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[星子]

我在品味特德修斯的满月，
我以为我爱上了羞涩的主人。
他提了满桶的奶，
站在背后静静地看着。

整晚，我一直在琢磨主人，
月亮以及奶牛，并记得
小时候的童谣有那么一句：
The cow jumps onto the moon.

昨夜我睡醒起来，月光正铺满我的床前，
我探头去看月亮时，很满。
而微风习习，纱帘轻晃。
我往镜子里照看;
主人一惊，退了一步，
哦，真的，很满很圆。

---
Full Moon and Little Frieda

by Ted Hughes

A cool small evening shrunk to a dog bark
and the clank of a bucket -
And you listening.
A spider's web, tense for the dew's touch.
A pail lifted, still and brimming - mirror
To tempt a first star to a tremor.

Cows are going home in the lane there,
looping the hedges with their warm
wreaths of breath -
A dark river of blood, many boulders,
Balancing unspilled milk.


'Moon!' you cry suddenly, 'Moon! Moon!'

The moon has stepped back like an artist
gazing amazed at a work
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[[ANNA]]

我在品味特德修斯的满月，
我以为我爱上了羞涩的主人。
他提了满桶的奶，
站在背后静静地看着。

整晚，我一直在琢磨主人，
月亮以及奶牛，并记得
小时候的童谣有那么一句：
The cow jumps onto the moon.

昨夜我睡醒起来，月光正铺满我的床前，
我探头去看月亮时，很满。
而微风习习，纱帘轻晃。
我往镜子里照看;
主人一惊，退了一步，
哦，真的，很满很圆。

---
Full Moon and Little Frieda

by Ted Hughes

A cool small evening shrunk to a dog bark
and the clank of a bucket -
And you listening.
A spider's web, tense for the dew's touch.
A pail lifted, still and brimming - mirror
To tempt a first star to a tremor.

Cows are going home in the lane there,
looping the hedges with their warm
wreaths of breath -
A dark river of blood, many boulders,
Balancing unspilled milk.


'Moon!' you cry suddenly, 'Moon! Moon!'

The moon has stepped back like an artist
gazing amazed at a work
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[华轩]

哪里可找到他的诗 我也想尝试那牛奶般能看能喝的月光

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哪里可找到他的诗 我也想尝试那牛奶般能看能喝的月光

[蔡利华]

月光很美.
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[[蔡利华]]

月光很美.
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http://www.blogcn.com/user44/cailihua/index.html
http://blog.sina.com.cn/cailihua9363

[anna]

哈哈。。。华轩是真懂其境呀。原诗歌中有几个关键词来关联，我在写中文时用了其他关键词。。。（他的原诗，就在同一贴里。）

蔡大哥，我就不知道了

这里，我再贴一个自己英文的初版，读后感吧

I fall in love with you, Moon,
seeing you step back like a timid artist.
Ted Hughes and little Frieda lean over the door,
listening to the night,
and you come out, a pail lifted.

Moon, they are gone.
they left you watching over the river.

How many years since?
And you watch the small village
becoming a floating island in the dark.
Among rows of windows,
the night flows and I, sleepless.

How much I want to imitate Li Po,
dancing with his white sleeves,
humming from his burning heart ,
night after night invited you for a drink!
The wine never drained,
but he drowned in the moon-lit river.

Moon, lift your bucket,
come out once again.
I won't make a sound,
my cup waits for you
to pour the solo wine.
_________________
---------------------

Anna Yin

《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...

http://annapoetry.com

[[星子安娜]]

哈哈。。。华轩是真懂其境呀。原诗歌中有几个关键词来关联，我在写中文时用了其他关键词。。。（他的原诗，就在同一贴里。）

蔡大哥，我就不知道了

这里，我再贴一个自己英文的初版，读后感吧

I fall in love with you, Moon,
seeing you step back like a timid artist.
Ted Hughes and little Frieda lean over the door,
listening to the night,
and you come out, a pail lifted.

Moon, they are gone.
they left you watching over the river.

How many years since?
And you watch the small village
becoming a floating island in the dark.
Among rows of windows,
the night flows and I, sleepless.

How much I want to imitate Li Po,
dancing with his white sleeves,
humming from his burning heart ,
night after night invited you for a drink!
The wine never drained,
but he drowned in the moon-lit river.

Moon, lift your bucket,
come out once again.
I won't make a sound,
my cup waits for you
to pour the solo wine.
_________________
---------------------

Anna Yin

《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...

http://annapoetry.com

[华轩]

我搜索了一遍 找不到关于他的其它作品 好像主要写情诗的

这首诗有三个切入 月光 奶牛 取其形似 取其稀释的流畅 一个盛接的桶作为作者的容

作者的心永远装不满月光 而物质的牛奶只会是一次新陈代谢 两者都不能固定

这才叫人烦恼

[[FAFAFA]]

我搜索了一遍 找不到关于他的其它作品 好像主要写情诗的

这首诗有三个切入 月光 奶牛 取其形似 取其稀释的流畅 一个盛接的桶作为作者的容

作者的心永远装不满月光 而物质的牛奶只会是一次新陈代谢 两者都不能固定

这才叫人烦恼

[星子]

华轩说的有理。。。还有另一层，我不能说。。。如果你看出了，也不能说

改天自己翻译一下。
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[[ANNA]]

华轩说的有理。。。还有另一层，我不能说。。。如果你看出了，也不能说

改天自己翻译一下。
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[星子]

（最后一节又改译了。。。看来我也得把中文改了。。）

While I read Ted Hughes’ Full Moon,
I think I fall in love with his master.
Standing behind the night sky,
he lifts his pail, full of milk,
and gazes on the earth in silence.

The whole night, I wonder
why his milk never drains,
and remember a line from a lullaby,
The cow jumps onto the moon.

Pre-dawn I awake.
in front of my window, the milk overflows.
Lifting up my eyes, I find the moon, full.
Breezes pass by, my thin veil sways.
I take a look at the glossy mirror,
his master is stunned and retreats.
Alas, the full and brimming moon.
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[[ANNA]]

（最后一节又改译了。。。看来我也得把中文改了。。）

While I read Ted Hughes’ Full Moon,
I think I fall in love with his master.
Standing behind the night sky,
he lifts his pail, full of milk,
and gazes on the earth in silence.

The whole night, I wonder
why his milk never drains,
and remember a line from a lullaby,
The cow jumps onto the moon.

Pre-dawn I awake.
in front of my window, the milk overflows.
Lifting up my eyes, I find the moon, full.
Breezes pass by, my thin veil sways.
I take a look at the glossy mirror,
his master is stunned and retreats.
Alas, the full and brimming moon.
_________________

[钟磊0502]

问好，韵味十足，诗情饱满。

[[钟磊]]

问好，韵味十足，诗情饱满。

[rolland]

和Ted Hughes 的诗有着一样的画面感和韵味。欣赏。

[[FAFAFA]]

和Ted Hughes 的诗有着一样的画面感和韵味。欣赏。

[anna]

谢谢钟磊。。。

谢谢rolland。

Ted Hughes 的有着更深的意思，更多的层次。。。他每个词都是关联和有意义的。。。可惜我的很浅。。。
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---------------------

Anna Yin

《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...

http://annapoetry.com

[[星子安娜]]

谢谢钟磊。。。

谢谢rolland。

Ted Hughes 的有着更深的意思，更多的层次。。。他每个词都是关联和有意义的。。。可惜我的很浅。。。
_________________
---------------------

Anna Yin

《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...

http://annapoetry.com

[华轩]

特德重在叙述他的所能联想 为一件发现而准确描述 他的用词确实很有艺术修养

与中国古代名诗人可比 为文学难言才修饰 属于修饰大家了


星子可能读后感的原因 抒情面居广


The Mermaid's Purse


The Mermaid's shriek
Made Ocean shake.


She'd opened her purse
For an aspirin—
What a shock!
Out came a shark
With a great black fin
Hissing: ‘Here's Nurse
And Surgeon in one
Great flashing grin!’


Now both headache
And head have gone
Or she'd feel worse.


我找到这篇 很相似 隐晦但关联

[[FAFAFA]]

特德重在叙述他的所能联想 为一件发现而准确描述 他的用词确实很有艺术修养

与中国古代名诗人可比 为文学难言才修饰 属于修饰大家了


星子可能读后感的原因 抒情面居广


The Mermaid's Purse


The Mermaid's shriek
Made Ocean shake.


She'd opened her purse
For an aspirin—
What a shock!
Out came a shark
With a great black fin
Hissing: ‘Here's Nurse
And Surgeon in one
Great flashing grin!’


Now both headache
And head have gone
Or she'd feel worse.


我找到这篇 很相似 隐晦但关联

[星子]

谢谢华轩。。。。我读了他的后，并没有好好理解，就写了自己的。。。

后来才看到 对他诗歌的 评析。。。很不好意思。

research about Hughes and his poems.

http://www.richardwebster.net/tedhughes.html

http://www.bookworm.me.uk/index2.php?option=com_content&do_pdf=1&id=59
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[[ANNA]]

谢谢华轩。。。。我读了他的后，并没有好好理解，就写了自己的。。。

后来才看到 对他诗歌的 评析。。。很不好意思。

research about Hughes and his poems.

http://www.richardwebster.net/tedhughes.html

http://www.bookworm.me.uk/index2.php?option=com_content&do_pdf=1&id=59
_________________

[华轩]

我认为星子的理解是接近作者的 因为我也“那么看 ”

说到优美显然他的诗不能出色
从他的诗我推测与他的居住所及生活习惯有关 似乎更多时候只在门口走走 一个不好动的人
加之词采不如汉语既有的丰富 偏狭的取材造成他的诗冷色如金属

但同时也突出了他的艺术造诣 所以这种思维习惯像我上面说的 真可一学

[[FAFAFA]]

我认为星子的理解是接近作者的 因为我也“那么看 ”

说到优美显然他的诗不能出色
从他的诗我推测与他的居住所及生活习惯有关 似乎更多时候只在门口走走 一个不好动的人
加之词采不如汉语既有的丰富 偏狭的取材造成他的诗冷色如金属

但同时也突出了他的艺术造诣 所以这种思维习惯像我上面说的 真可一学

[anna]

初读时，我被他的想象震惊。。。就特别想用上这些意象。。。月亮在这诗里真活了。。。

这艺术也活了，，，就像我们是他的艺术，而他是我们所看的艺术。。。这样的构思真美。

A spider's web, tense for the dew's touch.
A pail lifted, still and brimming - mirror
To tempt a first star to a tremor.



The moon has stepped back like an artist
gazing amazed at a work
_________________
---------------------

Anna Yin

《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...

http://annapoetry.com

[[星子安娜]]

初读时，我被他的想象震惊。。。就特别想用上这些意象。。。月亮在这诗里真活了。。。

这艺术也活了，，，就像我们是他的艺术，而他是我们所看的艺术。。。这样的构思真美。

A spider's web, tense for the dew's touch.
A pail lifted, still and brimming - mirror
To tempt a first star to a tremor.



The moon has stepped back like an artist
gazing amazed at a work
_________________
---------------------

Anna Yin

《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...

http://annapoetry.com

[anna]

Final version

I fall in love with you, Moon,
seeing you step back like a timid artist.
Ted Hughes and little Frieda lean over the door,
listening to the night,
and you come out, a pail lifted.

Moon, they are gone.
they left you watching over the river.

How many years since?
And you watch the small village
becoming a floating island in the dark.
Among rows of windows,
the night flows and I, sleepless.

How much I want to imitate Li Po,
dancing with his white sleeves,
a hum from his burning heart ,
night after night inviting you for a drink!
The wine never drained,
but he drowned in the silver river.

Moon, lift your bucket,
come out once again.
I won't make a sound.



Nominated by Penshell for IBPC's July contest.
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---------------------

Anna Yin

《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...

http://annapoetry.com

[[星子安娜]]

Final version

I fall in love with you, Moon,
seeing you step back like a timid artist.
Ted Hughes and little Frieda lean over the door,
listening to the night,
and you come out, a pail lifted.

Moon, they are gone.
they left you watching over the river.

How many years since?
And you watch the small village
becoming a floating island in the dark.
Among rows of windows,
the night flows and I, sleepless.

How much I want to imitate Li Po,
dancing with his white sleeves,
a hum from his burning heart ,
night after night inviting you for a drink!
The wine never drained,
but he drowned in the silver river.

Moon, lift your bucket,
come out once again.
I won't make a sound.



Nominated by Penshell for IBPC's July contest.
_________________
---------------------

Anna Yin

《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...

http://annapoetry.com