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You, My Calliope (published in Word Catalyst)

 
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帖子发表于: 星期日 十一月 30, 2008 10:44 pm    发表主题: You, My Calliope (published in Word Catalyst) 引用并回复

Reading and Writing: Life on the Page

(You, My Calliope has been published in the February Issue of Word Catalyst. It’s the most prestigious magazine (3 editors, one editorial consultant, and 10 staff writers) in which my works, poems and short stories, have been published so far. I hope this publication of my poems in America will open up further possibilities of getting more of my writing published in America in the foreseeable future)


You, My Calliope

Every night
I sleep beside you
but wake up alone

It is futile
to chase you
from my waking mind
for you invade my dreams

Day slips by
when I forget your name
Time stands still
when I pine for you

Every day
I wake up alone
but sleep beside you
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Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul


最后进行编辑的是 ericcoliu on 星期五 二月 06, 2009 8:51 am, 总计第 9 次编辑
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帖子发表于: 星期一 十二月 01, 2008 5:03 pm    发表主题: 引用并回复

You, My Calliope is my reply to 温暖的水獸's I and Calliope in Harmonious Rapture



温暖的水獸 写到:


A throbbing agony
caressed by your tongue.
Moans and pain
born to your laughter
raised in your tears.

Time and silence.
Clocks ticking.

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帖子发表于: 星期二 十二月 02, 2008 2:53 pm    发表主题: 引用并回复

温暖的水獸 写到:


A throbbing agony
caressed by your tongue.
Moans and pain
born to your laughter
raised in your tears.

Time and silence.
Clocks ticking.
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ericcoliu 写到:


It is futile
to chase you out
of my waking mind
when you invade my dreams

Day slips by
when I forget your name
Time stands still
when I think of you



I see the conflicting powers of Calliope portrayed in these two poems.

What you did in your poem is to de-sensualize the multiple meanings of Calliope.
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舌頭那匹温暖的水獸 馴養地在小小的水族箱中 蠕動
那獸說:是的 我願意
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帖子发表于: 星期三 十二月 03, 2008 11:06 am    发表主题: 引用并回复

温暖的水獸 写到:


What you did in your poem is to de-sensualize the multiple meanings of Calliope.


You read too much of yourself into my poem.

I’m interesting in engaging in your Poetics of Intercourse.
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帖子发表于: 星期四 十二月 04, 2008 10:28 am    发表主题: 引用并回复

ericcoliu 写到:
温暖的水獸 写到:


What you did in your poem is to de-sensualize the multiple meanings of Calliope.


You read too much of yourself into my poem.

I’m interesting in engaging in your Poetics of Intercourse.


WOW! Brilliantly hypertexted comments.

The repetition of the first stanza and its variation heighten the emotional impact of the poem.
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WOW! Brilliantly hypertexted comments.

The repetition of the first stanza and its variation heighten the emotional impact of the poem.


That’s my intent.

Thanks for being so generous in your compliments.
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帖子发表于: 星期六 十二月 06, 2008 1:48 pm    发表主题: Re: You, My Calliope 引用并回复

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You, My Calliope

It is futile
to chase you out
of my waking mind
when you invade my dreams

Day slips by
when I forget your name
Time stands still
when I think of you



Upon second reading, I felt the increasing push and pull of that experience again
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帖子发表于: 星期四 十二月 11, 2008 4:31 pm    发表主题: Re: You, My Calliope 引用并回复

Hi! Eric:

Thank you so much for pouring out your secrets on the page -- the poem.


ericcoliu 写到:
Reading, Writing, and Life on the Page


You, My Calliope

It is futile
to chase you out
of
my waking mind
when you invade my dreams



My suggestion is as follows:

It is futile
to chase you
from my waking mind
for you invade my dreams
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舌頭那匹温暖的水獸 馴養地在小小的水族箱中 蠕動
那獸說:是的 我願意
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帖子发表于: 星期五 十二月 12, 2008 12:18 am    发表主题: 引用并回复

Thanks for your helpful suggestions. I've made some revisions to my poem.
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帖子发表于: 星期六 十二月 27, 2008 2:38 pm    发表主题: 引用并回复

The meaning of Calliope is multidimensional in your poem. It could be the name of the one loved by the narrator or the name of the Chief Muse.
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浴恩福 写到:
The meaning of Calliope is multidimensional in your poem. It could be the name of the one loved by the narrator or the name of the Chief Muse.


Yes, a sharp eye for my poem.

Below is the reply from my poet friend, Gary Blankenship:

Our muse, shared among many.

Well read, Chen-ou

She demands I sing
though most notes crack
She demands I pen
though most ink spills

I give in the vain hope
she will love me this day
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帖子发表于: 星期三 一月 21, 2009 12:29 am    发表主题: 引用并回复

You, My Calliope will be published in the February issue of Word
Catalyst. The following is the email from the Editor:

Hello Chen,

I would like to schedule two of your poems for the February issue of Word
Catalyst. The two I have chosen are "My Foreign Anguish" and "You, My
Calliope". Please feel free to send a brief bio to accompany your work.

Thank you,

Shirley Allard, publisher/editor
Word Catalyst Magazine

An online magazine located at
http://www.wordcatalystmagazine.com
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帖子发表于: 星期四 一月 22, 2009 9:50 pm    发表主题: 引用并回复

Below are the replies from poet friends at another forum:


Your poem touches on the love and loneliness in life in a succinct way, that we can be alone in a crowd and still find that one person for that one moment that we can socialize with and find happiness, this leads to sleeping alone, with your love.

-- Rodney L. Eisenbrandt

Beautiful and bleak, like a snowstorm.
You waste no words.

-- Dale McLain
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