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fanfan[FAFAFA]
fanfan作品集
四品府丞
（封疆大吏也！）
注册时间: 2007-12-27
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来自: Canada
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 发表于: 星期一 二月 23, 2009 11:20 am 发表主题: Winning Tanka of 2008 International Erotic Tanka Contest |
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Tanka of the Week (via Tanka News and haiku Headlines)
First Place Winner: Natalia L. Rudychev
i wish
my kisses
were the cherry petals
that stream all over you
in April wind
Second Place Winner: Marjorie Buettner
I wake
to feel your touch
entering my dreams
there you untie the canoe
and we drift under wild stars
Third Place Winner: Claudia Coutu Radmore
night blooming cereus
its soundless blossoming
lost in ours
this morning’s serenity
of spent grace
What do you think of these poems? Are they good enough?
Any thoughts, comments or disagreements would be much appreciated!
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Don't imitate me;
it's as boring
as the two halves of a melon.
最后进行编辑的是 fanfan on 星期四 二月 26, 2009 10:07 am, 总计第 2 次编辑 |
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agincourt[agincourt]
agincourt作品集
九品县令
（一不小心，做了官儿了。）
注册时间: 2009-01-24
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| 发表于: 星期一 二月 23, 2009 1:43 pm 发表主题: Re: Winners of the First International Erotic Tanka Contest |
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[What do you think of these poems? Are they good enough?
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It depends on your definition of "erotic."
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Napped half the day;
no one
punished me! |
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fanfan[FAFAFA]
fanfan作品集
四品府丞
（封疆大吏也！）
注册时间: 2007-12-27
帖子: 353
来自: Canada
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| 发表于: 星期二 二月 24, 2009 6:36 pm 发表主题: Re: Winners of the First International Erotic Tanka Contest |
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It depends on your definition of "erotic." |
According to Pamela Babusci who is the sponsor and judge for the First International Erotic Tanka Contest for 2008, “erotic” means expressing love in all its manifestations.
My definition is that "erotic" means something marked by or tending to arouse sexual desire or interest.
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Don't imitate me;
it's as boring
as the two halves of a melon. |
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ericcoliu[ericcoliu]
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二品总督
（刚入二品，小心做人）
注册时间: 2007-05-29
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来自: GTA, Canada
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| 发表于: 星期三 二月 25, 2009 8:21 am 发表主题: Re: Winners of the First International Erotic Tanka Contest |
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First Place Winner: Natalia L. Rudychev
i wish
my kisses
were the cherry petals
that stream all over you
in April wind
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While views vary on the way tanka should be written in English and tankaists continue to experiment, the contemporary English tanka may be described as an untitled free-verse, unrhymed short poem having at most 31 syllables, in most cases about 20 syllables, arranged in five lines. Natalia Rudychev’s tanka is written in a minimalist style, about one beat in its length when read aloud. Every word is well crafted and weaved into the fabric of the whole tanka. She employs the classical Japanese imagery of springtime to describe “the fluidity of fleeting kisses, the color and perfume of falling cherry petals, lightly caressing every inch of her lover’s body, caught in the warmth of April wind,” arousing the reader’s sexual desire or interest in the most subtle way.
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Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul |
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fanfan[FAFAFA]
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四品府丞
（封疆大吏也！）
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来自: Canada
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| 发表于: 星期四 二月 26, 2009 10:13 am 发表主题: Re: Winners of the First International Erotic Tanka Contest |
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She employs the classical Japanese imagery of springtime to describe “the fluidity of fleeting kisses, the color and perfume of falling cherry petals, lightly caressing every inch of her lover’s body, caught in the warmth of April wind,” arousing the reader’s sexual desire or interest in the most subtle way. |
Yes.
In my view, one of the literary strengths of this tanka is that it is deeply rooted in the poetic tradition of Japanese court poetry and at the same time reveals a contemporary view of human sexuality.
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Don't imitate me;
it's as boring
as the two halves of a melon. |
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dundas[dundas]
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五品知州
（再努力一把就是四品大员了！）
注册时间: 2008-02-23
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| 发表于: 星期六 二月 28, 2009 1:38 pm 发表主题: Re: Winners of the First International Erotic Tanka Contest |
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According to Pamela Babusci who is the sponsor and judge for the First International Erotic Tanka Contest for 2008, “erotic” means expressing love in all its manifestations.
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Although all of them are evocatively sexy, where are the physical aspects of Love or S e x? LOL!
Enjoyed the read.
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My throat knew thirst before the structure
Of skin and vein around the well |
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fanfan[FAFAFA]
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四品府丞
（封疆大吏也！）
注册时间: 2007-12-27
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来自: Canada
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| 发表于: 星期一 三月 02, 2009 8:44 am 发表主题: Re: Winners of the First International Erotic Tanka Contest |
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where are the physical aspects of Love or S e x?
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If you read the second tanka carefully, it speaks to your “physical concerns of s e x.” – the erotic beauty of two people making love.
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Don't imitate me;
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as the two halves of a melon. |
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fanfan[FFFFFF]
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四品府丞
（封疆大吏也！）
注册时间: 2007-12-27
帖子: 353
来自: Canada
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| 发表于: 星期六 三月 07, 2009 8:48 pm 发表主题: Re: Winning Tanka of 2008 International Erotic Tanka Contest |
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Second Place Winner: Marjorie Buettner
I wake
to feel your touch
entering my dreams
there you untie the canoe
and we drift under wild stars
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Judge's Comments:
"This tanka was both sensual and evocative. A woman wakes to her lover’s touch entering, like a silent thief, in the night, into her hiding place of reveries. A secret place that few can enter or will ever enter. Once into the other lover’s dream world, she unties a canoe, that has been waiting to be released, where they drift effortlessly perhaps for years or for just a brief night. They float and sail beneath ambrosial stars. Stars that are savage, wild with passion, and who knows where those constellations will take them."
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Don't imitate me;
it's as boring
as the two halves of a melon. |
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christine[christine]
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四品府丞
（封疆大吏也！）
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| 发表于: 星期日 三月 15, 2009 12:45 pm 发表主题: Re: Winning Tanka of 2008 International Erotic Tanka Contest |
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Judge's Comments:
"This tanka was both sensual and evocative. A woman wakes to her lover’s touch entering, like a silent thief, in the night, into her hiding place of reveries. A secret place that few can enter or will ever enter. Once into the other lover’s dream world, she unties a canoe, that has been waiting to be released, where they drift effortlessly perhaps for years or for just a brief night. They float and sail beneath ambrosial stars. Stars that are savage, wild with passion, and who knows where those constellations will take them." |
Indeed, this is sensually evocative and emotive. And I like its dream imagery. |
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浴恩福[浴恩福]
浴恩福作品集
六品通判
（官儿做大了，保持廉洁哦）
注册时间: 2008-05-08
帖子: 123
来自: 多倫多
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| 发表于: 星期三 三月 18, 2009 1:20 pm 发表主题: Re: Winning Tanka of 2008 International Erotic Tanka Contest |
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Third Place Winner: Claudia Coutu Radmore
night blooming cereus
its soundless blossoming
lost in ours
this morning’s serenity
of spent grace
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A sexually appealing tanka.
Is it about two people making love?
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報三恩、耕三大福田 |
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fanfan[FAFAFA]
fanfan作品集
四品府丞
（封疆大吏也！）
注册时间: 2007-12-27
帖子: 353
来自: Canada
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| 发表于: 星期四 三月 19, 2009 3:35 pm 发表主题: Re: Winning Tanka of 2008 International Erotic Tanka Contest |
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Third Place Winner: Claudia Coutu Radmore
night blooming cereus
its soundless blossoming
lost in ours
this morning’s serenity
of spent grace
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A sexually appealing tanka.
Is it about two people making love? |
Yes, you could say so.
Judge's Comments:
"This tanka was strong in its subtle erotic beauty of two people making love. The tanka poet equates it to the silent blossoming of a night blooming cereus, a desert plant that blooms once a year in mid-summer for only one night. These two lovers openly surrender, not just their bodies, but, the essence of their inner being, the depth of their souls, petal by petal. There is a stillness after making love; after the fusion of two souls, two hearts, in perfect communion. Now, among the morning dew, the morning star, there is a tranquility, beyond words. A serenity that penetrates every fiber, the spent grace, of sacred love making."
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Don't imitate me;
it's as boring
as the two halves of a melon. |
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