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maybe · 发表于: 星期四一月 03, 2008 11:31 am 发表主题: I have a view—

I have a view—

And I want to say these to you
The flowers have changed
The trees have changed
The grasses have changed
Between blinks my views have changed

I know, it is 2008
So wheat? if the spring had not changed
The system is doing OK, drive a car
China is hosting the Olympics
I hope the sky is clear that day and the

Windshield has a poem we all understand
When will a poet be heard in the great hall
With a little accent sounds eco-poetic
TVs will be flashing dashing egos
The crowd will be dancing rituals, so what

Scholars are studying transculturals
People are singing Europeanized thoughts
Things got lost are not just poetry
Thing got recreated are not just corn fuel
To sigh or not to sigh: Poïesis garden out of sight

I Know a Man - Robert Creeley

As I sd to my
friend, because I am
always talking,—John, I

sd, which was not his
name, the darkness sur-
rounds us, what

can we do against
it, or else, shall we &
why not, buy a goddamn big car,

drive, he sd, for
christ’s sake, look
out where yr going.
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星子 · 发表于: 星期四一月 03, 2008 11:38 am 发表主题:

Welcome new friend.

Some words I am not sure. I will come back to see how others view it.
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Lake · 发表于: 星期四一月 03, 2008 11:56 am 发表主题:

Very well crafted! Will be back for further reading.

Best,

Lake

星子 · 发表于: 星期四一月 03, 2008 12:24 pm 发表主题:

Your poems have good points and thoughts.

So wheat? so what? some typo?
why use sd not said?
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ericcoliu · 发表于: 星期四一月 03, 2008 5:14 pm 发表主题: Re: I have a view—

maybe · 发表于: 星期五一月 04, 2008 1:54 pm 发表主题:

thanks.

The great hall is raining—

Raining with a rhythm tip-o-dip
No, I won’t get you—
I’ll play a radio to your tempo
Vocals, must have—oh no

Me taken. I was reading your semiotics
On the face page of the pool where
Diagonal reflections woven
Riddled into Louis’s trumpeted cords

The chandelier may have frightened many
A ghost. The podium could have inspired lives
In between, semantic pendants and
The great hall is raining

There are so many rooms
Why you choose to stay there
Stay alone, there, you choose
As if the rains the spring sprouts
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ericcoliu · 发表于: 星期五一月 04, 2008 4:54 pm 发表主题: Re: I have a view—

maybe · 发表于: 星期六一月 05, 2008 9:19 pm 发表主题:

Getting to a subway

On a bright express car, modern graffiti --
Nails painted in dirt black (a vanity salon in thought)
The <Les Fleurs du mal> beneath (tattoos
on the most sensitive tongue: like taboos?)
There’s this smooth skin, healthy, while her life at 18 --

Pigeon bombs. Dali distresses people,
The private part of the cat of the deepest dye
Pessoa perplexes the public,
Loneliness gives birth to one split and Nihilism

Matchmaking blood-stopping poisonous weeds and
Colorectal cancer; in the melting-pot department
parasites, protein sentries, and intestines nest in a Casablanca.
And fanatics? Brook not a case of eyes of the beholders
"The ancients are not all sincere," sands, in the hourglass
。。。
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A crowd much the same; go back and forth till bottoms up.
Devourers breaking the chariot, the latter then slowly swallows.
To this rush, we squeeze through the door. . .

(“The sands are numb'red that makes up my life" Shakespeare.)
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星子 · 发表于: 星期日一月 06, 2008 10:41 am 发表主题:

很有才呀....你是谁呢?
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maybe · 发表于: 星期一一月 07, 2008 3:57 pm 发表主题:

Lake · 发表于: 星期二一月 08, 2008 2:31 pm 发表主题:

The use of enjambment, maybe, enhanced the fluidity of your poems, very refreshing.

maybe · 发表于: 星期二一月 08, 2008 8:12 pm 发表主题: Re: I have a view—