酷我-北美枫

ericcoliu

My tanka:

the shining moon
that used to perch
on my childhood dreams
now hovers over
a rooming house

has received third place in the 2009 San Francisco International Haiku, Senryu, Tanka, and Rengay Competition sponsored by Haiku Poets of Northern California, and it will also be published in Mariposa.

The contest results have been posted at http://www.hpnc.org/

You can read the winning poems and judges’ comments there.

This award is my rebuttal to those criticisms made by Lake, 博弈, and others.

Many thanks to my readers!

Chen-ou Liu

(The following tanka sequence has been published in the issue No. 9 of Gusts, the official journal of Tanka Canada. I’m overjoyed that this month alone, my tanka have been published in three – Ribbons, Modern English Tanka, and Gusts -- of the Big Four tanka journals.

Now, I’m waiting for good news from American Tanka)

Reading and Writing: Life on the Page

Dreams, Dewdrops, and Bare Trees

I

Taipei dreams
Ajax eyes waken --
my mind drifts
winged and yearning
for things not yet lost

II

in Canada
moist green touches my yard --
dewdrops
cling to blades of grass
just as I do

III

buried earth
a silver carpet --
maples and I
gaze at the barrenness
we see in each other
_________________
Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul

christine · 四品府丞 （封疆大吏也！） 注册时间: 2008-02-25 帖子: 304

ericcoliu · 发表于: 星期四四月 09, 2009 7:01 am 发表主题:

I would say a sense of sabi, which is a recurring theme in Basho’s poetry.
Sabi would be defined as meaning solitary or lonely, referring to a man's state of mind when he is in want of company.

loneliness --
standing amid the blossoms,
a cypress tree

-- Basho
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Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul

温暖的水獸 · 发表于: 星期四四月 09, 2009 3:30 pm 发表主题:

ericcoliu · 发表于: 星期五四月 10, 2009 7:28 pm 发表主题:

博弈 · 发表于: 星期六四月 11, 2009 4:57 pm 发表主题:

sometimes, I wonder why tanka
doesn't one have better ones to do
it'll be less yours as you do more

as a poet to be, innovation is a quality
to be desired, all I see here is a simple
play of copy act, can't help it!
_________________
Sometimes I am busy
Sometimes I am free
In between, there's it
Until I find thee...

ericcoliu · 发表于: 星期日四月 12, 2009 7:43 am 发表主题:

博弈 · 发表于: 星期日四月 12, 2009 1:10 pm 发表主题:

this is an honest advice to you, did not know you would read it this way. in my view you are not a poet yet, matters not how many times published (how easily that can be done!) the point i want to make is why not something yourself? i never liked writers who copy, neither new or old and one thing for sure (how dare you) I know nothing about tanka!
_________________
Sometimes I am busy
Sometimes I am free
In between, there's it
Until I find thee...

博弈 · 发表于: 星期日四月 12, 2009 1:43 pm 发表主题:

thanks for pointing to your better posts, but, all i see still copy, copy copy, I have seen others done those and better. why not something yourself? the point is as an enthusiastic moderator which you are you should promote not you, but the essence of poetry, and to my taste, better original or innovative which i see greatly missing in your works. get it? i may be the one speaks out, don't under estimate readers. also. my advice is no more tanka, please, create your own, poet.
_________________
Sometimes I am busy
Sometimes I am free
In between, there's it
Until I find thee...

ericcoliu · 发表于: 星期日四月 12, 2009 2:07 pm 发表主题:

ericcoliu · 发表于: 星期日四月 12, 2009 2:13 pm 发表主题:

博弈 · 发表于: 星期日四月 12, 2009 3:37 pm 发表主题:

well, another head, just don't get it
i think for haiku or tanka, it's like a quick come
for people with no creativity yet wanting a fame
masturbating themselves in a 5 by 7 room and then
by George or Hiroshima, all comes, at the same time
(go figure this one out)

for a Chinese ethnic poet, why promote that new found "American Tankii"
as if it is something really reborn and worth while, can't you be
more creative without them? to be a copycat (you could also do
American Katauta, or Choka), might as well develop...
say, ’American 词‘， ‘American 绝‘, there is no originality to
reinventing those artificial things with language make-ups, or labeled such
and who are these American Tankists
who can claim they are poets, English Tankaist at most if they write well.

granted, knowing them as a school of poetry and able to appreciate them is good,
just like 'reinventing' other types of ancient poetics;
what i see here is an intentional promotion of your own published little poems,
to an unbalanced degree, and who gives a Defg!

then referring to " Show me your published English poems",
what a snobbery idiot!
_________________
Sometimes I am busy
Sometimes I am free
In between, there's it
Until I find thee...

ericcoliu · 发表于: 星期日四月 12, 2009 4:02 pm 发表主题:

a mouth
opening, closing
salivating --
my recollection
of a failed poet

-- paraphrasing one of my tanka published in American Tanka, issue 18, whose editor is Michael McClintock.

a mouth
opening, closing
salivating --
my recollection
of a divorced man
_________________
Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul

robarts · 发表于: 星期一四月 13, 2009 12:57 pm 发表主题:

博弈 · 发表于: 星期一四月 13, 2009 2:58 pm 发表主题:

Anyone can become angry. That is easy. But
to be angry with the right person, to the right
degree, at the right time, for the right purpose
and in the right way... that is not easy.
-- Aristotle.

To practice angry poetry is to let the fingers do the
Good while risking being wronged. There are innocent,
Such, heads claim to be poets yet yelling me a failed poet;
“What do they know about poetry anyway”, you said,
I laughed for they must have thought I had been a poet.
I can see holes in his mouth, and thinking:
do I want to save his breath before his teeth drag
his tongue-cuts out?

And they think they deserve an F word easily.
F is for flowers, grow upwards with a root in mother soils.
What do they know about F, anyway, fuck says.

Well, almost amusing, but not quite yet.

--To be continued--
_________________
Sometimes I am busy
Sometimes I am free
In between, there's it
Until I find thee...