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ericcoliu[ericcoliu] ericcoliu作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2007-05-29 帖子: 1393 来自: GTA, Canada
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发表于: 星期三 二月 27, 2008 10:26 am 发表主题: Gazes of a Sailor (new version) |
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Reading, Writing, and Life on the Page
Gazes of a Sailor
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I'm fading away, slowly but surely
For I behold myself in the gaze of a sailor
I see the home shores receding mile by mile
The embers of my life still burn within me
But become ashes of memory
Now, I hear the wind; I feel the ocean
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When my eyes meet the gaze of a sailor
I see the home shores receding mile by mile
I'm fading away, slowly but surely
The embers of my life still burn within me
But become ashes of memory
Now, I hear the wind; I feel the ocean
I am alive again! He buys me a drink
III
To be continued … _________________ Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul
最后进行编辑的是 ericcoliu on 星期三 四月 09, 2008 4:42 pm, 总计第 4 次编辑 |
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dundas[dundas] dundas作品集 五品知州 (再努力一把就是四品大员了!)
注册时间: 2008-02-23 帖子: 214
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发表于: 星期三 二月 27, 2008 1:27 pm 发表主题: Re: The Gaze of a Sailor |
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ericcoliu 写到: |
The Gaze of a Sailor
When my eyes meet the gaze of a sailor
I see the home shore receding mile by mile
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The nostalgic gaze of a departing sailor.
I see the smoldering fire in the speaker's heart and soul. _________________ My throat knew thirst before the structure
Of skin and vein around the well |
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ericcoliu[ericcoliu] ericcoliu作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2007-05-29 帖子: 1393 来自: GTA, Canada
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发表于: 星期三 二月 27, 2008 4:08 pm 发表主题: Re: The Gaze of a Sailor |
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dundas 写到: |
The nostalgic gaze of a departing sailor.
I see the smoldering fire in the speaker's heart and soul.
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A sharp eye and a witty word. _________________ Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul |
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Champagne[Champagne] Champagne作品集 四品府丞 (封疆大吏也!)
注册时间: 2007-09-15 帖子: 394 来自: Nowhere & Everywhere
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发表于: 星期三 二月 27, 2008 10:05 pm 发表主题: Re: The Gaze of a Sailor |
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ericcoliu 写到: |
dundas 写到: |
The nostalgic gaze of a departing sailor.
I see the smoldering fire in the speaker's heart and soul.
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A sharp eye and a witty word. |
Nostalgia is
An excess of memory
And a gaze of narcissism
Most of its presence within me is
A welling up of absence
An emptying-out space of the homely _________________ I'm Champagne,
Bottled poetry with sparkling joy. |
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星子[ANNA] 星子作品集 酷我!I made it!
注册时间: 2004-06-05 帖子: 13192 来自: Toronto
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发表于: 星期三 二月 27, 2008 10:13 pm 发表主题: |
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Now, I hear the wind, and I feel the sea
I think,
Now, I hear the wind, I hear the ocean
better _________________
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ericcoliu[ericcoliu] ericcoliu作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2007-05-29 帖子: 1393 来自: GTA, Canada
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发表于: 星期三 二月 27, 2008 11:30 pm 发表主题: |
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星子 写到: |
I think,
Now, I hear the wind, I hear the ocean
better |
I concur!
Thanks for reading and commenting.
Now, I hear the whispers of the wind
I feel the ocean taking me back and forth
It reminds me of my mom
Singing and rocking me in bed _________________ Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul |
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ericcoliu[ericcoliu] ericcoliu作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2007-05-29 帖子: 1393 来自: GTA, Canada
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发表于: 星期三 四月 09, 2008 4:43 pm 发表主题: |
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I’ve revised and expanded my original piece, The Gaze of A Sailor, and I renamed it to Gazes of A Sailor.
Section III is intentionally left blank so that the reader can fill in their own piece. _________________ Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul |
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fanfan[FFFFFF] fanfan作品集 四品府丞 (封疆大吏也!)
注册时间: 2007-12-27 帖子: 353 来自: Canada
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发表于: 星期六 四月 12, 2008 8:06 am 发表主题: Re: Gazes of a Sailor (new version) |
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ericcoliu 写到: | Reading, Writing, and Life on the Page
Gazes of a Sailor
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Now, I hear the wind; I feel the ocean
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Now, I hear the wind; I feel the ocean
I am alive again! He buys me a drink
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One caught in a debilitating state of nostalgic pain, can be alleviated momentarily by food, or drink. _________________ Don't imitate me;
it's as boring
as the two halves of a melon. |
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