory
And a gaze of narcissism
Most of its presence within me is
A welling up of absence
An emptying-out space of the homely
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Now, I hear the wind, and I feel the sea


I think,

Now, I hear the wind, I hear the ocean

better
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I think,

Now, I hear the wind, I hear the ocean

better


I concur!

Thanks for reading and commenting.


Now, I hear the whispers of the wind
I feel the ocean taking me back and forth
It reminds me of my mom
Singing and rocking me in bed
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帖子发表于: 星期三 四月 09, 2008 4:43 pm    发表主题: 引用并回复

I’ve revised and expanded my original piece, The Gaze of A Sailor, and I renamed it to Gazes of A Sailor.

Section III is intentionally left blank so that the reader can fill in their own piece.
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帖子发表于: 星期六 四月 12, 2008 8:06 am    发表主题: Re: Gazes of a Sailor (new version) 引用并回复

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Gazes of a Sailor

I

Now, I hear the wind; I feel the ocean

II

Now, I hear the wind; I feel the ocean
I am alive again! He buys me a drink



One caught in a debilitating state of nostalgic pain, can be alleviated momentarily by food, or drink.
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Don't imitate me;
it's as boring
as the two halves of a melon.
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