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帖子发表于: 星期五 七月 08, 2005 8:12 pm    发表主题: Switch 引用并回复

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“Please hold your hands”
I did it, with uncertainty
“You will become a poet”
You said

You read the poems
When we walked
You asked the tree, “Are you sleep?”
You burned the flowers
Worship God
Oh! How strange a man in my head
I hid my laugh to avert you got hurts

Time went by
We met again

I told you
I never became a poet
But I like the poems so much that it is just like you have predicted

You look at me like as if looking at an eccentric woman
“What age is now? Who is still wallow in poetry?”

Did we change the chairs?
There is nothing to say when we are face to face
The moonlight is like river
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帖子发表于: 星期一 七月 11, 2005 11:44 am    发表主题: 引用并回复

You could make this a little more concise.
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帖子发表于: 星期二 七月 12, 2005 7:38 pm    发表主题: 引用并回复

thank you, LavenderSwing,
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六品通判
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帖子发表于: 星期二 七月 12, 2005 8:07 pm    发表主题: 引用并回复

Hi, broadstroke
thank you lots for your E-mail and your suggetions. I changed a little:

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“Please hold your hands”
I did it, with uncertainty
“You will become a poet”
You said

You read the poems
When we walked
You asked the tree, “Are you asleep?”
You burned the flowers
Worship God
Oh! How strange a man in my head
I hid my laughter to avert you gotting hurt

Time went by
We met again

I told you
I never became a poet
But I like the poems so much that it is just like you have predicted

You look at me as if looking at an eccentric woman
“What age is now? Who is still wallow in poetry?”

Did we change the chairs?
There is nothing to say when we are face to face
The moonlight is like river
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Blue Ice[FAFAFA]
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六品通判
(官儿做大了,保持廉洁哦)
六品通判<BR>(官儿做大了,保持廉洁哦)


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帖子发表于: 星期三 九月 28, 2005 9:07 pm    发表主题: 引用并回复

changed a little

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“Please hold out your hands”
I did it, with uncertainty
“You will become a poet”
You said

You read the poems
When we walked
You asked the tree, “Are you asleep?”
You burned the flowers
Worshiped God
Oh! How strange a man in my head
I hid my laughter to avert you getting hurt

Time went by
We met again

I told you
I never became a poet
But I like the poems so much that it is just as you have predicted

You look at me as if looking at an eccentric woman
“What age is now? Who is still wallow in poetry?”

Did we switch chairs?
There is nothing to say when we are face to face
The moonlight is like river
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