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Champagne[Champagne] Champagne作品集 四品府丞 (封疆大吏也!)
注册时间: 2007-09-15 帖子: 394 来自: Nowhere & Everywhere
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发表于: 星期五 一月 30, 2009 8:57 am 发表主题: Re: In the Deep Freeze (revised, no of haiku:5) |
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浴恩福 写到: |
This is my favorite. "just" is the key word to unlock the poem.
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Yes, thanks for your discerning eye for my poem and kind words.
I added one more haiku to my thread:
passing by each other
then disappearing --
footprints in the snow _________________ I'm Champagne,
Bottled poetry with sparkling joy. |
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Champagne[Champagne] Champagne作品集 四品府丞 (封疆大吏也!)
注册时间: 2007-09-15 帖子: 394 来自: Nowhere & Everywhere
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发表于: 星期五 二月 06, 2009 8:48 am 发表主题: |
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I’ve made some revisions to my haiku sequence and submitted to Word Catalyst. _________________ I'm Champagne,
Bottled poetry with sparkling joy. |
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robarts[robarts] robarts作品集 六品通判 (官儿做大了,保持廉洁哦)
注册时间: 2008-03-24 帖子: 114 来自: Canada
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发表于: 星期一 二月 09, 2009 2:09 pm 发表主题: |
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Good luck with your writing.
Here is my take on Canadian winter:
eyeglasses fog up
as I enter the house--
in the freeze
I have shovelled away
the dreams of my youth _________________ If one cannot enjoy reading a book over and over again, there is no use in reading it at all. |
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Champagne[Champagne] Champagne作品集 四品府丞 (封疆大吏也!)
注册时间: 2007-09-15 帖子: 394 来自: Nowhere & Everywhere
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发表于: 星期五 二月 13, 2009 8:44 pm 发表主题: |
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winter sadness
surfaces
while I shovel the snow
Right? _________________ I'm Champagne,
Bottled poetry with sparkling joy. |
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Champagne[Champagne] Champagne作品集 四品府丞 (封疆大吏也!)
注册时间: 2007-09-15 帖子: 394 来自: Nowhere & Everywhere
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发表于: 星期日 三月 01, 2009 8:33 am 发表主题: |
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Thanks for your generous comments.
The Winter of My Discontent has been published in the March Issue of Word Catalyst _________________ I'm Champagne,
Bottled poetry with sparkling joy. |
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robarts[robarts] robarts作品集 六品通判 (官儿做大了,保持廉洁哦)
注册时间: 2008-03-24 帖子: 114 来自: Canada
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发表于: 星期一 三月 02, 2009 2:23 pm 发表主题: |
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robarts 写到: |
Here is my take on Canadian winter:
eyeglasses fog up
as I enter the house--
in the freeze
I have shovelled away
the dreams of my youth |
Champagne 写到: |
winter sadness
surfaces
while I shovel the snow
Right? |
Yes. Congratulations on your publication! _________________ If one cannot enjoy reading a book over and over again, there is no use in reading it at all. |
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Champagne[Champagne] Champagne作品集 四品府丞 (封疆大吏也!)
注册时间: 2007-09-15 帖子: 394 来自: Nowhere & Everywhere
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发表于: 星期五 三月 06, 2009 8:37 pm 发表主题: |
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robarts 写到: |
Yes. Congratulations on your publication! |
Many thanks!
This winter is the winter of my discontent and I never have a “mind of winter” as Wallace Stevens claims in his famous poem, The Snowman. _________________ I'm Champagne,
Bottled poetry with sparkling joy. |
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clair[clair] clair作品集 七品按察司 (我开始管这里的事儿了)
注册时间: 2008-03-13 帖子: 83
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发表于: 星期四 三月 12, 2009 12:44 pm 发表主题: |
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Here is my "discontent:"
Thoughts on a wintry morning
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Snowflakes
falling from the sky
from time to time
seem to dance
out of my sight
II
Bush fled
before the onslaught of winter
Obama must shovel
the sidewalks
of Wall Street _________________ This dark
Ceiling without a star |
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Champagne[Champagne] Champagne作品集 四品府丞 (封疆大吏也!)
注册时间: 2007-09-15 帖子: 394 来自: Nowhere & Everywhere
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发表于: 星期五 三月 13, 2009 2:33 pm 发表主题: |
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clair 写到: |
Here is my "discontent:"
II
Bush fled
before the onslaught of winter
Obama must shovel
the sidewalks
of Wall Street |
In my view, only II reveals your "discontent."
I reads like a tanka and II kyoka.
Kyoka, loosely translated into English as “mad poem,” is to tanka what senryu is to haiku. _________________ I'm Champagne,
Bottled poetry with sparkling joy. |
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