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anna[星子安娜]
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 发表于: 星期四 三月 13, 2008 8:50 am 发表主题: On the Deathbed |
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Now they all come to see you
and say nice words they never think of.
Their deep remorse confuses you,
What do they regret?
But you only regret
a simple fact:
one battle seems to be a century long.
Who won?
you close your eyes.
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《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
<Nightlights> <Seven Nights with the Chinese Zodiac> ...
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ericcoliu[ericcoliu]
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| 发表于: 星期五 三月 14, 2008 3:46 pm 发表主题: Re: On the Deathbed |
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A modern deathbed song. Good try.
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Who won?
you close your eyes. |
Before you close your eyes, you ask the following two questions:
What have we done to thee, thou monstrous Time?
What have we done to Death that we must die?
-- The Two Highwaymen by Wilfrid Scawen Blunt
My review of it is posted at http://coviews.com/viewtopic.php?t=36652
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to say nice words they never think of.
Their deep remorse confuse you,
one battle seems to a century long.
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I think it would be better to re-write them as follows:
and say nice words they never think of.
Their deep remorse confuses you,
one battle seems to be a century long.
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hahaview[hahaview]
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| 发表于: 星期五 三月 14, 2008 4:42 pm 发表主题: Re: On the Deathbed |
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But you only regret
a simple fact:
one battle seems to a century long.
Who won?
you close your eyes. |
Life is a battle between nothingness and meaning in which each feeds upon the other, drawing sustenance from it and destroying it.
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星子[ANNA]
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| 发表于: 星期五 三月 14, 2008 7:49 pm 发表主题: |
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Thank you, Eric.
Yes. You are right. I will revise it.
Anna
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星子[ANNA]
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hahaview, Thanks.
True, Life is full of battles.
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christine[christine]
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| 发表于: 星期六 三月 15, 2008 9:20 am 发表主题: Re: On the Deathbed |
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But you only regret
a simple fact:
one battle seems to a century long.
Who won?
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A battle against whom or what?
and who is the judge? |
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anna[星子安娜]
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| 发表于: 星期日 三月 16, 2008 8:04 pm 发表主题: Re: On the Deathbed |
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But you only regret
a simple fact:
one battle seems to a century long.
Who won?
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A battle against whom or what?
and who is the judge? |
This is up to readers.
Thanks for asking . . .
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《爱的灯塔-星子安娜双语诗选》
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星子[ANNA]
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| 发表于: 星期六 四月 05, 2008 9:45 am 发表主题: |
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From Penshell,
Deathbeds have a way of trolling all the emotions to the surface--forgive and be forgiven, regret, shame, blame and the host of bad winds that follows. Then sometimes old wounds are healed and there is closure.
You poem made me think Anna. An honest look inside an intimate gathering.
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