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week three, (Homework) Dialogue

 
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帖子发表于: 星期日 十月 21, 2007 4:33 pm    发表主题: week three, (Homework) Dialogue 引用并回复

“I cannot handle it." I put away my pen, my voice burst into the air.
"I could feel that, but…" Mike looked through my eyes with a serious tone. Having being my old friend, a friend knew me like his own shadow. Mike knew how to make me calm. "Jane, you are who you are, as always. I know you can.”
"But, but I sit here for hours, still I cannot write anything." I turned away my face.
"How interesting… Tell me, why you can write poetry?" Mike gently put his hand on my shoulder.
"I don’t know, really. Mike. What I do feel is when I write poetry, I am myself. Yeh...I open myself and listen and write. But each time I try to write a story, I hardly find my own voice, I cannot find any feeling towards it…"
"So, I guess there is another Jane in your head to tell you that you can do it or judge what you try to write. Right? She closes you up and tells you, no, no, Jane, you cannot do it…" Mike said thoughtfully.
"I guess you are right. When I write poetry, I take grant of the poetic license. So I
am at easy and don’t worry about grammars and other crucial standards… but when I start to write a story, Aha! I am like a memory rooter or a brain navigator...try very hard, dig, dig, dig…when some fragment appears, I begin to mark it worthy or not, interesting or not, meaningful or not… eventually no piece is left over to write…Yep! I guess that is the real problem.” I looked up at Mike.
"I agree. I guess you should forget another Jane (Judge Jane), just write whatever you want. Don't be afraid to write. Don't judge. Just write on… Jane, we all know no one can write one draft and succeed. You can always rewrite and revise. Here, use your notebook; or any paper… start to write anything you can. In this way, I think you can train yourself to be comfortable on writing many different subjects."
“I wish. Mike, I will try. By the way, thanks.”
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帖子发表于: 星期一 十月 22, 2007 8:58 pm    发表主题: 引用并回复

It's a snapshot of the writing process of a struggling writer.

A good try.

anna 写到:


"Poetry is different. It is voice from my heart, from my life. Those emotions and spirits come to me. But stories, they never come to me. Each time I try to write one, I hardly find my own voice, never mention meanings and creative senses…" I protested.

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I think the struggling writer in your story mixes up authorial voice with narrative voice.
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帖子发表于: 星期二 十月 23, 2007 1:42 pm    发表主题: 引用并回复

Hi Eric,

Thanks.

I will work on the revision.
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