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温暖的水獸 · 发表于: 星期二十二月 02, 2008 2:55 pm 发表主题: S e x Talk

S e x Talk

I

out of solitariness, I get inside you

II

taking off clothes, we fully engage in conversation

Note:

I demand ericcoliu to be the co-author of this piece.
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舌頭那匹温暖的水獸　馴養地在小小的水族箱中　蠕動
那獸說：是的我願意

ericcoliu · 发表于: 星期三十二月 03, 2008 11:02 am 发表主题:

A poignant poem on Love and Desire with a thought-evoking title.

christine · 发表于: 星期四十二月 04, 2008 10:27 am 发表主题:

I love poem I best.

Condition-setting is Harper-esque.

川生 · 发表于: 星期五十二月 05, 2008 10:46 am 发表主题:

I like poem II best, especially the adverb "fully."

By the way, the title is intriguing.
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Lines go off in all directions.

温暖的水獸 · 发表于: 星期四十二月 11, 2008 4:33 pm 发表主题:

christine · 发表于: 星期五十二月 12, 2008 1:52 pm 发表主题:

温暖的水獸 · 发表于: 星期一十二月 15, 2008 12:45 pm 发表主题:

ericcoliu · 发表于: 星期一十二月 22, 2008 7:10 pm 发表主题:

Your new title reveals a comically satirical tone of subtlety, which fits well with the theme explored in the poem.
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Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul

dundas · 发表于: 星期二十二月 23, 2008 10:10 am 发表主题:

Below is my poetic reply:

I Met you

First eye to eye,
then hand upon hand,
mouth to mouth,
and eventually
feet across feet --
I met you.
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My throat knew thirst before the structure
Of skin and vein around the well

温暖的水獸 · 发表于: 星期一一月 26, 2009 5:30 pm 发表主题:

Thanks for your sensually poetic reply. I like it
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舌頭那匹温暖的水獸　馴養地在小小的水族箱中　蠕動
那獸說：是的我願意

agincourt · 发表于: 星期四一月 29, 2009 2:35 pm 发表主题: Re: S e x Talk

温暖的水獸 · 发表于: 星期四二月 05, 2009 1:30 pm 发表主题: Re: S e x Talk