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 发表于: 星期二 六月 03, 2008 9:39 am 发表主题: A Crack in the Edge of the World |
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A Crack in the Edge of the World co-written by ericcoliu
A Crack
In the Edge of the World --
Time crawling indifferently,
Lives withering away,
Hearts worn out.
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Don't imitate me;
it's as boring
as the two halves of a melon.
最后进行编辑的是 fanfan on 星期四 五月 21, 2009 3:37 pm, 总计第 2 次编辑 |
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温暖的水獸[温暖的水獸]
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| 发表于: 星期二 六月 03, 2008 1:27 pm 发表主题: Re: A Crack in the Edge of the World |
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| fanfan 写到: | A Crack in the Edge of the World
A Crack
In the Edge of the World --
Time crawling indifferently,
Lives fading away,
Hearts worn out. |
Time and the suffering survivors stuck in piles of debris are indifferent to one another.
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舌頭那匹温暖的水獸 馴養地在小小的水族箱中 蠕動
那獸說：是的 我願意 |
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浴恩福[浴恩福]
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| 发表于: 星期二 六月 03, 2008 2:24 pm 发表主题: Re: A Crack in the Edge of the World |
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| 温暖的水獸 写到: |
Time and the suffering survivors stuck in piles of debris are indifferent to one another. |
A sharp eye and insightful observation.
| fanfan 写到: | A Crack in the Edge of the World
A Crack
In the Edge of the World --
Time crawling indifferently,
Lives fading away,
Hearts worn out. |
Yes, with the passage of time, anguished hearts have been being worn out.
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報三恩、耕三大福田 |
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fanfan[FFFFFF]
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| 发表于: 星期二 六月 03, 2008 9:03 pm 发表主题: Re: A Crack in the Edge of the World |
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| 浴恩福 写到: | | 温暖的水獸 写到: |
Time and the suffering survivors stuck in piles of debris are indifferent to one another. |
A sharp eye and insightful observation.
| fanfan 写到: | A Crack in the Edge of the World
A Crack
In the Edge of the World --
Time crawling indifferently,
Lives fading away,
Hearts worn out. |
Yes, with the passage of time, anguished hearts have been being worn out. |
Yes, I agree with both of you.
To the anguished parents, the gears of the relief work grind ever so slowly.
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Don't imitate me;
it's as boring
as the two halves of a melon. |
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christine[christine]
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| 发表于: 星期三 六月 04, 2008 10:02 am 发表主题: Re: A Crack in the Edge of the World |
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A Crack in the Edge of the World
A Crack
In the Edge of the World --
Time crawling indifferently,
Lives fading away,
Hearts worn out. |
In my view, "Lives withering away" would be better.
Because the suffering children would disappear like a flower in the field...in the midst of rubble, they will wither away. |
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fanfan[FFFFFF]
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| 发表于: 星期三 六月 04, 2008 4:05 pm 发表主题: Re: A Crack in the Edge of the World |
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| christine 写到: |
In my view, "Lives withering away" would be better.
Because the suffering children would disappear like a flower in the field...in the midst of rubble, they will wither away. |
I'll think about your suggestion. Thanks for the suggestion.
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Don't imitate me;
it's as boring
as the two halves of a melon. |
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fanfan[FAFAFA]
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| 发表于: 星期五 六月 06, 2008 7:35 am 发表主题: Re: A Crack in the Edge of the World |
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| christine 写到: |
In my view, "Lives withering away" would be better.
Because the suffering children would disappear like a flower in the field...in the midst of rubble, they will wither away. |
Yes, you're right. I've revised my piece.
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Don't imitate me;
it's as boring
as the two halves of a melon. |
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| 发表于: 星期日 六月 08, 2008 1:45 pm 发表主题: Re: A Crack in the Edge of the World |
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A Crack in the Edge of the World
A Crack
In the Edge of the World --
Time crawling indifferently,
Lives withering away,
Hearts worn out. |
A crack? I think there are the gorges of the parted ground.
I hope there is a renewed hope for the worn-out hearts.
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I came, I saw, and I conquered |
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