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帖子发表于: 星期一 五月 07, 2007 8:41 am    发表主题: lost and found 引用并回复

Asked what have you lost, answered “myself”
Asked what do want to find, answered “self”
-oneline

出书

你在等着
而我正努力着
我必须回头找一些线索
即便是最细微的,被所有人忽视的
是我自己把故事推到这个不能突破的瓶颈
从识字以后的所有的经验,就为了此刻的平静
为了你在等着

焦虑是三分钟前的事
那时我对你说:所谓艺术就是神经病创造出来的东西
你笑了
我接着说:你例外
如被点穴般地你静止下来并睁大了眼睛。
(这时辩论是么是神经病,精神病,freeze 或 frozen,
对我而言也不能对联系‘线索’有帮助;但是,念头如自由意识,是任人管不了的)

那小孩替老板搬书时,滑落了最重的一本——

砰的一声
管理员在柜台后抬头/我在书桌后扣下扳机!

"The birth of the reader must be at the cost
    of the death of the author"--Roland Barthes

ps. after reading http://www.coviews.com/viewtopic.php?t=29008
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最后进行编辑的是 博弈 on 星期二 五月 08, 2007 6:05 am, 总计第 1 次编辑
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来自: Sky Blue Water

帖子发表于: 星期一 五月 07, 2007 10:03 pm    发表主题: 引用并回复

博弈又有感临屏了。形式也新颖,有个prelude 还有个 postlude.

引用:
那时我对你说:所谓艺术就是神经病创造出来的东西
你笑了
我接着说:你例外
如被点穴般地你静止下来并睁大了眼睛


so , 你例外,你不是神经病,所以你也创造不出艺术?

引用:
砰的一声
管理员在柜台后抬头/我在书桌后扣下扳机!


不是吧,你suicide 了? 就是为了Roland 那句话?

引用:
Asked what do want to find


Asked what do you want to find?

我这是瞎说瞎说。还得要博弈解释解释。


可着意识流流吧。 Smile
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帖子发表于: 星期二 五月 08, 2007 6:04 am    发表主题: 引用并回复

谢谢光临,还没解透 Sad Smile

some pointers

1.
Asked what have you lost, answered “myself”
Asked what do want to find, answered “self”
-oneline

Dalai Lama’s book “Transforming the mind” English version (I read 4, 5 years ago) led me to the understanding of
ridding oneself of subjective-ness to achieve oneness with the world and hence finding self;
the two lines are about that in a different context, the subject (I or you) is missing in 2nd line, symbolize one has to loose oneself first in order to be found, and the found is the self without one's subjective being.

丢掉自我方寻得, confusing?

2.
"
那小孩替老板搬书时,滑落了最重的一本—

砰的一声
管理员在柜台后抬头/我在书桌后扣下扳机!
"

Technique-wise, 2nd line is left empty space after 破折号,against normal grammar, to symbolize 破折了空间,so the next two lines:
two different time-space divided and linked by a '/' and bang, think about that in a movie scene.

出书在这里也只是个比喻。其它的,因人解读自己采取吧(自己猜去吧)。 Laughing
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帖子发表于: 星期二 五月 08, 2007 6:33 am    发表主题: 引用并回复

谢谢祥解,洗耳恭听。 Smile

博弈 写到:
谢谢光临,还没解透 Sad Smile

some pointers

1.
Asked what have you lost, answered “myself”
Asked what do want to find, answered “self”
-oneline

Dalai Lama’s book “Transforming the mind” English version (I read 4, 5 years ago) led me to the understanding of
ridding oneself of subjective-ness to achieve oneness with the world and hence finding self;
the two lines are about that in a different context, the subject (I or you) is missing in 2nd line, symbolize one has to loose oneself first in order to be found, and the found is the self without one's subjective being.

丢掉自我方寻得, confusing?


makes sense. wonder if the subject "you" in line one can be removed as well so there won't be the same question in line two Razz

博弈 写到:
2.
"
那小孩替老板搬书时,滑落了最重的一本—

砰的一声
管理员在柜台后抬头/我在书桌后扣下扳机!
"

Technique-wise, 2nd line is left empty space after 破折号,against normal grammar, to symbolize 破折了空间,so the next two lines:
two different time-space divided and linked by a '/' and bang, think about that in a movie scene.

出书在这里也只是个比喻。其它的,因人解读自己采取吧(自己猜去吧)。


砰的一声
管理员在柜台后抬头/我在书桌后扣下扳机!

很传神。 Very Happy
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帖子发表于: 星期二 五月 08, 2007 7:19 am    发表主题: 引用并回复

Lake 写到:


makes sense. wonder if the subject "you" in line one can be removed as well so there won't be the same question in line two Razz



great, in the sense you see them as the same question, isn't it? Smile
so, same thing in disguise, there is only transformation.

my intention was, first line had subject, and lost them through transformation. You, myself, same subject.
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帖子发表于: 星期二 五月 08, 2007 9:05 am    发表主题: 引用并回复

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Lake 写到:


makes sense. wonder if the subject "you" in line one can be removed as well so there won't be the same question in line two Razz



great, in the sense you see them as the same question, isn't it? Smile
so, same thing in disguise, there is only transformation.

my intention was, first line had subject, and lost them through transformation. You, myself, same subject.


okey-dokey, 需要脑筋急转弯 Cool Laughing
it seems that each word, line, form has its own sensitivity, isn't that the truth?
Thanks a bunch!

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帖子发表于: 星期二 五月 08, 2007 8:11 pm    发表主题: 引用并回复

Lake 写到:


砰的一声
管理员在柜台后抬头/我在书桌后扣下扳机!

很传神。 Very Happy


Basically, this part could refer to Ernest Hemingway, the Chinese part is after his writing style; any one fascinated about death could also be.
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帖子发表于: 星期三 五月 09, 2007 8:15 am    发表主题: 引用并回复

博弈 写到:
Lake 写到:


砰的一声
管理员在柜台后抬头/我在书桌后扣下扳机!

很传神。 Very Happy


Basically, this part could refer to Ernest Hemingway, the Chinese part is after his writing style; any one fascinated about death could also be.


humm, the elaboration goes deeper and deeper... Cool
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