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ericcoliu[ericcoliu] ericcoliu作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2007-05-29 帖子: 1393 来自: GTA, Canada
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发表于: 星期四 二月 19, 2009 9:20 am 发表主题: The Rainbow Balloons Man |
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Reading and Writing: Life on the Page
The Rainbow Balloons Man
Soaked from the rain,
tears brimming in her eyes,
she knocks on his door.
He invites her in,
asking nothing because he knows
she needs mental rest.
Taking an offered towel,
she unexpectedly tells him,
He didn't come back.
Who?
The rainbow balloons man,
she yells out. My folks promised
he would come back.
In the back of his mind, he thinks,
Again, this decades-old broken promise!
Nettled by his unresponsiveness,
she asks, Didn’t your folks promise you anything
when you were a child?
My parents are war survivors;
so I never asked anything from them.
Oh, you're second generation.
We're all second generation of something. Anyway,
don't worry! He'll be come back.
Who?
The rainbow balloons man. I promise. _________________ Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul |
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川生[川生] 川生作品集 七品按察司 (我开始管这里的事儿了)
注册时间: 2008-09-18 帖子: 72
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发表于: 星期四 二月 19, 2009 1:42 pm 发表主题: |
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ericcoliu 写到: |
My parents are war survivors;
so I never asked anything from them.
Oh, you're second generation.
We're all second generation of something. |
These lines are my favorite part of the poem.
The rainbow balloons man takes on a metaphoric significance in the poem. _________________ Lines go off in all directions. |
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ericcoliu[ericcoliu] ericcoliu作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2007-05-29 帖子: 1393 来自: GTA, Canada
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发表于: 星期四 二月 19, 2009 9:27 pm 发表主题: |
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川生 写到: |
These lines are my favorite part of the poem.
The rainbow balloons man takes on a metaphoric significance in the poem. |
Thanks for your discerning eye for my poem.
These lines reveal one of the key themes explored in my poem.
Yes, the rainbow balloons man is a metaphor for the primal innocence and beauty of childhood memories. _________________ Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul |
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christine[christine] christine作品集 四品府丞 (封疆大吏也!)
注册时间: 2008-02-25 帖子: 304
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发表于: 星期五 二月 20, 2009 7:49 pm 发表主题: Re: The Rainbow Balloons Man |
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ericcoliu 写到: |
Didn’t your folks promise you anything
when you were a child?
My parents are war survivors;
so I never asked anything from them.
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A sharply contrasting difference in upbringing between characters.
ericcoliu 写到: |
Anyway,
don't worry! He'll be come back.
Who?
The rainbow balloons man. I promise. |
Making another hard promise to keep? |
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ericcoliu[ericcoliu] ericcoliu作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2007-05-29 帖子: 1393 来自: GTA, Canada
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发表于: 星期六 二月 21, 2009 4:01 pm 发表主题: Re: The Rainbow Balloons Man |
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christine 写到: |
ericcoliu 写到: |
Didn’t your folks promise you anything
when you were a child?
My parents are war survivors;
so I never asked anything from them.
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A sharply contrasting difference in upbringing between characters.
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Yes.
christine 写到: |
ericcoliu 写到: |
Anyway,
don't worry! He'll be come back.
Who?
The rainbow balloons man. I promise. |
Making another hard promise to keep? |
Did you really think a man who "never asked anything from [his parents]" would make a promise so easily? _________________ Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul |
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agincourt[agincourt] agincourt作品集 九品县令 (一不小心,做了官儿了。)
注册时间: 2009-01-24 帖子: 15
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发表于: 星期一 二月 23, 2009 1:47 pm 发表主题: Re: The Rainbow Balloons Man |
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ericcoliu 写到: |
Did you really think a man who "never asked anything from [his parents]" would make a promise so easily? |
So, did you mean that "he" would help restore "her confidence" in relationships or trust? _________________ Napped half the day;
no one
punished me! |
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ericcoliu[ericcoliu] ericcoliu作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2007-05-29 帖子: 1393 来自: GTA, Canada
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发表于: 星期三 二月 25, 2009 8:24 am 发表主题: Re: The Rainbow Balloons Man |
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So, did you mean that "he" would help restore "her confidence" in relationships or trust? |
Read in the context of my poem, I would say "sympathy or empathy" would help restore her confidence in relationships or trust.
ericcoliu 写到: |
Soaked from the rain,
tears brimming in her eyes,
she knocks on his door.
He invites her in,
asking nothing because he knows
she needs mental rest.
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_________________ Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul |
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