酷我-北美枫

[Lake]

1
as I rake the backyard
a dog answers
from the picket fence

2
long lines of vehicles
crawling in the morning -
first November snow

3
physical therapy
I rest my arm
in a stranger's hand

4
just the chair and table
blooms and gardener long gone -
November noon

5
leaves rustle
a farewell song
to a quiet pond

6
blue stem grasses
turn their heads silver in
late autumn wind

7
cries in the sky
geese overhead, how swiftly
they're gone!

8
memories of you
grow stronger
as autumn deepens

9
in dreams
my tears
wet the pillowcase

10
a crow perches
atop a pine tree –
autumn's end

.

[[Lake]]

1
as I rake the backyard
a dog answers
from the picket fence

2
long lines of vehicles
crawling in the morning -
first November snow

3
physical therapy
I rest my arm
in a stranger's hand

4
just the chair and table
blooms and gardener long gone -
November noon

5
leaves rustle
a farewell song
to a quiet pond

6
blue stem grasses
turn their heads silver in
late autumn wind

7
cries in the sky
geese overhead, how swiftly
they're gone!

8
memories of you
grow stronger
as autumn deepens

9
in dreams
my tears
wet the pillowcase

10
a crow perches
atop a pine tree –
autumn's end

.

[星子]

Hi Lake

I like 2, 8 ,10.
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[[ANNA]]

Hi Lake

I like 2, 8 ,10.
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[Champagne]

I like your haiku sequence, which chiefly conveys a deep, autumnal tone.

Poem 5 is my favorite one. I love the verb of your choice: rustle.
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Bottled poetry with sparkling joy.

[[Champagne]]

I like your haiku sequence, which chiefly conveys a deep, autumnal tone.

Poem 5 is my favorite one. I love the verb of your choice: rustle.
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I'm Champagne,
Bottled poetry with sparkling joy.

[浴恩福]

[[浴恩福]]

[christine]

[[christine]]

[Lake]

Thanks 星子 and Champagne.

Once in a while I'd like to go back to this form to sharpen my sense. I'm still struggling with the turn or aha moment for haiku is not merely a three-line poem.

Thanks for the read and comment.

Lake

[[Lake]]

Thanks 星子 and Champagne.

Once in a while I'd like to go back to this form to sharpen my sense. I'm still struggling with the turn or aha moment for haiku is not merely a three-line poem.

Thanks for the read and comment.

Lake

[Lake]

[[Lake]]

[Lake]

[[Lake]]

[川生]

Generally speaking, the imagery of your poem sequence is appealing.


I like poem 10, which reveals a sense of loneliness.
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Lines go off in all directions.

[[川生]]

Generally speaking, the imagery of your poem sequence is appealing.


I like poem 10, which reveals a sense of loneliness.
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Lines go off in all directions.

[Lake]

[[Lake]]

[连南河]

"诗情画意"
I like 1 to 10

[[FAFAFA]]

"诗情画意"
I like 1 to 10