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Colin Campbell · 发表于: 星期二二月 15, 2005 10:18 am 发表主题: Dianchi Lake

Dianchi Lake

Nature’s treasure, Dianchi Lake.
Living water, nature’s lifeblood.
Timeless winds blow over water.
Dianchi is a water world.

Living water, nature’s lifeblood.
Setting sun on the inland sea.
Dianchi is a water world.
Windsong and the setting sun.

Setting sun on the inland sea.
Timeless winds blow over water.
Windsong and the setting sun.
Nature’s treasure, Dianchi Lake.

LavenderSwing · 发表于: 星期二二月 15, 2005 12:40 pm 发表主题:

Setting sun on inland sea?

or Setting sun on the inland sea?

Hi Colin, great to hear from you again...

Anna

Colin Campbell · 发表于: 星期二二月 15, 2005 11:21 pm 发表主题:

Colin Campbell · 发表于: 星期三二月 16, 2005 9:25 pm 发表主题:

I've tried a translation:

滇池

造化的宝贝滇池
活着水造化的血
恒久风吹上水池
滇池在水的世界

活着水造化的血
内陆在海中日落
滇池在水的世界
风的长歌和日落

内陆在海中日落
恒久风吹上水池
风的长歌和日落
造化的宝贝滇池

I should welcome any feedback.

with kind regards
Colin

星子 · 发表于: 星期四二月 17, 2005 10:54 pm 发表主题:

--Hi Colin, I have revised some as the following, since I would like to add a little chinese smack in. (hope you don't mind)

滇池

天赋珍品是滇池
自然的活力水源
恒久风吹荡水池
滇池在银波世界

自然的活力水源
日落沉没内陆海
滇池在银波世界
风飘长歌伴日落

日落沉没内陆海
恒久风吹荡水池
风飘长歌伴日落
天赋珍品是滇池

Natural treasure is Dianchi Lake.
Nature’s lifeblood is inside.
Timeless winds blow over water.
Dianchi is a silvery world.

Nature’s lifeblood is inside.
Setting sun on the inland sea.
Dianchi is a silvery world.
Wind brings song with the setting sun.

Setting sun on the inland sea.
Timeless winds blow over water.
Wind brings song with the setting sun.
Natural treasure is Dianchi Lake.

Colin Campbell · 发表于: 星期五二月 18, 2005 8:03 pm 发表主题:

秋叶 · 发表于: 星期六二月 19, 2005 2:24 am 发表主题:

Colin Campbell · 发表于: 星期日二月 20, 2005 5:42 am 发表主题:

Hi Qiu Ye,

Thank you for your kind words and thank you for helping with my poem.

Much appreciated!
Colin