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星子 · 发表于: 星期一三月 10, 2008 9:08 pm 发表主题: Game is over

Many voices, loud,
approach to declare,
to rise and make judgment

We become ignored --
Having been waiting so long,
those thunders lost in the distance . . .

What is useful
to harvest the crops,
when no value left after cutting?

We let go of them
those voices that claim
their victory.
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ericcoliu · 发表于: 星期一三月 10, 2008 11:10 pm 发表主题: Re: Game is over

Champagne · 发表于: 星期二三月 11, 2008 8:08 am 发表主题: Re: Game is over

An interesting title.
Which game do you refer to? the power game of criticism?

星子 · 发表于: 星期二三月 11, 2008 8:16 am 发表主题:

Hi Eric,

Thanks for suggestion.

Irgore, I emit the object, it is the voices...

BTW, the game is no win for every one.
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Lake · 发表于: 星期二三月 11, 2008 4:13 pm 发表主题:

星子,

As the title suggests it should be a powerful poem, but I am afraid because of your expressions it lacks the clarity and I failed to grasp the theme of this poem. Here is my two cents:

星子 · 发表于: 星期二三月 11, 2008 4:29 pm 发表主题:

Hi Lake,

Thanks.

This is a confusing poem, I am still trying to figure out how to express and what do I want to reveal . . .
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