酷我-北美枫

[星子]

Thanks 孟冲之.

英文版的改了多变。。。隐藏了，还是被你挖出来了。

所以再改一下

Around the doorway, you wander,
breathe in two languages.

Remembrance is a house
with front and back yards,
yet you want to add more windows.

It is not for increasing its value,
nor making it pretty,
just because you live inside.

The wind swings the door open;
shadows float in the moonlight.

Someday you may get tired
and list the house for sale.

But somewhere else, behind the door,
whispers imitate your language.

They don't know where you have been -
the rain is like a curtain,
your face veiled behind.
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[[ANNA]]

Thanks 孟冲之.

英文版的改了多变。。。隐藏了，还是被你挖出来了。

所以再改一下

Around the doorway, you wander,
breathe in two languages.

Remembrance is a house
with front and back yards,
yet you want to add more windows.

It is not for increasing its value,
nor making it pretty,
just because you live inside.

The wind swings the door open;
shadows float in the moonlight.

Someday you may get tired
and list the house for sale.

But somewhere else, behind the door,
whispers imitate your language.

They don't know where you have been -
the rain is like a curtain,
your face veiled behind.
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[星子]

Thanks 温东华. 问好
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[[ANNA]]

Thanks 温东华. 问好
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[不清]

很久(一年多)沒看星子的作品，這首跟我印象中星子的作品很不用！乾淨了很多！
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「四十二排浪，沒有一排是相似的」——不清

博客：
http://42waves.tumblr.com

[[不清]]

很久(一年多)沒看星子的作品，這首跟我印象中星子的作品很不用！乾淨了很多！
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「四十二排浪，沒有一排是相似的」——不清

博客：
http://42waves.tumblr.com

[风动]

距离感，冷俊。 提读。

[[风动]]

距离感，冷俊。 提读。

[疏影]

你总在门口徘徊，
用两种语言呼吸。

回忆就象房子有着前院，后院，
你却想着多加几个窗户。
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疏影横斜水清浅，暗香浮动月黄昏

[[疏影]]

你总在门口徘徊，
用两种语言呼吸。

回忆就象房子有着前院，后院，
你却想着多加几个窗户。
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疏影横斜水清浅，暗香浮动月黄昏

[星子]

Thanks 不清, 风动,暗香疏影!
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[[ANNA]]

Thanks 不清, 风动,暗香疏影!
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[anna]

Just read this essay and thought of others comments on "The Woman Within The House". (kind of Imagist Poetry) Lately I tried to write in different way, bored by my old free verses)


Zt from http://www.suite101.com/

Throughout history, poetry has been ever-changing. When you come from a time where Wordsworth, Keats and Elliot were prominent, Williams can come as quite a shock.

Williams is a pioneer in poetry, he is among one of the first imagists to open the door into a whole new realm of poetry. The poem "This Is Just To Say" is among the most prominent imagist poems in recorded history.

This Is Just To Say
William Carlos Williams

I have eaten

the plums

that were in

the icebox

and which

you were probably

saving

for breakfast.

Forgive me

they were delicious

so sweet

and so cold.

Imagist Poetry
To better understand "This Is Just To Say" as well as all of Williams' work, a definition of imagist poetry is in order. Imagist poetry can be difficult to define because there are many perceptions of what exactly it is. Imagist poetry is a seeming contradiction. It is concise and simple in the visual aspect as well as the literal meaning, but it is also quite complex in its "actual" meaning. Imagist poetry paints a concrete picture for the reader while expressing a deeper meaning.

This particular poem uses clean and succinct language to create a picture. At first glance this poem comes off almost as if it were a note left on the table next to the empty plum container awaiting discovery.

At first glance this poem seems like nothing more than a simple note, but after it is read the reader starts to notice the poetic feel of the words. The reader gets dragged in by the simplicity and swallowed by the complexities.

The language in this poem is very crisp, clear and to the point. There isn't a word over three syllables in the poems entirety and the poem itself is only 28 words. This poem is by right and by form simplistic in nature.

The Intended Meaning or Meanings

There is no tangible answer as to what this poem is pertaining to, many observations can be made and many questions can be raised. Is the poem about a love affair? Does the poem have nothing to do with love? Is forgiveness really what the speaker seeks? Is the speaker sincere in apologizing? Is the speaker self-righteous? Polite? Pleased? Good-humored?

One take would be that this was a note left for a lover, not necessarily a love or significant other, but a lover. It was left in a taunting manner, this can be derived from that fact that the speaker detailed the plums in a way that made them seem erotic and tantalizing. The speaker also makes it known that he/she knew that the plums weren't for eating, but that he/she ate them anyway. It is funny in a twisted sort of way.

This poem can be universal in that most people know what it is like to be taunted by a lover, or at the very least have something they desired or were saving taken away for the amusement of another. The fact that this poem is so universal adds to its general appeal, it makes it personal to the reader.

Though the poem does generate many unanswered questions. What is the relationship between the sender and the reciever? Who are they? Was the culprit forgiven? Since Williams never answered these questions they are left to the wondering mind of the reader, perhaps in an effort to taunt them the same way as the poem's speaker.

Sneaky Poetry

This poem sneaks up on the reader; he/she looks and is inquisitive because at a glance this doesn't seem like much of a poem at all. Then, all of a sudden the readers' mind is shooting off in all directions trying to interpret what exactly the situation surrounding the image is and all that is left is an image of tantalizing plums to taunt you. This poem turns into a love affair gone awry and all of this stems from the simple image of plums. Thus is the beauty of imagist poetry.
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Anna Yin

《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...

http://annapoetry.com

[[星子安娜]]

Just read this essay and thought of others comments on "The Woman Within The House". (kind of Imagist Poetry) Lately I tried to write in different way, bored by my old free verses)


Zt from http://www.suite101.com/

Throughout history, poetry has been ever-changing. When you come from a time where Wordsworth, Keats and Elliot were prominent, Williams can come as quite a shock.

Williams is a pioneer in poetry, he is among one of the first imagists to open the door into a whole new realm of poetry. The poem "This Is Just To Say" is among the most prominent imagist poems in recorded history.

This Is Just To Say
William Carlos Williams

I have eaten

the plums

that were in

the icebox

and which

you were probably

saving

for breakfast.

Forgive me

they were delicious

so sweet

and so cold.

Imagist Poetry
To better understand "This Is Just To Say" as well as all of Williams' work, a definition of imagist poetry is in order. Imagist poetry can be difficult to define because there are many perceptions of what exactly it is. Imagist poetry is a seeming contradiction. It is concise and simple in the visual aspect as well as the literal meaning, but it is also quite complex in its "actual" meaning. Imagist poetry paints a concrete picture for the reader while expressing a deeper meaning.

This particular poem uses clean and succinct language to create a picture. At first glance this poem comes off almost as if it were a note left on the table next to the empty plum container awaiting discovery.

At first glance this poem seems like nothing more than a simple note, but after it is read the reader starts to notice the poetic feel of the words. The reader gets dragged in by the simplicity and swallowed by the complexities.

The language in this poem is very crisp, clear and to the point. There isn't a word over three syllables in the poems entirety and the poem itself is only 28 words. This poem is by right and by form simplistic in nature.

The Intended Meaning or Meanings

There is no tangible answer as to what this poem is pertaining to, many observations can be made and many questions can be raised. Is the poem about a love affair? Does the poem have nothing to do with love? Is forgiveness really what the speaker seeks? Is the speaker sincere in apologizing? Is the speaker self-righteous? Polite? Pleased? Good-humored?

One take would be that this was a note left for a lover, not necessarily a love or significant other, but a lover. It was left in a taunting manner, this can be derived from that fact that the speaker detailed the plums in a way that made them seem erotic and tantalizing. The speaker also makes it known that he/she knew that the plums weren't for eating, but that he/she ate them anyway. It is funny in a twisted sort of way.

This poem can be universal in that most people know what it is like to be taunted by a lover, or at the very least have something they desired or were saving taken away for the amusement of another. The fact that this poem is so universal adds to its general appeal, it makes it personal to the reader.

Though the poem does generate many unanswered questions. What is the relationship between the sender and the reciever? Who are they? Was the culprit forgiven? Since Williams never answered these questions they are left to the wondering mind of the reader, perhaps in an effort to taunt them the same way as the poem's speaker.

Sneaky Poetry

This poem sneaks up on the reader; he/she looks and is inquisitive because at a glance this doesn't seem like much of a poem at all. Then, all of a sudden the readers' mind is shooting off in all directions trying to interpret what exactly the situation surrounding the image is and all that is left is an image of tantalizing plums to taunt you. This poem turns into a love affair gone awry and all of this stems from the simple image of plums. Thus is the beauty of imagist poetry.
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Anna Yin

《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...

http://annapoetry.com

[潘志远]

我想这应该是个热爱生活,而又诗意的女人.
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坚持文化和个性写作,坚持质朴和诗意表达.

[[吟啸徐行]]

我想这应该是个热爱生活,而又诗意的女人.
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坚持文化和个性写作,坚持质朴和诗意表达.

[玩偶]

有俳句的味道。
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冷静的、慢条斯理的疯。

[[玩偶]]

有俳句的味道。
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冷静的、慢条斯理的疯。

[星子]

谢谢 潘志远 , 你的诗歌很有个性。欣赏.

谢谢玩偶, 慢条斯理的疯
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[[ANNA]]

谢谢 潘志远 , 你的诗歌很有个性。欣赏.

谢谢玩偶, 慢条斯理的疯
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[jwayan]

评论什么都是多余，已阅
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www.bapoo.cn

[[水瓶怪生]]

评论什么都是多余，已阅
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www.bapoo.cn

[anna]

今天很开心得到MATTICA.CA的通知。
这首英文诗歌获了他们第十二届Mattia国际诗歌奖。


Hi Anna- CONGRATULATIONS - this is to advise you that you have won Second prize in the Mattia 12th International Poetry Competition.
Your poem - "The Woman Within Her House"
Please e-mail me your address. Allow 4-6 weeks for payment. I will be
Putting up the winners pages soon. Life is very busy for me. Thank you for your patience.


参赛规则如下
http://www.mattia.ca/competition12/rules12/rules12.html

Winning poems will be posted later. 要等几天才能贴出.
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Anna Yin

《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...

http://annapoetry.com

[[星子安娜]]

今天很开心得到MATTICA.CA的通知。
这首英文诗歌获了他们第十二届Mattia国际诗歌奖。


Hi Anna- CONGRATULATIONS - this is to advise you that you have won Second prize in the Mattia 12th International Poetry Competition.
Your poem - "The Woman Within Her House"
Please e-mail me your address. Allow 4-6 weeks for payment. I will be
Putting up the winners pages soon. Life is very busy for me. Thank you for your patience.


参赛规则如下
http://www.mattia.ca/competition12/rules12/rules12.html

Winning poems will be posted later. 要等几天才能贴出.
_________________
---------------------

Anna Yin

《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...

http://annapoetry.com

[星子]

Judge comment on winning poems

http://www.mattia.ca/competition13/winners12/winners-12th.html


The Woman Within Her House
There is a haunting about this piece. “Around the doorway, you wander,” There is too a communication. . . “breathe in two languages”. . . a universal, generational ‘race’ if you will. There is no doubt an acceptable thing we have to fold in front of “Remembrance is a house”. Anna kind of nailed down a portrait of the ones we think about before they are gone. Aside from the subtle-obvious message this bit of writing does, in a life committed to our elders, we are here to at best give homage to those that came before us. . . and yet. . . question them. The great part of this quiet surprise (and I call it a “quiet surprise” because if you spend as much time with this bit of writing as I did. . . you’ll get the message) is that she hit the heart of a baby boomer age whose children are now old enough to worry. Anna, you done good. It’s not too often that three opening lines command a great read to follow. . . and go figure. . . you were smart enough to keep this reader in line with that word “languages”. Wonderful!
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[[ANNA]]

Judge comment on winning poems

http://www.mattia.ca/competition13/winners12/winners-12th.html


The Woman Within Her House
There is a haunting about this piece. “Around the doorway, you wander,” There is too a communication. . . “breathe in two languages”. . . a universal, generational ‘race’ if you will. There is no doubt an acceptable thing we have to fold in front of “Remembrance is a house”. Anna kind of nailed down a portrait of the ones we think about before they are gone. Aside from the subtle-obvious message this bit of writing does, in a life committed to our elders, we are here to at best give homage to those that came before us. . . and yet. . . question them. The great part of this quiet surprise (and I call it a “quiet surprise” because if you spend as much time with this bit of writing as I did. . . you’ll get the message) is that she hit the heart of a baby boomer age whose children are now old enough to worry. Anna, you done good. It’s not too often that three opening lines command a great read to follow. . . and go figure. . . you were smart enough to keep this reader in line with that word “languages”. Wonderful!
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[华尔街牧牛]

我将你的房子买下,天天听着门后你的耳语

[[华尔街牧牛]]

我将你的房子买下,天天听着门后你的耳语

[艺芳]

祝贺星子诗歌再次获奖!为你高兴,星子.
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风来意在疏竹，雁过了无痕迹！

[[风来疏竹]]

祝贺星子诗歌再次获奖!为你高兴,星子.
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风来意在疏竹，雁过了无痕迹！