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[井底的石子]

A war playing
Love creep along
Solidier zipping
Deer wander throgh the grass
Sounds and Voices
spread like wildfire
Bullets whizzing
Swallows are darting
through the air
Jets zooming
Meteors shot
across the sky
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我的心一如古井，
一记石子激起的声音，
再响，也只是井自己的绝唱！
你说-------我要涟漪在整个心里漾！
你要的只是那短暫的震荡？
你说--------不，我是那记石子
留在你心底最深处。

[[凊]]

A war playing
Love creep along
Solidier zipping
Deer wander throgh the grass
Sounds and Voices
spread like wildfire
Bullets whizzing
Swallows are darting
through the air
Jets zooming
Meteors shot
across the sky
_________________
我的心一如古井，
一记石子激起的声音，
再响，也只是井自己的绝唱！
你说-------我要涟漪在整个心里漾！
你要的只是那短暫的震荡？
你说--------不，我是那记石子
留在你心底最深处。

[Lake]

Hi 石子,

I find your use of verbs interesting, mainly -ing form and present tense are used interchangeably.

Welcome on board!

Lake

[[Lake]]

Hi 石子,

I find your use of verbs interesting, mainly -ing form and present tense are used interchangeably.

Welcome on board!

Lake

[井底的石子]

thanks for your reply,huh,for it is my maiden work,I can't express me freely now, maybe it has some mistakes,so i hope i can learn to write here ,and please give me advice if you would like to do ,thanks again
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我的心一如古井，
一记石子激起的声音，
再响，也只是井自己的绝唱！
你说-------我要涟漪在整个心里漾！
你要的只是那短暫的震荡？
你说--------不，我是那记石子
留在你心底最深处。

[[凊]]

thanks for your reply,huh,for it is my maiden work,I can't express me freely now, maybe it has some mistakes,so i hope i can learn to write here ,and please give me advice if you would like to do ,thanks again
_________________
我的心一如古井，
一记石子激起的声音，
再响，也只是井自己的绝唱！
你说-------我要涟漪在整个心里漾！
你要的只是那短暫的震荡？
你说--------不，我是那记石子
留在你心底最深处。

[星子]

Deer wander throgh the grass

---Deers wander through the grass

I feel you can add more flesh inside your vivid images...
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[[ANNA]]

Deer wander throgh the grass

---Deers wander through the grass

I feel you can add more flesh inside your vivid images...
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