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[anna]

People look at me
as a silent portrait.
They see tight lips
and a grim face.
"A cold fish�,
that is their impression.

I sing or weep behind the portrait.
talk much in my self-fish tune.
It flows between black and white,
bouncing with tick, tick.
They don抰 listen to a self-fish song,
omit to see the shades surrounding.

But I am not a talk doll,
to dump trimmed and useless speeches.
My life shows its ripples on paper,
not to please anyone or to claim attention.
The road I am on, I am secure.
A cold fish to be, on the portrait.

[[星子安娜]]

People look at me
as a silent portrait.
They see tight lips
and a grim face.
"A cold fish�,
that is their impression.

I sing or weep behind the portrait.
talk much in my self-fish tune.
It flows between black and white,
bouncing with tick, tick.
They don抰 listen to a self-fish song,
omit to see the shades surrounding.

But I am not a talk doll,
to dump trimmed and useless speeches.
My life shows its ripples on paper,
not to please anyone or to claim attention.
The road I am on, I am secure.
A cold fish to be, on the portrait.

[晓鸣]

在大众面前,我们常常没有沉默的权利.我们为说话而说话,为取悦别人而说话,为引
起别人重视而说话. 星子这首诗,是一个人沉默权利的宣言.

但整首诗歌似乎太直白了.讲了太多的道理.我更喜欢你其它诗那种寄情理于生活细节中的风格.

[[自己的敌人]]

在大众面前,我们常常没有沉默的权利.我们为说话而说话,为取悦别人而说话,为引
起别人重视而说话. 星子这首诗,是一个人沉默权利的宣言.

但整首诗歌似乎太直白了.讲了太多的道理.我更喜欢你其它诗那种寄情理于生活细节中的风格.

[anna]

Hi James,

In fact, I think the whole poem is deducing a theme, not too many thing.

Cold fish in English is, people don't share feeling with others.

So I want to make my point that when others see you a cold fish, not true, and they expect you to share, but they are not really care who you are, and what is in your heart... That is why I use self-fish song...

Sometimes, I think people sharing things or thoughts with highly faked feeling.

I think the whold poem is tight in this theme. If you don't agree, Please post your thoughts.

Thanks.

Anna
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Anna Yin

《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...

http://annapoetry.com

[[星子安娜]]

Hi James,

In fact, I think the whole poem is deducing a theme, not too many thing.

Cold fish in English is, people don't share feeling with others.

So I want to make my point that when others see you a cold fish, not true, and they expect you to share, but they are not really care who you are, and what is in your heart... That is why I use self-fish song...

Sometimes, I think people sharing things or thoughts with highly faked feeling.

I think the whold poem is tight in this theme. If you don't agree, Please post your thoughts.

Thanks.

Anna
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Anna Yin

《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...

http://annapoetry.com

[游客]

也许我上次表达得不准确."讲了太多的道理"并不是说这首诗表达了多重主题.而是
说这首诗在表达一个主题时直接陈述较多,形象化的东西相比你另一些诗而言少一些.

举例说,我更喜欢你另一首诗<A picture of me>的表达方式.请看:
I am the negative film
Of a peacock tail,
I am a floating cloud
Of the broad ocean,
I am the levity mask
Of a spoony fairy,
I am a shiny spotlight
Of the lonely corner.
你并没有直接陈述什么.而是用四种不同的意象,生动地表达了自己.

晓鸣

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也许我上次表达得不准确."讲了太多的道理"并不是说这首诗表达了多重主题.而是
说这首诗在表达一个主题时直接陈述较多,形象化的东西相比你另一些诗而言少一些.

举例说,我更喜欢你另一首诗<A picture of me>的表达方式.请看:
I am the negative film
Of a peacock tail,
I am a floating cloud
Of the broad ocean,
I am the levity mask
Of a spoony fairy,
I am a shiny spotlight
Of the lonely corner.
你并没有直接陈述什么.而是用四种不同的意象,生动地表达了自己.

晓鸣

[anna]

Hi James,

I understand what you mean.

I just want to try another style. In past time, I get used to 浪漫含蓄﹐
Now, this is 更直敘心意﹐自我反省。


Thanks.

Anna
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Anna Yin

《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...

http://annapoetry.com

[[星子安娜]]

Hi James,

I understand what you mean.

I just want to try another style. In past time, I get used to 浪漫含蓄﹐
Now, this is 更直敘心意﹐自我反省。


Thanks.

Anna
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Anna Yin

《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...

http://annapoetry.com