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[沐]

循着残梦走回
故园
又是麦苗吐穗的季节
促织欢快地叫着
菜花摇曳在晚风里

夕阳里的景色将不再完全熟悉
笑得生动的是陌生的面孔
不再生动的是一座座新的坟茔

[[FAFAFA]]

循着残梦走回
故园
又是麦苗吐穗的季节
促织欢快地叫着
菜花摇曳在晚风里

夕阳里的景色将不再完全熟悉
笑得生动的是陌生的面孔
不再生动的是一座座新的坟茔

[anna]

Hi Muo,

I like the first verse, But

夕阳里的景色将不再完全熟悉
笑得生动的是陌生的面孔
不再生动的是一座座新的坟茔

--I guess you could improve them.

But I like the whole theme and thoughts.

In fact, I also write a "home" poem for the nostalgia.

We are in the same boat.


Regards,
Anna

[[星子安娜]]

Hi Muo,

I like the first verse, But

夕阳里的景色将不再完全熟悉
笑得生动的是陌生的面孔
不再生动的是一座座新的坟茔

--I guess you could improve them.

But I like the whole theme and thoughts.

In fact, I also write a "home" poem for the nostalgia.

We are in the same boat.


Regards,
Anna

[游客]

hi anna

Thank you! I'll try to improve it!
mu

[[FAFAFA]]

hi anna

Thank you! I'll try to improve it!
mu