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戴玨 · 发表于: 星期二十二月 26, 2006 1:57 pm 发表主题: 王維詩二首

竹里館

獨坐幽篁裡，彈琴復長嘯。
深林人不知，明月來相照。

Lodge in a Bamboo Wood

I sit alone by the serene bamboos,
Strumming my zither and whistling.
No one knows I'm in this dim wood,
Only the moon comes watching.

送友

山中相送罷，日暮掩柴扉。
春草年年綠，王孫歸不歸？

Seeing Off A Friend

We finally parted in the dale. As I saw
The sun settle down, I closed my wattle door.
The grass greens in spring every year, but alack!
My friend, can I expect to see you back?

星子 · 发表于: 星期二十二月 26, 2006 2:53 pm 发表主题:

Welcome New friend.

Good.
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Lake · 发表于: 星期六十二月 30, 2006 4:14 pm 发表主题:

欢迎戴玨! 拜读，学习。

你译的<竹里館>比我见过的几个版本好。

深林 dim wood, how about 'deep woods'?

"As I saw
The sun settle down, I closed my wattle door. '

Or ' As the sun set (down),..." ?

Just my thought.

Thanks for sharing!

戴玨 · 发表于: 星期日十二月 31, 2006 3:48 am 发表主题:

謝Lake的賞評。

Lake · 发表于: 星期日十二月 31, 2006 4:19 pm 发表主题: