酷我-北美枫

星子 · 酷我！I made it！ 注册时间: 2004-06-05 帖子: 13192 来自: Toronto

Sometimes I am really blind
blind to see
no color,
no flowers,
no sunlight.

no taste to wine,
to spring,
to summer lavender.

sometimes...

such a feeling is
a floating cloud,
cannot bring anything,
nor fall anywhere...

such a feeling...
beyond the place
whoever can touch

such a feeling...

icecanadaice · 发表于: 星期四二月 17, 2005 1:10 pm 发表主题:

当每个人渡过了这个时期,一定会向朋友们说声谢谢你们!

何兆龙 · 发表于: 星期四二月 17, 2005 1:27 pm 发表主题:

It is quite ok of course.
But can u tell us why u think it is a new style? comapre with what?

星子 · 发表于: 星期四二月 17, 2005 1:33 pm 发表主题:

何兆龙 · 发表于: 星期四二月 17, 2005 3:48 pm 发表主题:

of course it is. Poem doesn't always need complete sentences, 跳跃，省略，欲说还休，都是诗的一部分。

星子 · 发表于: 星期四二月 17, 2005 5:07 pm 发表主题:

Thanks ICE. Hope you well. the same blesses to you.

Thanks 2000 Dragon. You are right, This also valued by western.
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白水 · 发表于: 星期四二月 17, 2005 8:36 pm 发表主题:

和平岛 · 发表于: 星期四二月 17, 2005 9:27 pm 发表主题:

要勇于创新, 好
灵动起来

星子 · 发表于: 星期四二月 17, 2005 10:35 pm 发表主题:

Thank you all.

such a feeling... a deep sigh from my heart.
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星子 · 发表于: 星期三二月 23, 2005 11:41 pm 发表主题:

Here is the comments from Western people.

http://www.voicesnet.com/cgi-bin/yabb/YaBB.pl?board=critlove;action=display;num=1108668890
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