酷我-北美枫

非马 · 发表于: 星期六七月 12, 2008 2:22 pm 发表主题:

I must admit I am a poor student of history. I didn't even pay attention to your earlier version. Anyway, I think I like 1. into your autumn window.
Nothing wrong with two windows together. In fact, they sound great.

Lake · 发表于: 星期六七月 12, 2008 6:26 pm 发表主题:

改回去。是不是弄巧成拙了？ Embarassed

温暖的水獸 · 发表于: 星期一七月 14, 2008 12:28 pm 发表主题:

May I ask what the key difference between these two versions is?
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舌頭那匹温暖的水獸　馴養地在小小的水族箱中　蠕動
那獸說：是的我願意

Lake · 发表于: 星期一七月 14, 2008 3:32 pm 发表主题: